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can someone help me i cant remove this book from my library its been one month and ive tried everything and i still cant remove it someone help!!!!!!!!!
eat a Mexican pizza with a side of sushi fries and if the monkey in the boat has a hammer the duck will not swim with the fishes till they take all the bones out of the ice cram after the space rocket can eat again the world will find happiness and love while doing activities withe the blue whale tribe.
Me parece que está muy claro que esa mujer que se queja tanto del MC por masturbarse en su espacio personal si quiere polla del MC aun con quejas debido a las recompensas de su semen
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ok if you are looking in reviews then to be honest the novel is as usual a Isekai op mc novel where there is no logic for events and if you think about why you should not read this novel because mc meats a divine wolf at chapter 6 so you get what am saying little bit work and here's is our mc with op level powers I kinda think that now days novels are less focus on story and making mc op from start fell kinda Iretating well I also like op mc like solo leveling and second life ranker but the mc in the start are not as op as this novel and I also forgot mention mc is also like man
I m doing this bcs is literally not coherent, yeah that's all. They story line make us reader confused alot. - Times skip = 5 years later but his skill and level still low after what we see at first times he level up is feel like a lie. - His personality is kinda vague. - The story focus make us kinda confused.
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uhhh author or guys is this novem dropped? please say me.....................................................................................
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Hi there! Are you looking for inspiration? You might want to check out our Prompts Writing contest! Apocalypse, Isekai, LitRPG... Follow the three provided prompts and take the chance to win up to $2,000! Please Google 70daysthemedwritingchallenge to find out more! This contest is free entry and open to any writer at any country. If you had any query, please feel free to contact litrpgwritingcontest_review@hotmail.com Good luck for writing!
i read your novel three times and in the three times i reached the same conclusion that your novel can be very much better i think your novel with the good foundation in the start may reach near thousand
The beginning of the story to the central portion of this book was interesting and filled with adventure but as it continue to the end game was trash. I was impressed at first but now dissatisfied and disappointed on the book. The latter part of this book is beyond boring because the storyline didn't as it used to be at the beginning so I rate it a 2star. Thanks for the book and hardwork
Hi there! Do you know there is a LitRPG writing contest? You might be a competitive participant and take the chance to win up to $3,000! Please Google LUTAW_writing_contest or Supreme Me Fiction Writing Contest to find out more! This contest is free entry and open to any writer at any country. If you had any query, please feel free to contact litrpgwritingcontest_review@hotmail.com Good luck for writing!
Why did you have to choose human which atomically makes me drop the damn story since it’ll be hella boring. You should have never given Demons, Dragons or fairies as a option since it only shows the reader that the author could’ve made a interesting and cool character but instead opted for a human...
Translation is like its generated by machinenovel And story is just dumb He is literally playing a game He is another world but his previous world knowledge is the best......WTF And that scene when he was in the cave with the girl ..it was like she was waiting for him to sleep with her... like he just touched her once and she pulled her clothes open for him to do her....WTF this novel is just waste of time!!
Most people are commenting about later on i got to chapter 5 but feel like I have missed about 100 nothing makes sense or it does to the me but not to the reader as nothing is explained and I mean nothing he dies and is told he will reincarnate to a world and that world will be random and he will get a power, does he check to see what his power is no because apparently he will lose his memories(not sure when we are told that but ok) then he choses the worst world to go to because of a reason he knows. Yep he chose it because we just ignore the fact that the world is meant to be random oh and if he loses his memories he won't even know why he should of chosen that world but OK, skip to him landing on the new world it works like a game he knows it acts like a game and thinks that's normal , wait what the actual **** is this story writing I got to him pulling some magic out of his ass and getting a transforming wolf girl dog thing before I gave up don't even bother trying if your actually after a story
I really love this book thanks for writing and I hope that you can continue to write amazing stories I hope that you do more with the chapters
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Honestly this book isn't the worst and it certainly starts getting better the further in. The one thing that kills me is that their is just too much going on. Like he has how many different girls to the point where it's hard to keep up not to mention the special items you never hear about again from the beginning like the book. It literally just gets to a point where so much old stuff is just ignored and just more stuff piles on adding to the confusion that's already going on.
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The story is so~so, the world making isn't bad, the characters are a bit weird. The English literally ruined the book for me, sadly it's unreadable
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The number of times that the words "envy, jealousy, activity (means sex), ass, breast," repeating each paragraph makes me crazy, it never always changes the same speech, always the same thing we know that the hero is good at sex we understood, we clearly understood after 100 chapter with the same thing develop a MC level power instead of stagnating everything, ****!
Everything sucks as if your first fifty chapters suck than how in the world are you gonna get readers. Writing style sucks, word arrangement sucks, don't know english, don't know how to or whete to use prepositions. Total **** story.
揭示劇透 "A relationship is not created overnight, it takes time, an example of this would be a man and a woman meet, at first they are only known, but the two spent several years together traveling, in the middle of the way the two fall in love ". These what the MC said to the girl he saved during the test, damn he makes fun of the world he ****ed xiao xi in chapter 10 while he not even some day, he saved her, and the **** the same day and he has the face to say something like sa😔 I'm speechless hat low author
the mc is incredibly prevert too much dirty thought slow progress and some error in grammer..this is story are full of malice read at your on risk..
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can someone help me i cant remove this book from my library its been one month and ive tried everything and i still cant remove it someone help!!!!!!!!!
eat a Mexican pizza with a side of sushi fries and if the monkey in the boat has a hammer the duck will not swim with the fishes till they take all the bones out of the ice cram after the space rocket can eat again the world will find happiness and love while doing activities withe the blue whale tribe.
