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The story up to the latest chapter is good. No updates have marred the story .
I will say that this is one of the best if not the best Marvel fanfic I have read so far, and I have read close to a hundred by now. Of course, most of them are dropped and this is no exception. Which sucks because the other Marvel Fan-fics were mediocre compared to this. I want to recommend reading it. But at the same time, I don't. The reason why is because it's dropped. Even though it was a great read it will never be finished. So if you do decide to do so and you are used to reading dropped Marvel fanfics like me. Then read it, you won't be disappointed till you reach chapter 85. This would have been a five-out-of-five-star story for me. But since it was dropped I cannot find myself giving it that rating. I will keep it in my Library for now in the hopes that the Author would grace us with more chapters.
Até agora tá foda,.............................,.................................................................,..mmm ....................................... ....mmm . ...........
*pikes author a lot* Hey author, you still alive? This has been an amazing story so far so please notify us readers if you're taking a break or story dropped
Very good story, author is very good at showing Tony's character and overall story writing is good. I really enjoyed this story. I hope author continues this at some point.
I didn't expect much from this story but DAYYYYMN ITS GOOD. Please tell me it's an ongoing story and well see an update a week or two later.
Great grammar and decent story. however, the MC is such a distorted version of Tony, one even death and time wouldn't create. He believes himself the ultimate victim, while throwing shade at himself slightly to try and not be obvious. kinda emo. Such a depressing outlook on everyone and everything in the beginning. I know its to create a version of Tony to fit your story but its just all a bit much and and a bit farfetched. this is definitely not the MCU but could be a different universe that is very similar because this Tony ain't the one we know. Give the story a try before moving on. A serious Tony is a boring Tony.
It is very good. just reading the opening monologue should assuage readers whether or not theyll like it.
To tell you all the truth. I didn't have much expectation in this fic. but dwan, it was good. hope the author continues it till the end
That's so f**king great 🤩 I'm in love!!! I love this Tony Stark so much,the guy has real silk self-esteem and doesn't need others to know he's doing the right thing. His relationship with Nat is perfect, I hope in addition to the physical changes Nat could have some things like mind reading as she is a spy it will serve her well. I really wish Tony would steal Pym and make it his own upgraded version. A Tony without sculpture is an awesome Tony.This story is fascinating I can't wait to read more
Its so hard to find a writer that knows how to capture your attention, most writers on here have this monotone style, its so bland it makes it impossible to enjoy the story. its like reading a bad instruction manual from IKEA. Anyways i read the first paragraph and you can tell this author atleast knows how to make his story flow well, Its refreshing considering most other fanfics seem to be copied from google translate
Bravo. You know, I also felt that Tony was underappreciated by his team. I mean, they didn't come for him in 5 years, and when they came, they were asking for a time machine. I was surprised by how he didn't shoot them then.
I really enjoy your stories because they present a new perspective. Like your Naruto story world might be same as canon but when looked at from another angle it changes it completely. The motivations and the reasons add added depth which the original creators never considered. Its the same here one that pulls back and looks at the same thing from a different perspective and again the readers understanding of the situation changes. Its brilliant and makes for a very engrossing read. I just hope this story does not go the harem route as that kinda stalls character development for the parties involved. This was the problem in your Naruto story after Konan and Tsunade every other member weakened the characters as you had to juggle too many main characters. So I hope this story just sticks to Tony and Natasha cause you do right relationships well when they are focused.
Superior Quality Writing in Webnovel's Standards - Stability is good as it was a old draft - Story Development is also good - Character Design is special - World Background is Marvel Comics 616ish.
{38 Chapters in} | Marvel Comics 616ish World Background - Iron Man x Black Widow [Both from sacrificed comics timeline with no mutants] Early Romance - Writing Quality is superior in webnovel's standard - Story Development is good with Iron Man as the MC as he learns from Kamar Taj and is a Genius at that & he is not in the hero business anymore - [Neutral Evil] as he kills Obadiah Stane after he is thrown to jail by the FBI/SHIELD - He only cares for Pepper, Happy [married to Pepper 2 years], Rhodey & now Natasha as he regrets being the cash cow of Avengers in first timeline. The story starts after Iron Man comes back alive from the Ten Rings capture - [Prologue] After Iron Man snaps his fingers, he is in a weird orange Realm where he relives his life on a screen very slowly from different perspectives where he discovers that no-one cares for him and he is only used by everyone. - GOOD READ - RECOMMENDED.
Why the review so low though? This story is cool enough. Even author rapport of other novel is good.
So will his 1st meeting with magneto be epic? Cause if he hasnt learned of him yet he still doesnt have counter fod him yet and if he research magneto and they fight magneto controlling his suit and Tony wil be like "Nope!" hahaha
Bro, what a perfect marvel fanfiction you're writing here! Please do not ever drop it!
The writing quality so far has been great but the update stability has been a downpour for that. As for the story it has been progressing slowly along with exploring the characters though the emphasis on the world exploration has been near zero to none. Overall, this is a great ff and would hope that the author would come to complete it. P.S. I really hope for a Tony X Natasha pairing, they just are made for it in this pic.
Initial Evaluation: Average at best. Less to no mistake grammatical errors, well thought chapters wherein dealing with the what ifs, however, it's a misrepresentation of THE TONY STARK. this is more on an emotional side of author-san when it comes to marvel Tony stark. I highly recommend reading comics pertaining to Tony stark back in time so you can correctly portray Tony stark. You are kinda devaluing him in this FF which is a bummer.
great so far imo. I just hope no one other than tony and nat got their memory back in the future chapters . great so far imo. I just hope no one other than tony and nat got their memory back in the future chapters .
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I only wish that you author-san would have completed this story. Really liked it. Do give it a read... 5/5[img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
The story up to the latest chapter is good. No updates have marred the story .
