What I’ve become a vampire loli!

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RayVer

Send me them power stones bishhhh. Don't be greedy. Let's make a trade powerstones for chapters or even better collections for chapters Every +100 PS = +2 chapters +100 Collections = +2 chapters +200 PS = Extra content (LORE, Character Fact File) Top PS giver will be provided a chance to make an interactive decision in the book every month :)

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kuhaku_sora

The humour got me going! it's very funny, especially at times where the guy falls into a different world and becomes a vampire loli, just as the title says. If the jokes keeps up, this book is never going to be boring! I do like to point things I had noticed in the novel. You need edit some sentences that requires commas to seperate the thought from the paragraphs. There are lines like "HEY, MUM! I'M IN THE MIDDLE OF...(story continues) that has missing commas. It's a slight difference, but required. There are also "telling" techniques and limited "Showing". By showing what was happening, you could improve the chapters both in length-wise and immerse-wise. Kudos for the author!

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RayVer

Shameless Author review! With the start of the Spirity contest, I decided to join it with this book of mine. SO check it out and send me those shiny stones, as well as constructive criticism and advice down below. CONSTRUCTIVE YOU HEARD, YES CONSTRUCTIVE!

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UNK

The references at the beginning, the iconic truck sama, for sure it is a work with a future, the humor is very good and the system is what was missing, LOLI

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Spuddle

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Spuddle

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dinoriii

The story plot is nice, the world was nicely written out. Even when the character got hit by the lovable famous truck, i love that part! Overall, this story has potential! I like the story so far and wish to see more of it! Do keep writing author! [img=recommend]

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Ignite00

This novel clearly has potential! the writing style, the characters, the world building, the pacing, especially the plot. it's all executed very nicely! i see a top author in the making. keep writing, dear author!

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KingOfKawaii

Quite good, I just hope that there are more chapters. Can't wait for this novel to have more chapters. It has a very interesting plot and unique character.

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Nah_U_Stupid

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