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This book is amazing, keep going! Can't stop reading. Can't wait to see more. Do you have any social media that I can follow so I can know when you gonna update?
Hey there! Good day for writing! If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to contact geekyteddyyo@gmail.com. A brief introduction, some sample charpters or links will be appriciated when reaching out.
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Noooo!! I was genuinely into this story!!!! I'm sad that the story got dropped :<< ----------------------------------------------------------------
I think it might just be me but I cant read even the first chapter because it won't load.
Although I ain't far in reading this novel but this is totally BS! Look there is a big difference between being arrogant and proud and the MC acts like a spoiled young master that is disliked in every novel. Your writing is also very bad and there were many grammar mistakes. You could look at your novel first and rewrite it if there were any mistakes then you upload it. I am already impressed that I read 7 chapters of this novel, probably because the idea of having escanor's power.
I like the story but I think that the writing is quite bad and preventing it from getting better at the ranking. I also think that until now, Eros never lost a battle or even got in a bad situation. What I want is for Eros to lose so he can learn and I also want him to fight the other sins, particularly, Pride, Wrath and greed. I think that they are the most interesting of all the sins.
The writing is very bad and I think that even some of the characters are useless and don't add anything to the story. There is also a magic system. Although the author tried to create a good way of leveling up, there is still some loopholes and illogical things. The good thing is putting another 7 deadly sins and to be frank I can't wait for the 2 prideful sins to fight each other If they do.
I like this story very much. I even changed my photo to Escanor so I can show how much I love it. I put 4 stars because aside from the writing, I think that the story is very awesome. I also like the idea of making other seven deadly sins and even another sin of Pride to fight him. I am sure that the author thinks about making Eros and The other Pride fight each other and I can't wait for that.
Author switches between 3rd and 1st P.O.V. in the same sentence, the grammar isn't so bad that it's unreadable but it's still pretty bad. I hate that his is a harem.
I like this story much. I also think that throwing him in the desert, the place where he can be truly at his strongest form is awesome. I am waiting for him and this story amazing things. I hope that the author doesn't disappoint us, readers. I also hope that he shows us his true pride and strength.
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I like this story very much. although I am not a big fan of seven deadly sins, I still enjoy the story. I read till the end of volume 2 and I still want the author to continue. By the way, There is a little problem which talks about the Star system. In the world Info chapter, the star system is used to measure how much the warrior can skip levels while in volume one, it says that it's used to measure soul power. Thank you please continue.
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if i was him i wouldn't choose for escanor i would choose for vegeta or broly or goku ....................... BUT most importantly i would choose for the most broken character THE LEGEND OF ALL ANIME THE STRONGEST UNSTOPPABE AND INVICIBLE THE MYTHICAL ANIME CHARACTER SAITAMA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I'll never read anything that has the word Pride. I really wonder how I managed to read this * Fanfiction *, and I regret it because it destroyed my interest in the sin of pride.
It's not that the story is boring, it would simply be more interesting if he was in a world where most people actually knew the characters. Perhaps try dropping him into Fairy Tale, or Naruto, even Mirai Nikki would spice things up at least a little bit, personally, I would like to see the MC in Danmachi or Konosuba.
good story. although there's a potential for the story but the poor grammar really destroy it. there are sites that support writers to correct there grammar and other mistakes of new buds. try searching it and update the story again, you'll have more readers by then
Seems interesting so far. We will see if it can hold the quality. Can't say anything about story development as I've just started, so we'll see how it goes.
better not waste your time to read this unless you want to be an editor and edit this book for us to have a better understanding and easier time reading
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Story looks nice they idea very good but unfortunately very bad writing quality, no commas also making the story unreadable.................
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I dont know much about the story as i can’t read this novel due to the formatting. The paragraphs are not clear cut and each of them does not have any punctuations. The whole paragraph is a sentence. Dialog is iffy because the author crams them side by side instead of line-whitespace-line. It felt like I was reading a kid telling the story (no offense) because of no pauses and a lot of because of this, because of that. Hopefully the formatting/writing style will be improved but I will give a 3 for now because i haven’t really read it aside from the first 3 chapter.
Great concept but trashy writing!! author please get an editor and review the chapters before posting please! Great concept but trashy writing!! author please get an editor and review the chapters before posting please! Great concept but trashy writing!! author please get an editor and review the chapters before posting please!
This book is amazing, keep going! Can't stop reading. Can't wait to see more. Do you have any social media that I can follow so I can know when you gonna update?
