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Usually, fanfics aren't my usual cup of tea, in fact, I never took one to read in full. So, from what I read and grasped from a "fanfic" is like. This one is well done. The only problem here is the writing, it has some flaws that break the flow when reading: tensing and verbing problems and general grammar rules. But of course, nothing that a good rewriting can't fix :)
Absolutely incredible story and superb writing ability. I will continue to be a fan and read!!! Brian Hanes is an icon. Do you have any other content I can support?
This book is awesome. The novel way developed than the original form itself. Such a great plot. Nice way of writing too. Good work, excellent plot. And top of that nice title too
I've never read a fanfic before.... But when l tried to give it a try l really liked it very much..... I liked the idea of 4 nations.... Each nations has each powers... Wow how coollll....😍😍 I also liked the author's writting skill more..... Keep going author....
A well written fan -fic... Character descriptions are amazing and the storyline is well written. Love your work and I highly recommend it for someone who is asking forba fan fic
I really liked the story, its captivating and interesting......the discription itself is vivid and author did a great job.... i hope the growth of your book
A very nice story with a solid plot. It has enough intrigue to pull you in from just reading the synopsis. There are little to no grammatical errors making this a very easy read. Amazing work author! [img=recommend]
A very nice story with a solid plot. It has enough intrigue to pull you in from just reading the synopsis. There are little to no grammatical errors making this a very easy read. Amazing work author! [img=recommend]
Story's great, one of the little few that is ATLA that is awesome and make sense and has a great story line, it's just seem too drown out in the story line, because you already hit every check box, Character development, world background, relationship, the whole Nine yards, but having him go on all of these trips to continue to have a character development for 8 other people is a little boring especially all the way to the point where Aange enters the story at chapter 35? right? "Priority target" as well as the fights being boring and repeative. But over all it's been a lovely read I just can't sit and read it all in one day and have to read it off and on so I can get my excitement and interest back by reading it.
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I love avatar and so it's a given I'll like this story too. Excellent grammar, great story development and captivating character. The story is very well written.
Character developpements, plot developpement, writing style, DEVELOPPENTS in general, author's good narrations and well THE GOOD STORY i've been wanting to set my eyes on. It's no lie that this is surely one of the most well written and thought out books (at least that i've read so far) Great book, love it. [img=recommend]
I am a fan of Avatar: The Legend of Aang and this is my first time reading something like this because I am used to watching it. And all I can say is this is exciting! This story is amazing!
If you're a fan of Avatar. This book is for you. It isn't my cup of tea much, but the writing is so interesting, and it kept getting better and better. (The cover needs some improvement)
Even though I’m not that old, this rly reminds me of my childhood. How nostalgic 😌 It seems like your novel is also going well, so please keep up the good work. I’m glad you get the motivation to come back and write again. Overall, I will be cheering for you :).
So the writing is overall great. What are my worries for the author though... Everyone knows a bit of what Avatar is about (even those who are not fan knows the main idea of the story). So you do have a big pair of shoes to fill. As for how the story is going, the pace is good. There are no unnecessary info. I don't really read fan-fic, but from the chapters I read, I can do a good bet that this is a very well-written fan-fic, it's on par to the OG stories here.
Simply put if you are a fan of Avatar then you are going to like this, the first chapter shows a nice spin on it while keeping the story unique and interesting. Overall read it!
For a fanfiction this is quite nice, usually this is not my genre but this is good. You can tell the characters are well developed. The story is immersive and brings a whole new perspective in the avatar.A rather good book if you ask me
A story filled with diverse and creative personalities, a tale of action and adventure. One that follows the leader of the 31st regiment, Macai, a firebender who wields white fire. Along with his allies which are the likes of Azula, Rosh, and Kett among others. Read as Macai grows up and shares a romantic interest in Azula. The execution of this story has improved from the beginning, and I am proud of the development of the writer and his story. Updates are quite constant, the worldbuilding has gotten better over time. This AU alone can enrich the reader in something new.