Me parece que está muy claro que esa mujer que se queja tanto del MC por masturbarse en su espacio personal si quiere polla del MC aun con quejas debido a las recompensas de su semen
揭示劇透 #harem #harem #harem #harem #harem #harem #harem #harem #harem #harem #harem #harem #harem #harem #harem #harem #harem #harem #harem #harem #harem #harem #harem #harem #harem #harem #harem #harem
揭示劇透 ok if you are looking in reviews then to be honest the novel is as usual a Isekai op mc novel where there is no logic for events and if you think about why you should not read this novel because mc meats a divine wolf at chapter 6 so you get what am saying little bit work and here's is our mc with op level powers I kinda think that now days novels are less focus on story and making mc op from start fell kinda Iretating well I also like op mc like solo leveling and second life ranker but the mc in the start are not as op as this novel and I also forgot mention mc is also like man
I m doing this bcs is literally not coherent, yeah that's all. They story line make us reader confused alot. - Times skip = 5 years later but his skill and level still low after what we see at first times he level up is feel like a lie. - His personality is kinda vague. - The story focus make us kinda confused.
#harem #harem #harem #harem #harem #harem #harem #harem #harem #harem #harem #harem #harem #harem #harem #harem #harem #harem #harem #harem #harem #harem #harem #harem #harem #harem #harem #harem #harem #harem #harem #harem #harem #harem #harem #harem #harem #harem #harem #harem #harem #harem #harem #harem #harem #harem #harem #harem
uhhh author or guys is this novem dropped? please say me.....................................................................................
......................................................................................................................—-////////////////Xxfgecchyfcv x
Hi there! Are you looking for inspiration? You might want to check out our Prompts Writing contest! Apocalypse, Isekai, LitRPG... Follow the three provided prompts and take the chance to win up to $2,000! Please Google 70daysthemedwritingchallenge to find out more! This contest is free entry and open to any writer at any country. If you had any query, please feel free to contact litrpgwritingcontest_review@hotmail.com Good luck for writing!
i read your novel three times and in the three times i reached the same conclusion that your novel can be very much better i think your novel with the good foundation in the start may reach near thousand
The beginning of the story to the central portion of this book was interesting and filled with adventure but as it continue to the end game was trash. I was impressed at first but now dissatisfied and disappointed on the book. The latter part of this book is beyond boring because the storyline didn't as it used to be at the beginning so I rate it a 2star. Thanks for the book and hardwork
Hi there! Do you know there is a LitRPG writing contest? You might be a competitive participant and take the chance to win up to $3,000! Please Google LUTAW_writing_contest or Supreme Me Fiction Writing Contest to find out more! This contest is free entry and open to any writer at any country. If you had any query, please feel free to contact litrpgwritingcontest_review@hotmail.com Good luck for writing!
Why did you have to choose human which atomically makes me drop the damn story since it’ll be hella boring. You should have never given Demons, Dragons or fairies as a option since it only shows the reader that the author could’ve made a interesting and cool character but instead opted for a human...
Translation is like its generated by machinenovel And story is just dumb He is literally playing a game He is another world but his previous world knowledge is the best......WTF And that scene when he was in the cave with the girl ..it was like she was waiting for him to sleep with her... like he just touched her once and she pulled her clothes open for him to do her....WTF this novel is just waste of time!!
Most people are commenting about later on i got to chapter 5 but feel like I have missed about 100 nothing makes sense or it does to the me but not to the reader as nothing is explained and I mean nothing he dies and is told he will reincarnate to a world and that world will be random and he will get a power, does he check to see what his power is no because apparently he will lose his memories(not sure when we are told that but ok) then he choses the worst world to go to because of a reason he knows. Yep he chose it because we just ignore the fact that the world is meant to be random oh and if he loses his memories he won't even know why he should of chosen that world but OK, skip to him landing on the new world it works like a game he knows it acts like a game and thinks that's normal , wait what the actual **** is this story writing I got to him pulling some magic out of his ass and getting a transforming wolf girl dog thing before I gave up don't even bother trying if your actually after a story
I really love this book thanks for writing and I hope that you can continue to write amazing stories I hope that you do more with the chapters
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Amazing......................................................................,.,.,,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,..,.,..,.,.,.,,.,.,
Honestly this book isn't the worst and it certainly starts getting better the further in. The one thing that kills me is that their is just too much going on. Like he has how many different girls to the point where it's hard to keep up not to mention the special items you never hear about again from the beginning like the book. It literally just gets to a point where so much old stuff is just ignored and just more stuff piles on adding to the confusion that's already going on.
揭示劇透 The story is so~so, the world making isn't bad, the characters are a bit weird. The English literally ruined the book for me, sadly it's unreadable
danielw2400danielw2400danielw2400danielw2400danielw2400danielw2400M16 T. Searching for girly boyM16 T. Searching for girly boyM16 T. Searching for girly boyM16 T. Searching for girly boy
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The number of times that the words "envy, jealousy, activity (means sex), ass, breast," repeating each paragraph makes me crazy, it never always changes the same speech, always the same thing we know that the hero is good at sex we understood, we clearly understood after 100 chapter with the same thing develop a MC level power instead of stagnating everything, ****!
Everything sucks as if your first fifty chapters suck than how in the world are you gonna get readers. Writing style sucks, word arrangement sucks, don't know english, don't know how to or whete to use prepositions. Total **** story.
揭示劇透 "A relationship is not created overnight, it takes time, an example of this would be a man and a woman meet, at first they are only known, but the two spent several years together traveling, in the middle of the way the two fall in love ". These what the MC said to the girl he saved during the test, damn he makes fun of the world he ****ed xiao xi in chapter 10 while he not even some day, he saved her, and the **** the same day and he has the face to say something like sa😔 I'm speechless hat low author
the mc is incredibly prevert too much dirty thought slow progress and some error in grammer..this is story are full of malice read at your on risk..
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