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What if before the 2nd great ninja war the uchiha clan gave birth to a prodigy? Follow Kyokai Uchiha as he strives to become the strongest!
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寫檢討Hi author there. This is my first story and english is not my first language so I hope you will give me some advice P.S. I rated myself 5 star and I don't think it's shameful as I won't go arond telling my story is sh*t
I normally do not write a review for every book I enjoy and would like to recommend. I'm too scared that someone will think "how stupid is this person - its not even a review - look at the grammar" SOOOO i have great respect for anyone who is willing to write and publish on a site (original or translated they both take courage). Well. thank goodness everyone is not as scared as me! Otherwise, I would have missed out on a lot of enjoyable reading. Having said all that, I only write a review if my courage is sparked from too little good reviews or too many bad reviews on something I think is worth reading. This story falls into the "too little good reviews" category! I realize that it is only 6 chapters so far but its worth it to start reading and waiting for updates. Even among all the Naruto Fanfiction, it has its on awesome, unique approach and is exciting to read. I was pulled into the story and am now suffering waiting for updates. I have only discovered a love for fanfiction over the last week (mainly Narutoverse) and its thanks to stories like this one that keep me digging for more!
Its pretty bland. And the Mc is uninteresting. Woth awkward lines and moments.,....... .. ..... ...,.........................😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶
It’s a pretty great read with a reliable update everyday. Normally fanfics are just copy and pastes, but this one is truly different from the masses. The grammar is good, the characters have personality, and the plot has unexpected twists. Bravo, Author.
Dear Author : you should mass release chapters so that many readers will read this novel. most of the people would want to read novel with many chapters . some doesnt want to read novel with few chapters because they dont want to read hoping that it would be dropped... SO PLEASE RELEASE MORE>. FOR ME , even im only in chapter 2 . it got me hooked...
This novel always made me smile due to many grammatical errors I am not expecting it to be perfect however even the basic sentencing form nor the usage of words is wrong making my day seems bright :). The story is nice typical the story is from the Naruto world so no originality there OP MC getting arrogant along the way like your chinese webnovel because I am OP something like that, I am reading because it made me smile due to grammar errors but if you can take it I guess the story is nice just don’t expect that the MC is a great person the author made him a genius and resulting to arrogance he’s your typical chinese webnovel MC.
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I won't comment too much on grammar and spelling which isn't good at all because it is the author's second language. I will just say that the writing pulls me out of the story very quickly. The story itself is only fine with the main character starting out as an overpowered genius. We don't see the character have any difficulties at all which reduces any interest. I personally don't recommend this story since there's entire sites filled with Naruto fanfiction, a decent amount of which is significantly better than this. I will admit I'm only writing this on the basis of the first 20 chapters and maybe the author improves a lot. But at the moment, I can't force myself to enjoy it.
Really well written novel. i would highly recommend it... its so good i almost don't want to read it chapter by chapter and let it accumulate them and Bench watch them at once but i just cant wait for the next chapter...... hahahahahahahahahahahahaha
I have read reviews of your fanfic, all of them are good. I just want to makes things clear, YOU NEED MASS CHAPTER UPDATE FOR YOUR NOVEL. Many people liked to read fiction that have many chapters with fast update chapter and unfortunately I was one of them. So, I want you to keeps writing and update the chapter faster than usual. Thanks
Honestly it’s mediocore at best. The story is also written really badly, not so badly that I couldn’t understand anything, but bad enough that it completely ruins the immersion and you don’t feel anything for the characters. The only reason I read it was because I was bored and it wasn’t very long/ only read it if you have nothing else to do(like literally nothing at all).
At first i didn't expect much from this work, but the more i read the more i'm being pulled into the story. You're really get a good naruto fanfic with so much potential here. Fromthe writing quality, it was actually can be categorized as well writen. Though, there are some part that maybe need to be fixed in my opinion. I observed that the author writing style consist more of description paragraphs than dialouge. For many maybe, it was not a problem at all. But i must say that it may make some peope get easily bored when reading. That being said, maybe increasing the dialouge between characther will be a good idea since it will make the story feel more alive. Beside it, overall it was really a nice work with interesting character, plot, and story idea. Thanks and keep the good work. :)
Really good story. Background is covered, and it''s DIFFERENT from all the others as it plays way before Naruto timeline. Writing quality is enjoyable to read sometimes there are a few wrong letters but that's it. Overall really recommendable
je suis français et j'aime beaucoup ce novel c'est une super histoire j'ai hâte de lire la suite j’espère juste que ce ne devienne pas comme toute ces autre novels ou toute se ressemble . Continue : )
Really good, I look forward to the continuation! He falls into my library without hesitation I love naruto fanfiction so much, yours is particularly well done! 140...140...140...140...140...140...140...140...140...140...140...140...140...140...140...140...140...140...
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It is awesome . The timeline is before Naruto's .I like the fact that Kyokai doesn't know the actual storyline and also like how simple the ending was without dragging Madara and Zetsu's end without any war .
揭示劇透作者 SlyOW
This story is about a prodigy from the Uchiha clan who was born before the second ninja war. Unfortunately it lacks in character development and is mainly a poorly thought out wishfulfillment novel. Writing quality: The author does not seem to know what paragraphs are. This combined with long sentences makes for a poor reading experience. The grammar and spelling are not that great either but passable at least. Story development: Shortened academy arc followed by the second ninja war. Standard stuff for naruto fanfictions. After the academy thee MC seems to just go rambo on everything he meets, no matter the matchups. Higher level opponent? GO IN FOR THE KILL! Heavily outnumbered? GO IN FOR THE KILLS! Anyone with less plot armor would be a corpse already, not to mention some victories make no sense with 2vs1000 fights happening and somehow being won solely because he's the MC. On top of that he somehow gets everyone's respect cause he's awesome and keeps winning fights he has no business winning. Wish fulfillment without actual good ideas or planning from the MC, he just jumps into everything and wins by pure plot armor. Stability of updates: Chapters are frequent. Characters: The MC is a prodigy who has the goal of becoming stronger. The character itself is incredibly 2D since the MC only cares for jumping into battles and gets angry when someone he knows is hurt and does not seem to have other traits. The side characters are cardboard cutouts as well, they are mentioned by name and ninja rank but do not seem to do anything besides telling the MC to care for his friends and fight enemies. There's no humour, interesting quotes or actually developed personalities to be found. World Background: Absolutely terrible. The entire ninja village structure of the second SHINOBI war has been changed to modern army structures, somehow the villages have at least 10x more shinobi than in canon. Just to enable the MC to go on huge killing sprees everything ninja has been destroyed for easy targets. It has changed a great world background into something that makes no sense instead of adding a unique twist. Either limit changes to a functional background or make sure the characters can use the changes to add an interesting spin to the story. In this case all we get is a loss of strategy and mindgames in exchange for unbelievable fights with tons of plot armor.