As fan fiction goes, this is well written and very compelling. It blends so well with the original to the point that it makes the readers think it’s part of it. Which right now, it very much is. Great work author!
Again, i find the great story. This book is so interesting, i like avatar because i am an avatar fans. Nice work author [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend] Kindly pls try to read my story too The concubine from 21st century - english. I have already read chapter 1, soon i will read another chapter.
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This fanfic is so good! I may not be a fan of Avatar but it find this quite interesting. There is no grammatical errors and it is easy to read. I really like it. To the author, I wish you more ideas!
Firstly, I think I should point out that I am a lover of Avatar. It brings back nostalgia and I do have a slight bias to stories that make fan-fics from it lol. I'll explain my thoughts step-by-step: Book Cover: If it's one thing that I have learned while writing, it's that your book cover can be an essential part of attracting readers. So I would recommend the author to find a cover that works. Synopsis: Enough said. Given that it's a fanfic, not much needs to be said aside from the new character, Macai. So good job. Writing Quality: Very good. Very readable. Your grammar flows well with the premise of the story. If I were to mark you down, there isn't much that I could attack you for. The only issues I saw were with punctuation. Some sentences had unnecessary punctuation marks while others were missing needed punctuations. It's far from bad though. I'm sure readers can get through this book without complaining about grammar. Story Development: I'm loving it so far. I added it to my collections as something that I might read when bored. I liked how you at least gave a brief explanation about what the series of Avatar was initially about. I've seen fanfics that dive into the story thinking that the reader will be aware of the series the fanfic is writing from. The truth is that though you'd expect most people to know what the Avatar is, not everyone will. So I liked that you gave a little information so that readers who have no idea what the Avatar is about will have a better idea of it so they can understand your story better. Character Design: Quite Stunning honestly. You can see where the author places effort into being descriptive. I could fluidly imagine the image that the author is trying to make the reader see. Very good descriptive writing. Keep it up, author! I won't comment on your updating stability since I'm not sure how often you update the book (Kinda forgot to look, and would be a pain to delete all of this just to check lol). I will say the same for World Background given that it's already established due to being taken from the Avatar. However, I will try to keep an eye out to see the changes you will/might make further down in the story. Overall, great job author! Full 5 from me and I think you deserve it. Keep up the good work! You've got talent!!
This is a well-composed book I've never seen anything like this Keep updating and looking forward to seeing more of your work author [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
what in the... This is one of the most well written fan fic I've seen in my entire life in webnovrl😳😳 Usually fan fics written like this dont get to the top, but they sure keep up a good story!! I truly wish this author goodluck, cause it's quite the good read🥴🥴
As the synopsis says, this Avatar fanfic is a good introduction for those who are new to the franchise, though I'm sure veteran fans alike will like it as well. The author is well-acknowledged about it and it shows: the world feels like official material. The original characters are interesting, and the English is neat, which is very welcomed on this site. Many other stories are an eyesore to read here due to that. It's nice to see something different. Recommended!
The story is very nostalgic yet very new. It's amazing how immersive the author's narration is, and the characters are also well fleshed out. I like the way dialogues area little like a play. Overall, it's a really nice fanfic.
I like your writing. It flows wonderful but as the chapters progress, the dialogues changed into colons. Still the story itself is a good read. The characters are pretty well described. This is adapted from Air Bender.
I hope you guys enjoy this story. So just to clarify, it is a spin off story. A spin-off of ATLA, not a standalone. Which means it is best if enjoyed in conjunction to the main ATLA story. AMJ has excellent worldbuilding and a lot of great characters. It actually builds up and makes many connections with the sub-franchise as time goes on. To add to that, AMJ has more content on the Avatar Wiki. There, you can find several pictures and descriptions of characters. As well as story polls. Jumping into this story is devling into a new universe. Hope you enjoy.
I was excited to read your book the moment I saw it was an avatar spin-off and you didn't disappoint. You're really good with your descriptions and the story is progressing quite well.
