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I love your goal, hope you succeed. oh and while you're at it can you save Fred for me? I just love him so, hate to lose him. mmmmmmmmmmmmmm
writing is unreadable, which is a shame as the story seems really interesting and I would definitely read this, just needs to have the writing quality sorted then it could be a very promising story.
I liked where the story was going... But seriously bro; this isn't coherent at all. It's so badly done that I can't even tell what's happening most of the time. Fix it and you'll get me(and loads of others) back.
I think a lot of people complained about the writing quality of the novel, which is justified once you read it. Not sure if the author translated or made this themselves. All in all writing is bad. Have proofreader or grammarlly
After a long break Will there be a sequel to the novel or not I saw that your Spanish version reached Chapter 68 Waiting for your answer After a long break Will there be a sequel to the novel or not I saw that your Spanish version reached Chapter 68 Waiting for your answer
i like......................................................................................................................... ..............................................................................................................................................................,,,,,,,,,,...................
Amazing! me imagining the story it is like I can also be hero 🦸♂️ and increase my influence more than original Harry Potter is mind blowing the plot was catchy and original story is not spoiled so it is quite interesting and lam just dreaming and thinking myself to save magIc world from lord voldemort apart from Harry 🙌🥰🥰🥰actually a wonderful idea by author a 👍and able to complete one book in just 50 chapters is also a great affort 👍🙌🙌🙌
Amazing! me imagining the story it is like I can also be hero 🦸♂️ and increase my influence more than original Harry Potter is mind blowing the plot was catchy and original story is not spoiled so it is quite interesting and lam just dreaming and thinking myself to save magIc world from lord voldemort apart from Harry 🙌🥰🥰🥰actually a wonderful idea by author a 👍and able to complete one book in just 50 chapters is also a great affort 👍🙌🙌🙌
I really like it. Keep ur hard work, bro. 👊❤.......................................................................................................................................................................
Why I rated this like so? Writing quality is horrible, grammar and spelling mistakes everywhere. If I didn't read the book beforehand and the titles, I would be lost by chapter 2. Update quality is great but the ratio between quality and quantity is lacking. Story dev, char design, and world background are linked to writing quality. If we the readers don't understand what you're writing about, the rest of the story will not make sense.
From what I read, and that's up to chapter 2, English does not seem to be your main language. However despite that your grammar seems impeccable most of the time and the only tell is some of the sentencing structure or using words in the wrong tense, example is this, " but what hinders him is not to have any wands to be able to practice," the correct structure there should be, " but what hinders him is the lack of a wand to practice with,". However that can be forgiven as you still manage to get most of the paragraphs right. A bit awkward bit functional. All in all the story seems to be pretty good.
The writting quality is very very awful. It's not just about missing words and bad spelling , most of the phrases means all the contrary of what is expected of is gibberish ("After killing himself at dinner..") And it comes from someone who read MTL on a daily basis, seriously.
Nice story... you could change the picture is very freak haha ........................................................................................................................
Ok here the thing First, your grammar suck, i like your writing style not fast not slow but boi your grammar suck Second, 5 for update Third, 5 for story development Forth, 2 star for character design because you dont explain what MC we have, what kind background he have i dont even know this is pure SI or OC-SI Fifth, 2 star for world background because you just follow canon so far not just follow canon but rehas canon with our MC in harry place so yeah
The grammar is pretty bad, but I love the story anyways. . . .. . . .. . .. . . . .. . . . . . . . .. . .. . . . .. .. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .. . . . . . . . .. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .. .. . . . . . . . . . .. . . . . . . . . .. .. . . . . .
Well written ... The story makes sense and it does not look like the character is going to be too OP very soon ... I'm really enjoying it so far ... Because what ends up with many stories is that the character gets very strong quickly. I've seen stories where Harry gets stronger than Dumbledore in the first year ...
I found it curious that you do not talk about the past life of the character ... Or at least his mental age ... Why so gives us an idea if the character is very naughty ... And everyone loves naughty characters .. .
Loving the story, you do not see harry potter fanfics so good ... There are really very few that can do it! And as you already spoke of the moon please do not forget Ana Abbott, because she is one of the most beautiful side characters in history.
The story is very well written, liking a lot so far, in my opinion could slightly increase the picancia! hahahahaha if possible add drawings of the characters you created ... or at least some character on which you based the appearance ...
the story is very well assembled, enjoying it so far ... you can use his name as a reference to King Arthur since he is in the same house as the Merlin ... I do not know ... just an idea View More
The Flash you have a good day at work and I'll be in every aspect ratio and thanks so much you can do like it out to the Flash you have to be a part for my mom but I get to the office .
I'm enjoying it so far but I do have to fix some mistakes via mind, in short there are grammatically incorrect sentences or changes somewhere in there, so be prepared. MC has fifth-grade syndrome or was it eighth? anyway MC took it upon himself to be THE hero, being a hero afraid of death but with absolutely no regard to his own safety. I mean he can be silly. Hero~ is a low-key **** planning a harem, two-faced (not using main head) . Hero~ placed himself in Slytherin for future planssssss but with the way things are he really belongs in Gryffindor or Gryffindoria pffft. knowing the future and being a transmigrator you would expect him to be more cautious. You don't find trouble, trouble finds you!
