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please come back one day I remember reading this story and it's always in the back of my mind.
Is everyone named Rei? the first chapter itself is too confusing, why would author set up mc rei to be killed by enemy ninja rei when he could've choosen any names since none of them were important named chracter.
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if the MC is a transmigrator the story would have been better. its like giving a Nuclear missile to a chiwawa who does not know what to do with it nor knowing anything about the plot of the naruto verse? is it really enjoyable reading about the MC that keep questioning things(acting dumb) when we the readers already have the answers to? sigh...i am not even curious about the capabilities Ryujin jakka and I even know the plot of naruto verse. When I see the naive MC being oblivious to all this without anything new to add its kind of annoying and boring.Not to mention when the MC jumps to conclusion sigh. for example all these could happen : seeing black zetsu "who are you? I will join you to bring my parents back"............. seeing Obito, "I believe you because you are madara"................... seeing Danzo "I will put my life on the line to protect you benefactor"... seeing Hinata "I realize that I love you" ..instant rip to boruto seeing Ino "I realize that I love you" ..instant rip to inojin seeing Jiraya/tsunade "sorry I have to kill you because you are friends with the snake"... conclusion: A NAIVE DUMB MC WITH A FAKE RYUJIN JAKKA WHO IS A PHEONIX INSTEAD OF A DRAGON. Writing Quality-4 STAR.................................good Story Development-2 STAR.........................not interesting Character Design - 1 STAR.........................irritating World Background-4 STAR.........................got narutoverse vibe
I love this so much and would love to see it continued but either way i had so much fun reading this.
love the way this plays out, storys a bit slow in the later chapters but the idea of creating soul society in naruto is just to cool to pass up. Realy looking forward to how it turns out.
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His clan was massacred, his parents were killed infront him. But he is worried about some cheap bandits life who tried to kill him. Why is searching for Orochimaru. To tell him killing is bad and do not kill people in the future? then you can be my best friends. See how awesome hero I am. I can become friends with the murderer of my parents .
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i really like this novel. apart from slow updating rate. everything is great.... i really like this novel. apart from slow updating rate. everything is great.... i really like this novel. apart from slow updating rate. everything is great....
Have to drop this when he start consider others .i mean it just dumb man like WTF he just became a wussy Help others like he is a hero and teaching them the shinigam way 🤢 So peace out ✌
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When I read the synopsis Saying they're good using at Swords my hand just automatically press the "Add to Library" damn HAHAHAHA 😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂
haven't read it yet but it looks good. also is that picture from that manga drifters. reo, reo, reo, reo, reo, reo, reo, reo, reo, reo, reo, reo, reo, reo, reo, reo, reo, reo, reo, reo, reo, reo, reo, reo, reo, reo, reo, reo, reo, reo, reo, reo, reo, reo, reo
cool, read this mtfck ██████████████████████████████████████████████████ ██████████████████████████████████████████████████ ██████████████████████████████████████████████████ ██████████████████████████████████████████████████
Он хочет отомстить ,но как только получил немного силы сразу же побежал за Орочи , нет бы пару лет потренироваться но зачем..................................
Very noice. I can confirm MC is the God of fire. noicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoice
At first I liked the idea of building a souls society, but I don't like the idea of him being considerate of others even though he's a Shinigami
Ryujin Jakka, The Greatest Zanpakuto of all time. I wish you would have made it a three year time skip but it's all right. Nice Story Mate! [img=recommend]
nice ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,
All good except you should really explain the bleach part and make it fit the puzzle that is the novel ÀaaaaaaaAaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaàaaaakjajanababsbsbbdbsbdbsbdsbehhdhshdhzhjzhnaNebdnfnnznwjxjznjkja
The potential here is too high to be true. Keep it up 👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏
my favorite element is of course fire and since I read the title of the story,I was excited to read everything and to my not surprise face,I loved the bleach and naruto coming together with a goal to reach for the mc,so please keep it up I love this story please.
Eu não posso dizer que tem que melhorar,para uma Fanfic essa e ótima Mais sem querer ser chato,os personagens da história tem muito pouco desenvolvimento,principalmente os 3novos sinigamis,seria legal também Acompanha o desenvolvimento de rei e da sua zampakuto(ryuzim algum coisa)sabe eles construindo um relacionamento,não de amor mais de confiança,como amigos,faça também rei percebe o poder que ele porta,que nem percebe que"com grandes poderes vem grandes responsabilidades"<3😘😘😘
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original idea, original character, focus on progression, action, and growth. romance not a main point. so far pretty perfect compared to most work I've read on here. keep it up!
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It's great. The mc actually have development which is crazy, you don't find this very often here, his powers are cool and even if he is op there's situations when it's not that clear so is not boring cause you know he'll always win without any cost. The writing is very good and you can feel like the characters are people not mannequins, and they have personallity which means they take decisions based on that personality which means they make mistakes which means no gary stu or mary sue. The story of a guy that makes a deal with a sword, in exchange of power for revenge he'll have to build a place for the souls to live after death.
please come back one day I remember reading this story and it's always in the back of my mind.