Avatar story . You have my curiosity and now you have my attention. Great story. Give it read [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
Usually, fanfics aren't my usual cup of tea, in fact, I never took one to read in full. So, from what I read and grasped from a "fanfic" is like. This one is well done. The only problem here is the writing, it has some flaws that break the flow when reading: tensing and verbing problems and general grammar rules. But of course, nothing that a good rewriting can't fix :)
Absolutely incredible story and superb writing ability. I will continue to be a fan and read!!! Brian Hanes is an icon. Do you have any other content I can support?
This book is awesome. The novel way developed than the original form itself. Such a great plot. Nice way of writing too. Good work, excellent plot. And top of that nice title too
I've never read a fanfic before.... But when l tried to give it a try l really liked it very much..... I liked the idea of 4 nations.... Each nations has each powers... Wow how coollll....😍😍 I also liked the author's writting skill more..... Keep going author....
A well written fan -fic... Character descriptions are amazing and the storyline is well written. Love your work and I highly recommend it for someone who is asking forba fan fic
I really liked the story, its captivating and interesting......the discription itself is vivid and author did a great job.... i hope the growth of your book
A very nice story with a solid plot. It has enough intrigue to pull you in from just reading the synopsis. There are little to no grammatical errors making this a very easy read. Amazing work author! [img=recommend]
A very nice story with a solid plot. It has enough intrigue to pull you in from just reading the synopsis. There are little to no grammatical errors making this a very easy read. Amazing work author! [img=recommend]
Story's great, one of the little few that is ATLA that is awesome and make sense and has a great story line, it's just seem too drown out in the story line, because you already hit every check box, Character development, world background, relationship, the whole Nine yards, but having him go on all of these trips to continue to have a character development for 8 other people is a little boring especially all the way to the point where Aange enters the story at chapter 35? right? "Priority target" as well as the fights being boring and repeative. But over all it's been a lovely read I just can't sit and read it all in one day and have to read it off and on so I can get my excitement and interest back by reading it.
揭示劇透 I love avatar and so it's a given I'll like this story too. Excellent grammar, great story development and captivating character. The story is very well written.
Character developpements, plot developpement, writing style, DEVELOPPENTS in general, author's good narrations and well THE GOOD STORY i've been wanting to set my eyes on. It's no lie that this is surely one of the most well written and thought out books (at least that i've read so far) Great book, love it. [img=recommend]
I am a fan of Avatar: The Legend of Aang and this is my first time reading something like this because I am used to watching it. And all I can say is this is exciting! This story is amazing!
If you're a fan of Avatar. This book is for you. It isn't my cup of tea much, but the writing is so interesting, and it kept getting better and better. (The cover needs some improvement)
Even though I’m not that old, this rly reminds me of my childhood. How nostalgic 😌 It seems like your novel is also going well, so please keep up the good work. I’m glad you get the motivation to come back and write again. Overall, I will be cheering for you :).
So the writing is overall great. What are my worries for the author though... Everyone knows a bit of what Avatar is about (even those who are not fan knows the main idea of the story). So you do have a big pair of shoes to fill. As for how the story is going, the pace is good. There are no unnecessary info. I don't really read fan-fic, but from the chapters I read, I can do a good bet that this is a very well-written fan-fic, it's on par to the OG stories here.
Simply put if you are a fan of Avatar then you are going to like this, the first chapter shows a nice spin on it while keeping the story unique and interesting. Overall read it!
For a fanfiction this is quite nice, usually this is not my genre but this is good. You can tell the characters are well developed. The story is immersive and brings a whole new perspective in the avatar.A rather good book if you ask me
A story filled with diverse and creative personalities, a tale of action and adventure. One that follows the leader of the 31st regiment, Macai, a firebender who wields white fire. Along with his allies which are the likes of Azula, Rosh, and Kett among others. Read as Macai grows up and shares a romantic interest in Azula. The execution of this story has improved from the beginning, and I am proud of the development of the writer and his story. Updates are quite constant, the worldbuilding has gotten better over time. This AU alone can enrich the reader in something new.
