/ Anime & Comics / [Marvel:Naruto Template System]
摘要
[DING! Minato Namikaze Template unlocked!]
Kai gets reincarnated into the world of Marvel with a System, which let's him gain the abilities of Naruto Characters. Follow him in his path to become a true hero!
PS:
-First time I write a Fanfic so don't it judge too harshly!
-English is not my first language therefore expect some mistakes.
-There are going to be some characters and plot-lines from the comics but it's mostly going to be about the MCU.
-The MC is nerfed at the start but will get OP eventually!
[I don't own anything except my own character!]
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Well in my humble opinion, of course without offending anyone who thinks differently from my point of view, but also by looking at this matter in a different way and without fighting and by trying to make it clear, and by considering each and everyone's opinion, I honestly believe that I completely forgot what I was going to say.
Um your character choices are confusing. Ill admit I only got up to ch.2, and ill might contiue it later, but there are some problems. 1. You said that he killed,tortured, and mutilated people. You need a special type of mindset to ALL three those things. So all these things don't correlate to being a hero. 2. With him having his mindset, he has a certain Level of maturity. Because killing is one thing, but torture and mutilate is certainly a level above. So Why is it that when he sees his mom he immediately has a breakdown to her possibly dying. 3. With the same topic as last time, when he has his meltdown, why does he say" I just met my new family". He never stated he had a bad life. Before you mention the debt his father left him, he stated that the reason he did the things he did don't matter. He showed no guilt for what he did and made no excuses. But no, he just didn't care and not only did he not care, he chose this decision with his "genius" Level intellect. 4. And I wasnt gonna say it, but why did he have to be a hero to get the Naruto System. It would have made since to get a hero based system, but you chose the people who send children to war as the bar.
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Look, you would have saved yourself all the hate if you had tagged 'AU'. The quality of the writing is not bad, the world is somewhat known (although you said this is MCU with variations), the plot is very much like a Chinese fanfic that is also here in webnovel, but the character design is what most generated negative points. I am not an expert but I know that if I want to mold a character to my tastes, I must clarify it at the beginning of my story, so that you do not have any further problems with claims. It is true that no one can force you to write a fanfic, but you must understand that the opinion of the readers is inevitable (be careful, I am not saying that you should do what they say) if someone knows more of a character than you, at least you try to find out if what he says is true and how that information can enrich your novel. I hope the low ranking does not put you off, I wish you luck
Worst please don't write novel please, ancient one is not God. she magician how also she can predict future by using time Stone can now certain things, like hallo Otherworldly you Reincarnated etc. I don't understand how you wrote like this this make isn't any sense, I now she powerful but this to much I think you should watch more marvel movies also comic any you about good by, and please stop writing
i read one with naruto system in marvel. starting is good but later he his own characters luke minato, guy and others using clone permanently. natasha fall in love with mc ( minato form). but mc didn't accept but instead he revive minato for her. similar cases happened. i feel like ntr . so i drop it. i hope author don't do this thing
Development of the story is decent if not a little rushed. Main MC is too trusting towards S.H.I.E.L.D. and already at a boss/subordinate relationship with them; with him being the subordinate (not sure why is that....). I mean if your MC is insanely rich he won't need S.H.I.E.L.D resources as he can get it for himself. Pretty submissive for a mysterious ninja character and lacking the intelligence to be one. Seems a little goody two shoes as well. The story is still in the early stages and has much room to grow. Hopefully we see some improvements going forward.
It's not great but it's not terrible either. It's readable if you are bored. nothing more and nothing less. Yay for boredom. yay, yay, yaaaay.
I haven't read the fan fiction myself, but after I read the description, I can immediately say that this is a fierce cringe. The main character, the hero who saves everyone, becomes an avenger, and all that.
The author has a good idea but the problem is how big he nerfed the mc (if you dont want an op mc at the start dont start off with someone who can take on tailed beasts) also the mc and i know people have said this alot since it makes sense he is just too trusting to fury and that all. like i understand you might want a 'cooperative' relationship but that is hard to do with Hydra everywhere in shield.
I want to give higher rating, but the writing is rushed and filled with too many storyline potholes. Love the concept of a template system in marvel, the execution needs work.
Wow the disappointment is great in this one hopefully it gets better in the future since it just started but who am I to care just seeing if it was worth anything but it’s the author own work so he can make it as disappointing how he wants it to be but give it a try if you like nerf Mc who is very questionable in his actions. I mean what can we do, either read or more on cuz their more stories like this on the app and way better but give the aurthor I chance he certainly can not be incompetent forever right. But who I am to judge I’m just here to past the time
Its only very short for now but what i read is very good!!!!!!! Especially if u think that this is ur first novel👍 but maybe you should make it a little more about charactters and all of that and less about the System Templer thing
Okay well i like it over all but just have a couple thing that are annoying firstly i would rather this not be a template system and instead be a in marvel with chakra and knowledge of justsu cause by calling it a template system people expect that 100% means they are at the power of that character and are annoyed if ur excuse for them not being so is you nerfed them
To me everythings is perfect just need a faster upload speed ...............................................................................................................
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Pog definitely read this and author-san please don't drop it.................................................................................................................
Honestly it wasn't even that bad other than the nerf thing, and for some reason people can't logically think with their brain.. U shouldn't read it if u hate Nerfing and the other comment that is below 2 are just braindead people who ONLY talks about Nerf, but I'm still confused on why he wants to separate his sister from the squirrel girl.
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MC is nerfed big time and the fact that he actually trusts Shield is shocking lol so essentially he is an idiot. Also, he tells Fury about his abilities, his limitations, how his abilities work like the how he teleports using the Flying Thunder God Technique by placing a marker before telporting to that location.... Overall this fic was awful. If it was rewritten then yeah it could be good but as it is now there is a 0% chance for it to become good