Is everyone named Rei? the first chapter itself is too confusing, why would author set up mc rei to be killed by enemy ninja rei when he could've choosen any names since none of them were important named chracter.
Please update please please Please update please please Please update please please Please update please please Please update please please Please update please please Please update please please Please update please please Please update please please Please update please please Please update please please Please update please please Please update please please Please update please please Please update please please Please update please please Please update please please Please update please please Please update please please Please update please please Please update please please
if the MC is a transmigrator the story would have been better. its like giving a Nuclear missile to a chiwawa who does not know what to do with it nor knowing anything about the plot of the naruto verse? is it really enjoyable reading about the MC that keep questioning things(acting dumb) when we the readers already have the answers to? sigh...i am not even curious about the capabilities Ryujin jakka and I even know the plot of naruto verse. When I see the naive MC being oblivious to all this without anything new to add its kind of annoying and boring.Not to mention when the MC jumps to conclusion sigh. for example all these could happen : seeing black zetsu "who are you? I will join you to bring my parents back"............. seeing Obito, "I believe you because you are madara"................... seeing Danzo "I will put my life on the line to protect you benefactor"... seeing Hinata "I realize that I love you" ..instant rip to boruto seeing Ino "I realize that I love you" ..instant rip to inojin seeing Jiraya/tsunade "sorry I have to kill you because you are friends with the snake"... conclusion: A NAIVE DUMB MC WITH A FAKE RYUJIN JAKKA WHO IS A PHEONIX INSTEAD OF A DRAGON. Writing Quality-4 STAR.................................good Story Development-2 STAR.........................not interesting Character Design - 1 STAR.........................irritating World Background-4 STAR.........................got narutoverse vibe
I love this so much and would love to see it continued but either way i had so much fun reading this.
love the way this plays out, storys a bit slow in the later chapters but the idea of creating soul society in naruto is just to cool to pass up. Realy looking forward to how it turns out.
揭示劇透 His clan was massacred, his parents were killed infront him. But he is worried about some cheap bandits life who tried to kill him. Why is searching for Orochimaru. To tell him killing is bad and do not kill people in the future? then you can be my best friends. See how awesome hero I am. I can become friends with the murderer of my parents .
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i really like this novel. apart from slow updating rate. everything is great.... i really like this novel. apart from slow updating rate. everything is great.... i really like this novel. apart from slow updating rate. everything is great....
Have to drop this when he start consider others .i mean it just dumb man like WTF he just became a wussy Help others like he is a hero and teaching them the shinigam way 🤢 So peace out ✌
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When I read the synopsis Saying they're good using at Swords my hand just automatically press the "Add to Library" damn HAHAHAHA 😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂
haven't read it yet but it looks good. also is that picture from that manga drifters. reo, reo, reo, reo, reo, reo, reo, reo, reo, reo, reo, reo, reo, reo, reo, reo, reo, reo, reo, reo, reo, reo, reo, reo, reo, reo, reo, reo, reo, reo, reo, reo, reo, reo, reo
cool, read this mtfck ██████████████████████████████████████████████████ ██████████████████████████████████████████████████ ██████████████████████████████████████████████████ ██████████████████████████████████████████████████
Он хочет отомстить ,но как только получил немного силы сразу же побежал за Орочи , нет бы пару лет потренироваться но зачем..................................
Very noice. I can confirm MC is the God of fire. noicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoicenoice
At first I liked the idea of building a souls society, but I don't like the idea of him being considerate of others even though he's a Shinigami
Ryujin Jakka, The Greatest Zanpakuto of all time. I wish you would have made it a three year time skip but it's all right. Nice Story Mate! [img=recommend]
nice ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,
All good except you should really explain the bleach part and make it fit the puzzle that is the novel ÀaaaaaaaAaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaàaaaakjajanababsbsbbdbsbdbsbdsbehhdhshdhzhjzhnaNebdnfnnznwjxjznjkja
The potential here is too high to be true. Keep it up 👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏
my favorite element is of course fire and since I read the title of the story,I was excited to read everything and to my not surprise face,I loved the bleach and naruto coming together with a goal to reach for the mc,so please keep it up I love this story please.
Eu não posso dizer que tem que melhorar,para uma Fanfic essa e ótima Mais sem querer ser chato,os personagens da história tem muito pouco desenvolvimento,principalmente os 3novos sinigamis,seria legal também Acompanha o desenvolvimento de rei e da sua zampakuto(ryuzim algum coisa)sabe eles construindo um relacionamento,não de amor mais de confiança,como amigos,faça também rei percebe o poder que ele porta,que nem percebe que"com grandes poderes vem grandes responsabilidades"<3😘😘😘
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original idea, original character, focus on progression, action, and growth. romance not a main point. so far pretty perfect compared to most work I've read on here. keep it up!
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It's great. The mc actually have development which is crazy, you don't find this very often here, his powers are cool and even if he is op there's situations when it's not that clear so is not boring cause you know he'll always win without any cost. The writing is very good and you can feel like the characters are people not mannequins, and they have personallity which means they take decisions based on that personality which means they make mistakes which means no gary stu or mary sue. The story of a guy that makes a deal with a sword, in exchange of power for revenge he'll have to build a place for the souls to live after death.