As fan fiction goes, this is well written and very compelling. It blends so well with the original to the point that it makes the readers think it’s part of it. Which right now, it very much is. Great work author!
Again, i find the great story. This book is so interesting, i like avatar because i am an avatar fans. Nice work author [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend] Kindly pls try to read my story too The concubine from 21st century - english. I have already read chapter 1, soon i will read another chapter.
揭示劇透 This fanfic is so good! I may not be a fan of Avatar but it find this quite interesting. There is no grammatical errors and it is easy to read. I really like it. To the author, I wish you more ideas!
Firstly, I think I should point out that I am a lover of Avatar. It brings back nostalgia and I do have a slight bias to stories that make fan-fics from it lol. I'll explain my thoughts step-by-step: Book Cover: If it's one thing that I have learned while writing, it's that your book cover can be an essential part of attracting readers. So I would recommend the author to find a cover that works. Synopsis: Enough said. Given that it's a fanfic, not much needs to be said aside from the new character, Macai. So good job. Writing Quality: Very good. Very readable. Your grammar flows well with the premise of the story. If I were to mark you down, there isn't much that I could attack you for. The only issues I saw were with punctuation. Some sentences had unnecessary punctuation marks while others were missing needed punctuations. It's far from bad though. I'm sure readers can get through this book without complaining about grammar. Story Development: I'm loving it so far. I added it to my collections as something that I might read when bored. I liked how you at least gave a brief explanation about what the series of Avatar was initially about. I've seen fanfics that dive into the story thinking that the reader will be aware of the series the fanfic is writing from. The truth is that though you'd expect most people to know what the Avatar is, not everyone will. So I liked that you gave a little information so that readers who have no idea what the Avatar is about will have a better idea of it so they can understand your story better. Character Design: Quite Stunning honestly. You can see where the author places effort into being descriptive. I could fluidly imagine the image that the author is trying to make the reader see. Very good descriptive writing. Keep it up, author! I won't comment on your updating stability since I'm not sure how often you update the book (Kinda forgot to look, and would be a pain to delete all of this just to check lol). I will say the same for World Background given that it's already established due to being taken from the Avatar. However, I will try to keep an eye out to see the changes you will/might make further down in the story. Overall, great job author! Full 5 from me and I think you deserve it. Keep up the good work! You've got talent!!
This is a well-composed book I've never seen anything like this Keep updating and looking forward to seeing more of your work author [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
what in the... This is one of the most well written fan fic I've seen in my entire life in webnovrl😳😳 Usually fan fics written like this dont get to the top, but they sure keep up a good story!! I truly wish this author goodluck, cause it's quite the good read🥴🥴
As the synopsis says, this Avatar fanfic is a good introduction for those who are new to the franchise, though I'm sure veteran fans alike will like it as well. The author is well-acknowledged about it and it shows: the world feels like official material. The original characters are interesting, and the English is neat, which is very welcomed on this site. Many other stories are an eyesore to read here due to that. It's nice to see something different. Recommended!
The story is very nostalgic yet very new. It's amazing how immersive the author's narration is, and the characters are also well fleshed out. I like the way dialogues area little like a play. Overall, it's a really nice fanfic.
I like your writing. It flows wonderful but as the chapters progress, the dialogues changed into colons. Still the story itself is a good read. The characters are pretty well described. This is adapted from Air Bender.
I hope you guys enjoy this story. So just to clarify, it is a spin off story. A spin-off of ATLA, not a standalone. Which means it is best if enjoyed in conjunction to the main ATLA story. AMJ has excellent worldbuilding and a lot of great characters. It actually builds up and makes many connections with the sub-franchise as time goes on. To add to that, AMJ has more content on the Avatar Wiki. There, you can find several pictures and descriptions of characters. As well as story polls. Jumping into this story is devling into a new universe. Hope you enjoy.
I was excited to read your book the moment I saw it was an avatar spin-off and you didn't disappoint. You're really good with your descriptions and the story is progressing quite well.
Avatar story . You have my curiosity and now you have my attention. Great story. Give it read [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]