I will say that this is one of the best if not the best Marvel fanfic I have read so far, and I have read close to a hundred by now. Of course, most of them are dropped and this is no exception. Which sucks because the other Marvel Fan-fics were mediocre compared to this. I want to recommend reading it. But at the same time, I don't. The reason why is because it's dropped. Even though it was a great read it will never be finished. So if you do decide to do so and you are used to reading dropped Marvel fanfics like me. Then read it, you won't be disappointed till you reach chapter 85. This would have been a five-out-of-five-star story for me. But since it was dropped I cannot find myself giving it that rating. I will keep it in my Library for now in the hopes that the Author would grace us with more chapters.
Até agora tá foda,.............................,.................................................................,..mmm ....................................... ....mmm . ...........
*pikes author a lot* Hey author, you still alive? This has been an amazing story so far so please notify us readers if you're taking a break or story dropped
Very good story, author is very good at showing Tony's character and overall story writing is good. I really enjoyed this story. I hope author continues this at some point.
I didn't expect much from this story but DAYYYYMN ITS GOOD. Please tell me it's an ongoing story and well see an update a week or two later.
Great grammar and decent story. however, the MC is such a distorted version of Tony, one even death and time wouldn't create. He believes himself the ultimate victim, while throwing shade at himself slightly to try and not be obvious. kinda emo. Such a depressing outlook on everyone and everything in the beginning. I know its to create a version of Tony to fit your story but its just all a bit much and and a bit farfetched. this is definitely not the MCU but could be a different universe that is very similar because this Tony ain't the one we know. Give the story a try before moving on. A serious Tony is a boring Tony.
It is very good. just reading the opening monologue should assuage readers whether or not theyll like it.
To tell you all the truth. I didn't have much expectation in this fic. but dwan, it was good. hope the author continues it till the end
That's so f**king great 🤩 I'm in love!!! I love this Tony Stark so much,the guy has real silk self-esteem and doesn't need others to know he's doing the right thing. His relationship with Nat is perfect, I hope in addition to the physical changes Nat could have some things like mind reading as she is a spy it will serve her well. I really wish Tony would steal Pym and make it his own upgraded version. A Tony without sculpture is an awesome Tony.This story is fascinating I can't wait to read more
Its so hard to find a writer that knows how to capture your attention, most writers on here have this monotone style, its so bland it makes it impossible to enjoy the story. its like reading a bad instruction manual from IKEA. Anyways i read the first paragraph and you can tell this author atleast knows how to make his story flow well, Its refreshing considering most other fanfics seem to be copied from google translate
Bravo. You know, I also felt that Tony was underappreciated by his team. I mean, they didn't come for him in 5 years, and when they came, they were asking for a time machine. I was surprised by how he didn't shoot them then.
I really enjoy your stories because they present a new perspective. Like your Naruto story world might be same as canon but when looked at from another angle it changes it completely. The motivations and the reasons add added depth which the original creators never considered. Its the same here one that pulls back and looks at the same thing from a different perspective and again the readers understanding of the situation changes. Its brilliant and makes for a very engrossing read. I just hope this story does not go the harem route as that kinda stalls character development for the parties involved. This was the problem in your Naruto story after Konan and Tsunade every other member weakened the characters as you had to juggle too many main characters. So I hope this story just sticks to Tony and Natasha cause you do right relationships well when they are focused.
Superior Quality Writing in Webnovel's Standards - Stability is good as it was a old draft - Story Development is also good - Character Design is special - World Background is Marvel Comics 616ish.
{38 Chapters in} | Marvel Comics 616ish World Background - Iron Man x Black Widow [Both from sacrificed comics timeline with no mutants] Early Romance - Writing Quality is superior in webnovel's standard - Story Development is good with Iron Man as the MC as he learns from Kamar Taj and is a Genius at that & he is not in the hero business anymore - [Neutral Evil] as he kills Obadiah Stane after he is thrown to jail by the FBI/SHIELD - He only cares for Pepper, Happy [married to Pepper 2 years], Rhodey & now Natasha as he regrets being the cash cow of Avengers in first timeline. The story starts after Iron Man comes back alive from the Ten Rings capture - [Prologue] After Iron Man snaps his fingers, he is in a weird orange Realm where he relives his life on a screen very slowly from different perspectives where he discovers that no-one cares for him and he is only used by everyone. - GOOD READ - RECOMMENDED.
Why the review so low though? This story is cool enough. Even author rapport of other novel is good.
So will his 1st meeting with magneto be epic? Cause if he hasnt learned of him yet he still doesnt have counter fod him yet and if he research magneto and they fight magneto controlling his suit and Tony wil be like "Nope!" hahaha
Bro, what a perfect marvel fanfiction you're writing here! Please do not ever drop it!
The writing quality so far has been great but the update stability has been a downpour for that. As for the story it has been progressing slowly along with exploring the characters though the emphasis on the world exploration has been near zero to none. Overall, this is a great ff and would hope that the author would come to complete it. P.S. I really hope for a Tony X Natasha pairing, they just are made for it in this pic.
Initial Evaluation: Average at best. Less to no mistake grammatical errors, well thought chapters wherein dealing with the what ifs, however, it's a misrepresentation of THE TONY STARK. this is more on an emotional side of author-san when it comes to marvel Tony stark. I highly recommend reading comics pertaining to Tony stark back in time so you can correctly portray Tony stark. You are kinda devaluing him in this FF which is a bummer.
great so far imo. I just hope no one other than tony and nat got their memory back in the future chapters . great so far imo. I just hope no one other than tony and nat got their memory back in the future chapters .
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I only wish that you author-san would have completed this story. Really liked it. Do give it a read... 5/5[img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]