Hey there! Good day for writing! If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to contact geekyteddyyo@gmail.com. A brief introduction, some sample charpters or links will be appriciated when reaching out.
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Noooo!! I was genuinely into this story!!!! I'm sad that the story got dropped :<< ----------------------------------------------------------------
I think it might just be me but I cant read even the first chapter because it won't load.
Although I ain't far in reading this novel but this is totally BS! Look there is a big difference between being arrogant and proud and the MC acts like a spoiled young master that is disliked in every novel. Your writing is also very bad and there were many grammar mistakes. You could look at your novel first and rewrite it if there were any mistakes then you upload it. I am already impressed that I read 7 chapters of this novel, probably because the idea of having escanor's power.
I like the story but I think that the writing is quite bad and preventing it from getting better at the ranking. I also think that until now, Eros never lost a battle or even got in a bad situation. What I want is for Eros to lose so he can learn and I also want him to fight the other sins, particularly, Pride, Wrath and greed. I think that they are the most interesting of all the sins.
The writing is very bad and I think that even some of the characters are useless and don't add anything to the story. There is also a magic system. Although the author tried to create a good way of leveling up, there is still some loopholes and illogical things. The good thing is putting another 7 deadly sins and to be frank I can't wait for the 2 prideful sins to fight each other If they do.
I like this story very much. I even changed my photo to Escanor so I can show how much I love it. I put 4 stars because aside from the writing, I think that the story is very awesome. I also like the idea of making other seven deadly sins and even another sin of Pride to fight him. I am sure that the author thinks about making Eros and The other Pride fight each other and I can't wait for that.
Author switches between 3rd and 1st P.O.V. in the same sentence, the grammar isn't so bad that it's unreadable but it's still pretty bad. I hate that his is a harem.
I like this story much. I also think that throwing him in the desert, the place where he can be truly at his strongest form is awesome. I am waiting for him and this story amazing things. I hope that the author doesn't disappoint us, readers. I also hope that he shows us his true pride and strength.
揭示劇透 I like this story very much. although I am not a big fan of seven deadly sins, I still enjoy the story. I read till the end of volume 2 and I still want the author to continue. By the way, There is a little problem which talks about the Star system. In the world Info chapter, the star system is used to measure how much the warrior can skip levels while in volume one, it says that it's used to measure soul power. Thank you please continue.
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if i was him i wouldn't choose for escanor i would choose for vegeta or broly or goku ....................... BUT most importantly i would choose for the most broken character THE LEGEND OF ALL ANIME THE STRONGEST UNSTOPPABE AND INVICIBLE THE MYTHICAL ANIME CHARACTER SAITAMA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I'll never read anything that has the word Pride. I really wonder how I managed to read this * Fanfiction *, and I regret it because it destroyed my interest in the sin of pride.
It's not that the story is boring, it would simply be more interesting if he was in a world where most people actually knew the characters. Perhaps try dropping him into Fairy Tale, or Naruto, even Mirai Nikki would spice things up at least a little bit, personally, I would like to see the MC in Danmachi or Konosuba.
good story. although there's a potential for the story but the poor grammar really destroy it. there are sites that support writers to correct there grammar and other mistakes of new buds. try searching it and update the story again, you'll have more readers by then
Seems interesting so far. We will see if it can hold the quality. Can't say anything about story development as I've just started, so we'll see how it goes.
better not waste your time to read this unless you want to be an editor and edit this book for us to have a better understanding and easier time reading
This book is the first book i read in the fanfiction genre and it made me want more of it so I suggest giving it a chance fncjvjvj kvjcj kvmvm. J n jcjckxjxjcjckvjcjcjc
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Story looks nice they idea very good but unfortunately very bad writing quality, no commas also making the story unreadable.................
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I dont know much about the story as i can’t read this novel due to the formatting. The paragraphs are not clear cut and each of them does not have any punctuations. The whole paragraph is a sentence. Dialog is iffy because the author crams them side by side instead of line-whitespace-line. It felt like I was reading a kid telling the story (no offense) because of no pauses and a lot of because of this, because of that. Hopefully the formatting/writing style will be improved but I will give a 3 for now because i haven’t really read it aside from the first 3 chapter.
Great concept but trashy writing!! author please get an editor and review the chapters before posting please! Great concept but trashy writing!! author please get an editor and review the chapters before posting please! Great concept but trashy writing!! author please get an editor and review the chapters before posting please!
muito bom essa novel o problema é que eu não sei ler English