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A young man dies full of regret with his monotonous life of emptiness. He finds himself in a dark space. One thing leads to another and off on an adventure he goes.
First time author here folks. Just trying my own take on a fanfic here. I'll try to post a chapter a day. Please feel free to post your criticism and opinions on the story. I'll try to incorporate everything I see and make it better.
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one of the best naruto novel in the current market but I want to ask author , he has tailed beast level chakra then why not use shadow clones to perfect his techniques? he can easily send shadow clones to learn his other elements , medical ninjutsu , and rune mage craft. he can even train his chakra control to a perfect level with shadow .clones . why are you not using his full potential? and please don't leave him with only 5 elemental seeds give him other elemental seeds as well. and you even nerfed his elemental seed because he has no need to use normal lightening. he can use black lightening in his attacks or you can give him one more elemental seed hopefully yin elemental to practice mind arts so that he doesn't have a weakness or you can give him a yin yang elemental seed to upgrade his great way of Buddha technique and learn mind arts and soul arts together. i hope you will include these in the novel as it will be more interesting . and you can forget worrying about being op as you can give him an order by sacthach to lower his stats than his enemy to force his techniques upgrading.
NOT GONNA LIE AUTHOR I LOVE THIS NOVEL OF YOURS I KNOW IN THE FUTURE THEIR ARE GONNA BE BAD PEOPLE AND GOOD PEOPLE THAT WILL TALK TRASH ABOUT YOUR HARDWORK BUT DON'T MIND THEM THEY ARE JUST SOME STUPIDS. SO YEAH I WILL READ THIS NOVEL UNTIL YOU FINISH IT SO STAY POSITIVE AND IF SOMETHING HAPPENS OR YOU WANNA STOP WRITING IS FINE BUT SAD TO SO IM ENCOURAGING YOU TOO FINISH YOUR NOVWL👍👍🤧🤧
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Reading the first chapter I thought it could be an interesting story, but turned out to be a waste of time. There is no plot advancement whatsoever cause the mc spends all his time training and nothing else. There is no character development cause the mc spends all time training and doesn't even meet other characters. He is also dumb and, worst of all, he is one of those persons that turn the system into his wife or some such nonsense... Honestly, this story is really bad and a waste of time...
Can someone do a gooD synopsis plz ??? .....................................................................................................
annoying system... bbye good luck .. sorry for 1star 😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒🥱🥱🥱🥱🥱🥱🥱🥱🥱🥱
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really awesome book, I like his powers, his system, his will to improve. character development is awesome. ONLY thing I don't like is Alex ( and the whole mystery behind her )
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Shameless Author Review here. First time writing a novel. Have read a multitude of novels and fan-fics and decided to give it a crack myself. This will be a world travel related novel. I'm going the route of an OP MC coz thats how i like it. As far as MCs Romantic interests go, i havent really decided and will see how things go and decide later. Thank you and do feel free to share any constructive criticism or opinions.