揭示劇透 I love your goal, hope you succeed. oh and while you're at it can you save Fred for me? I just love him so, hate to lose him. mmmmmmmmmmmmmm
writing is unreadable, which is a shame as the story seems really interesting and I would definitely read this, just needs to have the writing quality sorted then it could be a very promising story.
I liked where the story was going... But seriously bro; this isn't coherent at all. It's so badly done that I can't even tell what's happening most of the time. Fix it and you'll get me(and loads of others) back.
I think a lot of people complained about the writing quality of the novel, which is justified once you read it. Not sure if the author translated or made this themselves. All in all writing is bad. Have proofreader or grammarlly
After a long break Will there be a sequel to the novel or not I saw that your Spanish version reached Chapter 68 Waiting for your answer After a long break Will there be a sequel to the novel or not I saw that your Spanish version reached Chapter 68 Waiting for your answer
i like......................................................................................................................... ..............................................................................................................................................................,,,,,,,,,,...................
Amazing! me imagining the story it is like I can also be hero 🦸♂️ and increase my influence more than original Harry Potter is mind blowing the plot was catchy and original story is not spoiled so it is quite interesting and lam just dreaming and thinking myself to save magIc world from lord voldemort apart from Harry 🙌🥰🥰🥰actually a wonderful idea by author a 👍and able to complete one book in just 50 chapters is also a great affort 👍🙌🙌🙌
Amazing! me imagining the story it is like I can also be hero 🦸♂️ and increase my influence more than original Harry Potter is mind blowing the plot was catchy and original story is not spoiled so it is quite interesting and lam just dreaming and thinking myself to save magIc world from lord voldemort apart from Harry 🙌🥰🥰🥰actually a wonderful idea by author a 👍and able to complete one book in just 50 chapters is also a great affort 👍🙌🙌🙌
I really like it. Keep ur hard work, bro. 👊❤.......................................................................................................................................................................
Why I rated this like so? Writing quality is horrible, grammar and spelling mistakes everywhere. If I didn't read the book beforehand and the titles, I would be lost by chapter 2. Update quality is great but the ratio between quality and quantity is lacking. Story dev, char design, and world background are linked to writing quality. If we the readers don't understand what you're writing about, the rest of the story will not make sense.
From what I read, and that's up to chapter 2, English does not seem to be your main language. However despite that your grammar seems impeccable most of the time and the only tell is some of the sentencing structure or using words in the wrong tense, example is this, " but what hinders him is not to have any wands to be able to practice," the correct structure there should be, " but what hinders him is the lack of a wand to practice with,". However that can be forgiven as you still manage to get most of the paragraphs right. A bit awkward bit functional. All in all the story seems to be pretty good.
The writting quality is very very awful. It's not just about missing words and bad spelling , most of the phrases means all the contrary of what is expected of is gibberish ("After killing himself at dinner..") And it comes from someone who read MTL on a daily basis, seriously.
Nice story... you could change the picture is very freak haha ........................................................................................................................
Ok here the thing First, your grammar suck, i like your writing style not fast not slow but boi your grammar suck Second, 5 for update Third, 5 for story development Forth, 2 star for character design because you dont explain what MC we have, what kind background he have i dont even know this is pure SI or OC-SI Fifth, 2 star for world background because you just follow canon so far not just follow canon but rehas canon with our MC in harry place so yeah
The grammar is pretty bad, but I love the story anyways. . . .. . . .. . .. . . . .. . . . . . . . .. . .. . . . .. .. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .. . . . . . . . .. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .. .. . . . . . . . . . .. . . . . . . . . .. .. . . . . .
Well written ... The story makes sense and it does not look like the character is going to be too OP very soon ... I'm really enjoying it so far ... Because what ends up with many stories is that the character gets very strong quickly. I've seen stories where Harry gets stronger than Dumbledore in the first year ...
I found it curious that you do not talk about the past life of the character ... Or at least his mental age ... Why so gives us an idea if the character is very naughty ... And everyone loves naughty characters .. .
Loving the story, you do not see harry potter fanfics so good ... There are really very few that can do it! And as you already spoke of the moon please do not forget Ana Abbott, because she is one of the most beautiful side characters in history.
The story is very well written, liking a lot so far, in my opinion could slightly increase the picancia! hahahahaha if possible add drawings of the characters you created ... or at least some character on which you based the appearance ...
the story is very well assembled, enjoying it so far ... you can use his name as a reference to King Arthur since he is in the same house as the Merlin ... I do not know ... just an idea View More
The Flash you have a good day at work and I'll be in every aspect ratio and thanks so much you can do like it out to the Flash you have to be a part for my mom but I get to the office .
I'm enjoying it so far but I do have to fix some mistakes via mind, in short there are grammatically incorrect sentences or changes somewhere in there, so be prepared. MC has fifth-grade syndrome or was it eighth? anyway MC took it upon himself to be THE hero, being a hero afraid of death but with absolutely no regard to his own safety. I mean he can be silly. Hero~ is a low-key **** planning a harem, two-faced (not using main head) . Hero~ placed himself in Slytherin for future planssssss but with the way things are he really belongs in Gryffindor or Gryffindoria pffft. knowing the future and being a transmigrator you would expect him to be more cautious. You don't find trouble, trouble finds you!
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