Why not just call it a zebra crossing 🤔
Seeing the shop come into view I gradually slowed down my body until I reached a complete stop at a zebra crossing. Panting for my breath I rested for a few seconds, before looking at the traffic light.
What I’ve become a vampire loli!
Fantasy · RayVer
Send me them power stones bishhhh. Don't be greedy. Let's make a trade powerstones for chapters or even better collections for chapters Every +100 PS = +2 chapters +100 Collections = +2 chapters +200 PS = Extra content (LORE, Character Fact File) Top PS giver will be provided a chance to make an interactive decision in the book every month :)
Shameless Author review! With the start of the Spirity contest, I decided to join it with this book of mine. SO check it out and send me those shiny stones, as well as constructive criticism and advice down below. CONSTRUCTIVE YOU HEARD, YES CONSTRUCTIVE!
I really like your story premise, and find the characters are realistic and don't feel 2d and flat. The story has plenty of potential and could expand /go down multiple different routes. Little thing to polish up on would be grammar here and there which could be done by proofreading, but by no way does it detract from the story (it's only minor). Overall very good job done.
A really interesting premise and execution that has plenty of potential. I've only read 4 chapters so far, however from what I've read it's been very enjoyable. I especially like the world building in use as well as the sense of mystery portrayed that provokes the reader to really think on matters such as the true purpose for why the organisation is making them participate in the events. As well as the limitations of the world they are in. A minor qualm and improvement that I'm sure that could be easily fixed, is the sudden appearance of something for the sake of the plot. I feel that at times the reason why something happens can be quite unnatural but I'm sure it can get better with practice. Overall, I would definitely reccomend you to pick this up as it's an excellent read.
Good chapter, however I feel that the idea of why the demon chose him as a partner should be explained further than just 'he needs a host to survive'. However apart from that really excellent immersion.
Seems like there is a tiny bit of plot armour creep here. There was supposedly a demon who supposedly had a potion and supposedly helped by giving it to a human who was in dire need of it.
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Break the Void
Fantasy · EIIipse
*Sniff**sniff*, I smell a shady organisation.
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Break the Void
Fantasy · EIIipse
Story seems really interesting and engaging so far.
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original My Teacher Is An SSS Legend
I never imagined I'd die at 17. Twenty-five seemed young, at thirty I might have had kids, and fifty at least meant half a century of life. But 17? I hadn't even reached adulthood. Yet here I was, in a barren battlefield beside a gravely injured woman with fiery red hair. Little did I know, she was an enigmatic SSS legend. Now, it's my turn to carve out my own legend. This is the story of how I was reborn into a world of desolation and danger, and how I learned to survive and thrive under the guidance of an SSS legend!10 Chs 15 sưu tầm
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What I’ve become a vampire loli!
4.87
All it took was one truck. The beloved truck-kun killed me and ruined my life. Or did it? Wait what's this, a beautiful angel is going to reincarnate me, woah woah woah woah why am I a vampire loli! ---------------------------------------------------------------- JOIN THE DISCORD - https://discord.gg/kPrtA6arMk13 Chs 634 sưu tầm
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My Blood System
In a world where humans were born with powers, Blake was talentless. In a destructive world where monsters and other dimensions were linked by portals, Blake was useless. Would this be Blake's fate, forever weak? Forever getting trampled on? After all he had no abilities. Everything seemed to be heading into a hopeless direction until one day during an unprecidented incident ,Blake heard a mysterious voice "Do you want to change everything, gain power? Then become a holder" #Schedule Release - 1 chapter per week maybe more7 Chs 85 sưu tầm
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Adventures Of A Cicada (Paused)
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"Hey system I pick the Venom Cicada,I want to be that one please" ------------------------------------------------------------------- In this world strength is everything. The strong hail and the weak get stepped on. Kim was your not so average Korean boy until he randonmly died one day. How did he die, even he didn't know? ------------------------------------------------------------------ Join the adventure following the death of a 17 year old who reincarnates into the body of a cicada. Learn with him,grow with him and share experiences with him. This is the story of a small Cicada in a new world full of vast adventure. How will he cope? Will he ever get his memories back? Who is the mysterious God? And what underhanded villainy is going on behind the scenes? ------------------------------------------------------------------- The story of how one of the weakest beings the cicada uses the evolution system to rise. #Schedule release at least 2-3 chapters a week Discord -https://discord.gg/2n2Vp9KtP915 Chs 882 sưu tầm
A high fantasy novel that follows the journey of an ordinary 17-year-old, who meets an injured red-haired woman in a barren wasteland. Little does he know, she's an enigmatic SSS legend. Stumbling upon this heaven-defying opportunity, he embarks on a path that most could only dream of but never hope to achieve. If you have any questions, feel free to ask in the comment section. Thanks for giving this book a shot. I appreciate it!
My Teacher Is An SSS Legend
Fantasy · RayVer