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Legible writing, although not perfect. Interesting storyline, with no flaws found so far. His system is not instantaneous OP, although I feel frustrated in his place to see sss rank abilities and cannot be extracted. The only problem I encounter in this story is the low number of chapters and the relatively slow release rate. The fact that the chapter is not very big also only worsens this delay.
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its nice but is this dropped???........................................................................................................................................................................................................
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are you stopping updating this story? 🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔😙🤔🤔😙🤔😙😙😙😙😙🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔
One Piece story were the Main Character is a Marine! (Really not enough of these kinds of stories) In my personal opinion this story is: Excellently Done!!!
I like how the story is focusing on his current powers instead of him being a jack of all trades, master of nothing. Also the fights are awsome. The only thing I see that needs improving is grammer, but thats all. All in all its a great story good job. Thank you
*POSSIBLE TRIGGER WARNING* Alright I wanna make this quick.. The idea is ok barely passable. the writing quality is. .horrifying by American standards. (from my opinion so *TRIGGER WARNING*) Most of the reviews are most likely people who understand this broken english and or relate to it. P. S I am bad at arguing so don't start anything up you will only get a response more like a 11 year old or something brain development with some weird brain functioning.
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THANKS FOR THE NEW CHAPTER BRUHHH!!! ................................................................................................................
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Very good story, I like. the main character is really cool and i like the system. The story is regularly updated that's good. I hope it will continue.
👍👍👍👍waiting for the next story 😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏💪💪💪💪💪💪💪💪💪💪💪💪💪💪💪💪💪💪💪💪💪💪💪💪💪💪
It reads more like a chinese fantasy novel. If it werent for some of the names being guys from One Piece you wouldnt actually know it was One Piece.
very good story I really like how you put work into the chapters you do thank you for everything and please don't stop your story like the others
i found the system interesting, the grammar is good. But, there is thing that are not in the one piece universe (the sword intent and aura bullshit), the mc is (like in chinese novel) a proud guy who enjoy humiliating is opponent, and the reaction of the other character feel... empty (like in almost every chinese novel)
I love that you actually translated this yourself And That It is readable and Not just some google teanslation copy and paste.😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋
The story seem quite good although the grammar is quite horrible but still manageable to read... So just improve your grammar and you are good to go[img=recommend]
un poco repetitivo todo pero me gusta tu traducción es agradable de leer .............................................................................................
I personally love this and im pretty sure that other people would to this is a easy to read op mc and yeah i just like it ............ . . . . ... . .. . ..... . .
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So far this book is good. i love reading this book so much. Author is publishing chapter in consistency. The character is damn cool. i wounder how the story will go.
Legible writing, although not perfect. Interesting storyline, with no flaws found so far. His system is not instantaneous OP, although I feel frustrated in his place to see sss rank abilities and cannot be extracted. The only problem I encounter in this story is the low number of chapters and the relatively slow release rate. The fact that the chapter is not very big also only worsens this delay.
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its nice but is this dropped???........................................................................................................................................................................................................
MORE MORE MORE MORE MOREMORE MORE MORE MORE MOREMORE MORE MORE MORE MOREMORE MORE MORE MORE MOREMORE MORE MORE MORE MOREMORE MORE MORE MORE MOREMORE MORE MORE MORE MOREMORE MORE MORE MORE MOREMORE MORE MORE MORE MORE
are you stopping updating this story? 🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔😙🤔🤔😙🤔😙😙😙😙😙🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔
One Piece story were the Main Character is a Marine! (Really not enough of these kinds of stories) In my personal opinion this story is: Excellently Done!!!
I like how the story is focusing on his current powers instead of him being a jack of all trades, master of nothing. Also the fights are awsome. The only thing I see that needs improving is grammer, but thats all. All in all its a great story good job. Thank you
*POSSIBLE TRIGGER WARNING* Alright I wanna make this quick.. The idea is ok barely passable. the writing quality is. .horrifying by American standards. (from my opinion so *TRIGGER WARNING*) Most of the reviews are most likely people who understand this broken english and or relate to it. P. S I am bad at arguing so don't start anything up you will only get a response more like a 11 year old or something brain development with some weird brain functioning.
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THANKS FOR THE NEW CHAPTER BRUHHH!!! ................................................................................................................
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Very good story, I like. the main character is really cool and i like the system. The story is regularly updated that's good. I hope it will continue.
👍👍👍👍waiting for the next story 😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏💪💪💪💪💪💪💪💪💪💪💪💪💪💪💪💪💪💪💪💪💪💪💪💪💪💪
It reads more like a chinese fantasy novel. If it werent for some of the names being guys from One Piece you wouldnt actually know it was One Piece.
very good story I really like how you put work into the chapters you do thank you for everything and please don't stop your story like the others
i found the system interesting, the grammar is good. But, there is thing that are not in the one piece universe (the sword intent and aura bullshit), the mc is (like in chinese novel) a proud guy who enjoy humiliating is opponent, and the reaction of the other character feel... empty (like in almost every chinese novel)
I love that you actually translated this yourself And That It is readable and Not just some google teanslation copy and paste.😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋
The story seem quite good although the grammar is quite horrible but still manageable to read... So just improve your grammar and you are good to go[img=recommend]
un poco repetitivo todo pero me gusta tu traducción es agradable de leer .............................................................................................
I personally love this and im pretty sure that other people would to this is a easy to read op mc and yeah i just like it ............ . . . . ... . .. . ..... . .
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揭示劇透 Power levels are totally mixed. —————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————— ——————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————
So far this book is good. i love reading this book so much. Author is publishing chapter in consistency. The character is damn cool. i wounder how the story will go.