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******************************** Good work! ****************************************** ***************************** And i need more! ***************************************
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Really interesting background setup and an intriguing plot for the MC insert. Also, I have always felt Luna was one of my favorite characters so I am glad to see this story giving her a happier life.
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I just started reading this and it is simply incredible, the plot of the story is unique and fascinating. I loved how he was reborn as Luna's twin and I really hope that they get together. It has a few spelling errors but your grammar is outstanding. Most fanfictions have terrible grammar which makes them difficult to read. I hope that you continue writing this and that you'll be able to finish it. There is a lot of good fanfiction that I have read that were never finished hopefully, you can finish it.
Really great so far, wish you well for putting some more chapters out. Interested how he is gonna get into Hogwarts with a sword, but.... also do some rituals before he reaches Hogwarts.
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good novel. please more chapters, and please dont do the harem very big like do it with two more girls or one. more chapters.more chapters.more chapters.more chapters.more chapters.more chapters.more chapters.more chapters.more chapters.more chapters.more chapters.more chapters.more chapters.more chapters.
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a good story one of the best i found about harry potter !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Very good overall, it's an interesting take on the lovegood family in the HP universe and silver does not seem out of place at all. (140 characters)(140 characters)(140 characters)(140 characters)(140 characters)(140 characters)
Well I shall be a shameless reviewer and review my own novel lol. I do my best to keep my writing quality top notch. Ever time i see a mistake i go back to update it or if one of my readers points it out. The updates are 5 chapters a week until my typing speed improves, but if anything comes up i do my best to inform you the reader of whats going on and how long it will be till the next chapter. I do my best to make a quality product. That means i take my time to layout the story, characters and the world as best as i can. I do my best not to filter in unneeded information. To ensure this i reread each chapter and make sure all my chapters flow together. This way you aren't just reading a book. You are reading as if though you were with the characters and experiencing the world yourself. I hope for your continued support and look forward to keep delivering a great harry potter fan-fic novel for your enjoyment.
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A very interesting in-depth Harry Potter fanfic. I can't wait to read more from this author. 14000000000001400000000000140000000000014000000000001400000000000 The Harem God was here.
Good novel, I'm really excited to see another harry-potter novel i also hope that the author could keep the story as interesting as he does now, i heard that this novel is the first novel the author is writing. I really didn't expect that because the author has a very good story-line, the chapter updates is just perfect with quality over quantity. Something i like the most is that the novel length is approximately 2,500k to 3,500k. just discovered this novel, and cant wait for more chapters
Descriptive and gives a good foundation for the main characters development. Good grammar, and a little too early to tell the stability since there are only four chapters.
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Good harry potter fanfic, the first chapter was👌🏾 your grammar is 5 star for sure and the telling of the ”story” is also done very good. As there aren't many chapters I could only Review the first two chap, I will come back another time to edit this review
As their is only one chapter posted so far I will update this in the future. So far the writing quality seem great. While their are some grammar mistakes the flow of the sentences is easy to follow and it shows the writer actually knows the English language. I gave the writer a four for stability of writing because he said he would post a chapter tonight and lord behold he did as he said. We are to see if the updates will continue st a steady pace, but I’ll give him a 4 to give him courage. For story development I will say that was a very intriguing way to start a Harry Potter novel and I would like to see how he continues it. The charter design shown so far was good, but it can use some work. Such as describing the character he presents better and maybe give more of a background on them. Same as the story development the world he showed seems to show a version of our history in the future and it took real time conflicts into consideration to create a great background story from the world the MC comes from. Overall I can’t wait to continue reading and see what this new author has in store for us.
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******************************** Good work! ****************************************** ***************************** And i need more! ***************************************
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Really interesting background setup and an intriguing plot for the MC insert. Also, I have always felt Luna was one of my favorite characters so I am glad to see this story giving her a happier life.
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I just started reading this and it is simply incredible, the plot of the story is unique and fascinating. I loved how he was reborn as Luna's twin and I really hope that they get together. It has a few spelling errors but your grammar is outstanding. Most fanfictions have terrible grammar which makes them difficult to read. I hope that you continue writing this and that you'll be able to finish it. There is a lot of good fanfiction that I have read that were never finished hopefully, you can finish it.
Really great so far, wish you well for putting some more chapters out. Interested how he is gonna get into Hogwarts with a sword, but.... also do some rituals before he reaches Hogwarts.
More chapters.More chapters.More chapters.More chapters.More chapters.More chapters.More chapters.More chapters.More chapters.More chapters.
More chapters.More chapters.More chapters.More chapters.More chapters.More chapters.More chapters.More chapters.More chapters.More chapters.
good novel. please more chapters, and please dont do the harem very big like do it with two more girls or one. more chapters.more chapters.more chapters.more chapters.more chapters.more chapters.more chapters.more chapters.more chapters.more chapters.more chapters.more chapters.more chapters.more chapters.
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揭示劇透 a good story one of the best i found about harry potter !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Very good overall, it's an interesting take on the lovegood family in the HP universe and silver does not seem out of place at all. (140 characters)(140 characters)(140 characters)(140 characters)(140 characters)(140 characters)
Well I shall be a shameless reviewer and review my own novel lol. I do my best to keep my writing quality top notch. Ever time i see a mistake i go back to update it or if one of my readers points it out. The updates are 5 chapters a week until my typing speed improves, but if anything comes up i do my best to inform you the reader of whats going on and how long it will be till the next chapter. I do my best to make a quality product. That means i take my time to layout the story, characters and the world as best as i can. I do my best not to filter in unneeded information. To ensure this i reread each chapter and make sure all my chapters flow together. This way you aren't just reading a book. You are reading as if though you were with the characters and experiencing the world yourself. I hope for your continued support and look forward to keep delivering a great harry potter fan-fic novel for your enjoyment.
Harém Harém Harém Harém Harém Harém Harém Harém Harém Harém Harém Harém Harém Harém Harém Harém Harém Harém Harém Harém Harém Harém Harém Harém Harém Harém Harém Harém
A very interesting in-depth Harry Potter fanfic. I can't wait to read more from this author. 14000000000001400000000000140000000000014000000000001400000000000 The Harem God was here.
Good novel, I'm really excited to see another harry-potter novel i also hope that the author could keep the story as interesting as he does now, i heard that this novel is the first novel the author is writing. I really didn't expect that because the author has a very good story-line, the chapter updates is just perfect with quality over quantity. Something i like the most is that the novel length is approximately 2,500k to 3,500k. just discovered this novel, and cant wait for more chapters
Descriptive and gives a good foundation for the main characters development. Good grammar, and a little too early to tell the stability since there are only four chapters.
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Good harry potter fanfic, the first chapter was👌🏾 your grammar is 5 star for sure and the telling of the ”story” is also done very good. As there aren't many chapters I could only Review the first two chap, I will come back another time to edit this review
As their is only one chapter posted so far I will update this in the future. So far the writing quality seem great. While their are some grammar mistakes the flow of the sentences is easy to follow and it shows the writer actually knows the English language. I gave the writer a four for stability of writing because he said he would post a chapter tonight and lord behold he did as he said. We are to see if the updates will continue st a steady pace, but I’ll give him a 4 to give him courage. For story development I will say that was a very intriguing way to start a Harry Potter novel and I would like to see how he continues it. The charter design shown so far was good, but it can use some work. Such as describing the character he presents better and maybe give more of a background on them. Same as the story development the world he showed seems to show a version of our history in the future and it took real time conflicts into consideration to create a great background story from the world the MC comes from. Overall I can’t wait to continue reading and see what this new author has in store for us.
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