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揭示劇透 MC very stupid and retarded.[img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]
It's one of the better hentai system fanfics on here .................................................................................................
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WARNING: NOVEL HAS CONTINUAL NTR (NETORARE) VIBES READ AT YOUR OWN RISK MC receives a *** and love related system where he can gain points through *** and courting girls (who belong to various hentai animes/mangas) 1. MC is a beta cuck who plans too much instead of ACTING on his plans(6years+) and always waits until the last minute to act...despite knowing he will get cucked due to a particular event in a hentai that will happen. 2. The world he transported into supposedly is a hentai world but he acts like a total wuss despite having a powerful system...many chapters we read him saying he wants to do this and that but only acts out at the very last minute...continual NTR vibes are always present because of how passive the MC is at resolving issues...he likes to wait until the last minute to do anything 3. Chapters are barely being updated and some key characters are forgotten after being introduced...
I love everything in this fic, the protagonist who realy like his partneds imsted of just use them, the girls, the *** scenes, but i need to know if you droped the history or is just a hiatus
did a good job okkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkk
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for those of you wondering the sauce for picture is russia gibo something word count. e. e. e
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Can someone explain to me why everyone is raging about this story being NTR? I am at chapter 47 and there is NO NTR. To be honest there where some moments were the Mc should have acted faster than he did but still no one f*ucked his harem members so were do people see NTR ?? ?
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no more updates ?? it's been a while now since I've been been waiting for updates 😔😔 did author drop this novel........ please continue working on this novel senpai🙇♂️
This is mostly smut, the protagonist lives in a world that houses many characters and plots from various hentai anime and Manga. Usual reincarnation with system, nothing new
Mc beta shit .............. ........... .............. ............. ............... ............... .......................................................
Стабильность обновлений на высоте, так сказать впечатляет. Судя по этой истории, мне не терпится увидеть больше (MC) и то, на что он способен в тот момент, когда он хорошо читает, мне нравится стиль письма, и я рад видеть, что нас ждет в следующих главах. Мне очень нравится этот роман.
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I've read the original as well as the latest version and now I can confidently say that I personally prefer the original which is this one, which why it pains me to realise that the author might never continue this work. So long and till we meet again my fellow perverts
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--------------------------------------------- hmm........ para quem quer ler algo e passar o tempo é realmente interessante algo diferente do comum gostei bastante então 4,2
MC is stupid... jajajajajananaa[img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]
揭示劇透 MC very stupid and retarded.[img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]
It's one of the better hentai system fanfics on here .................................................................................................
Thanks for the hard Work 😍 Thanks for the hard Work 😍 Thanks for the hard Work 😍 Thanks for the hard Work 😍 Thanks for the hard Work 😍!
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WARNING: NOVEL HAS CONTINUAL NTR (NETORARE) VIBES READ AT YOUR OWN RISK MC receives a *** and love related system where he can gain points through *** and courting girls (who belong to various hentai animes/mangas) 1. MC is a beta cuck who plans too much instead of ACTING on his plans(6years+) and always waits until the last minute to act...despite knowing he will get cucked due to a particular event in a hentai that will happen. 2. The world he transported into supposedly is a hentai world but he acts like a total wuss despite having a powerful system...many chapters we read him saying he wants to do this and that but only acts out at the very last minute...continual NTR vibes are always present because of how passive the MC is at resolving issues...he likes to wait until the last minute to do anything 3. Chapters are barely being updated and some key characters are forgotten after being introduced...
I love everything in this fic, the protagonist who realy like his partneds imsted of just use them, the girls, the *** scenes, but i need to know if you droped the history or is just a hiatus
did a good job okkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkk
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for those of you wondering the sauce for picture is russia gibo something word count. e. e. e
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Can someone explain to me why everyone is raging about this story being NTR? I am at chapter 47 and there is NO NTR. To be honest there where some moments were the Mc should have acted faster than he did but still no one f*ucked his harem members so were do people see NTR ?? ?
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no more updates ?? it's been a while now since I've been been waiting for updates 😔😔 did author drop this novel........ please continue working on this novel senpai🙇♂️
This is mostly smut, the protagonist lives in a world that houses many characters and plots from various hentai anime and Manga. Usual reincarnation with system, nothing new
Mc beta shit .............. ........... .............. ............. ............... ............... .......................................................
Стабильность обновлений на высоте, так сказать впечатляет. Судя по этой истории, мне не терпится увидеть больше (MC) и то, на что он способен в тот момент, когда он хорошо читает, мне нравится стиль письма, и я рад видеть, что нас ждет в следующих главах. Мне очень нравится этот роман.
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I've read the original as well as the latest version and now I can confidently say that I personally prefer the original which is this one, which why it pains me to realise that the author might never continue this work. So long and till we meet again my fellow perverts