Gray224

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Gray224
Gray224
7 months ago
Posted

overall it's not a bad story just a few bits that could be checked to make the reading smoother and constant gender change of the MC drag it down

Gray224
Gray224
9 months ago
Commented

none of the chapters after this one works but It might just be me

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Gray224
Gray224
10 months ago
Commented

Luna for the win

Gray224
Gray224
10 months ago
Commented

no harem please

Gray224
Gray224
10 months ago
Commented

depends if it's Deadpool level they would heal in a day or 2 no problem anything lower I would say a week or 2 and double it if cauterised. but if it's magic or curse ability probably instantly but drains their strength and stamina like piccolo in DBZ

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Gray224
Gray224
10 months ago
Commented

if you plan to have them using haki you should definitely increase the power levels of the enemy's or it won't be a good fight for alibasta,skypia and CP 9 p.s please don't make the MC op because some bleach powers are ridiculous

Gray224
Gray224
10 months ago
Commented

Nami

Gray224
Gray224
1 years ago
Commented

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Gray224
Gray224
1 years ago
Commented

Thanks for chapters it's so hard to find a good mass effect novel I hope you continue to write. P. S please don't make the mc really op