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Qilinblood
Qilinblood
1 years ago
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For Reference XD

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The wolf's eyes glow with an eerie blend of green and gold, and its muscular presence exudes raw power.

The System's Martial World

The System's Martial World

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Qilinblood
Qilinblood
1 years ago
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Qilinblood
Qilinblood
1 years ago
Commented

You should improve the way you show the ch as the way you have published it just looks like a big para and for reference, you should read other novels so you can get some idea about it. Waiting for future updates. :)

Qilinblood
Qilinblood
Qilinblood
1 years ago
Posted

It's seriously mesmerizing! The author brilliantly blends romance, mystery, and the idea of parallel worlds into one captivating story. The writing style is so captivating, and the characters feel so real that you can't help but get emotionally attached. While there are a few moments where the pacing feels a bit off, it doesn't take away from the overall experience.

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Qilinblood
Qilinblood
1 years ago
Posted

Honest review The story so far is at a pretty good start, I liked the way the author make development in the story and the pacing is also done very well, just for the author if possible use the idea of not making the paras too big as at most of the time it makes the reader skip the details you worked on putting in, and also the world background part you can make some more improvement as providing a more description about the Mc's surrounding and all. But You have done an excellent work, and Waiting for more updates :)

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Qilinblood
Qilinblood
1 years ago
Posted

The story development of the book is quite good, and how the author has made some new ideas for realms and explanation in the beginning I quite like it but there's still room for improvement. For Author -----> I quite liked you're way of writing and how you progress but from my point of as I read it I want to point out is the paras you have done are a little too big so due them being this compact it actually in reverse made me skip some details and also in some parts when you have done dialogues are feels a little out of place so if possible you should improve that also. But I enjoyed your story till the 17th ch it kept engaging as how the progress will be. Waiting for the updates XD.

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Qilinblood
Qilinblood
1 years ago
Posted

The story is quite good and I liked the way how the conversations are added of the characters. For other readers, they should give it a try and at least continue to read so they can understand it better. For Author -----> This is in my opinion, the paras you have written are a little too big so it actually makes the one who reads them skip some details and there are some grammatical mistakes here and there which you improve also from what I remember in i guess it was Ch8 there you had provided a quest type of thing like Kill some and rewards thing, if possible to make it more eye-catching to the readers you can make use of these brackets '[]' or something else you feel good, as when I was reading it blended with the other parts you had written and I didn't remember it much. This much for now, still you have done good work.

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Qilinblood
Qilinblood
1 years ago
Posted

As I normally don't read much of the novel where there is a female-lead but this one is quite a catch. The progress as how the story develops is quite good and all the minor details are also given. I would recommend that readers give it a read. This is for the Author-------> Speaking from as how I read it the parts where you have written the acts or scenarios and some paras also, they are a bit too big, which as a result causes one to skip the info you want to provide to a reader so I hope you improve, but still till the 8 Ch's I read they are quite good and also waiting for more updates

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Qilinblood
Qilinblood
1 years ago
Posted

To be honest, it was my first reading a novel in this genre but it was good enough just there is something to say to the author that is the paras you have written are too big for me as I read I got confused about which line I was sometimes but still I liked the way as you made smooth conversations between the characters

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    The System's Martial World

    Fantasy ACTION ROMANCE ADVENTURE SYSTEM CULTIVATION SLICEOFLIFE LEVELUP

    4.62

    Kai, a high school student yearning for adventure, is thrust into an unimaginable world. Drawn to martial arts and fantastical stories, Kai's mundane life takes a dramatic turn when a mysterious interactive system grants him extraordinary abilities. With the power to acquire skills from his beloved anime and manhwas, Kai embarks on a quest to unlock the system's true potential. Amidst his exploration, Kai stumbles upon an extraordinary reward: an "alteration ticket" capable of subtly reshaping his world. Fuelled by his passion for martial arts, Kai requests a universe brimming with skilled fighters and spiritual energy. As the world undergoes a phenomenal transformation, humanity adapts to the influx of spiritual energy, and martial arts become a core aspect of life. Together with his friends, Kai sets out on a journey that will test his strength, courage, and determination.

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