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I love the novel it's amazing the only thing is I wish for you to release more and move up the passing of time a little it feels like only 3days have passed since the beginning I mean what about school, vacation or going to the mall, beach he's a teenager and he hasn't left the house yet in 58 chapters and even if he doesn't feel confident about doing stuff outside it helps progress incase writers block *hint* *hint*
At sixty chapter the mc cannot control the house .... to slow progress[img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
I see da seggs i see da seggs i liek huhuhuhu 100/5 words words wordswords words wordswords words wordswords words wordswords words wordswords words wordswords words wordswords words wordswords words words
keep updating Thor, and the storyline is expanded, for example school arc, teacher, friends with their mother (oyakodon). Thank you[img=recommend]
Getting better and better still it would be nce if pictures of the girld wuold be added
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Burn this pile of trash. Half of the reviews were probably made by the author with different accounts. The other half are 5 year olds with weird fetishes. (emoji spam and terrible use of punctuation intensifies)
BOYS AND GIRLS HERE ARE THE RATINGS FOR THIS NOVEL Spoiler the novel contains some....grammatical errors but it can be ignored as it does not render the book unreadable. The Overall plot is actually pretty good, its like the game "nano-control" it has its tiny but unique way of writing on how mc approaches ....the women. Thats all fun read really
I like the story ......................................................................................................................................
Author's best work yet, just wish they didn't divide their time between two novels..........................................................
it is one of the best novel I have read in those type of novel and the only other good book I found apart from it is the incubus system .I will highly recommend it.
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So far its been good but it doe’t update very often if that makes sense gbdgbffbdgbd*dgbdgbgdd*grbgdbdgbrgbgrbgrbgrgbrgbrgb
the story is good, but this should go to novel category, not a fan fiction. literally make a misunderstanding for new readers. . .. .. .. .. ..
this is art!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! .......................................................................................................................................
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Good novel with some nice story development, can't argue more[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
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I love the novel it's amazing the only thing is I wish for you to release more and move up the passing of time a little it feels like only 3days have passed since the beginning I mean what about school, vacation or going to the mall, beach he's a teenager and he hasn't left the house yet in 58 chapters and even if he doesn't feel confident about doing stuff outside it helps progress incase writers block *hint* *hint*
At sixty chapter the mc cannot control the house .... to slow progress[img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
I see da seggs i see da seggs i liek huhuhuhu 100/5 words words wordswords words wordswords words wordswords words wordswords words wordswords words wordswords words wordswords words wordswords words words
keep updating Thor, and the storyline is expanded, for example school arc, teacher, friends with their mother (oyakodon). Thank you[img=recommend]
Getting better and better still it would be nce if pictures of the girld wuold be added
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Gostei por favor posta mais aí kskskskskskskskksksbzjsjdjdjndndndndndndnmdjdjdjsjsjdkdkjdjdjdjdkdjdjjdjdjdjdjdkdjdjaí Blablablablablablablablablablablablabal albalbalabalnalablabalanamjdkdnd
Burn this pile of trash. Half of the reviews were probably made by the author with different accounts. The other half are 5 year olds with weird fetishes. (emoji spam and terrible use of punctuation intensifies)
BOYS AND GIRLS HERE ARE THE RATINGS FOR THIS NOVEL Spoiler the novel contains some....grammatical errors but it can be ignored as it does not render the book unreadable. The Overall plot is actually pretty good, its like the game "nano-control" it has its tiny but unique way of writing on how mc approaches ....the women. Thats all fun read really
I like the story ......................................................................................................................................
Author's best work yet, just wish they didn't divide their time between two novels..........................................................
it is one of the best novel I have read in those type of novel and the only other good book I found apart from it is the incubus system .I will highly recommend it.
Moreeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeereeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee
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So far its been good but it doe’t update very often if that makes sense gbdgbffbdgbd*dgbdgbgdd*grbgdbdgbrgbgrbgrbgrgbrgbrgb
the story is good, but this should go to novel category, not a fan fiction. literally make a misunderstanding for new readers. . .. .. .. .. ..
this is art!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! .......................................................................................................................................
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Good novel with some nice story development, can't argue more[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
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