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GMSJakers

The utter shock and emotion that I went through this book would require spoilers to explain. It's so interesting with a criminal amount of emotion. This book deserves five stars, period.

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BlueJeans

I gave the wrong rating on the previous review(miss click).So this the my review for this book. My understanding for the story are not that much as I'm still under 20 chapter. The writing of this book is well written. There might be a little mistake but it won't make your reading experience bad. Personally, I don't read much of system genre or something related to game. That's why I might get a little confuse with some word and terms it used. The characters that had been introduced, overall came out with personality. We could feel their emotion from each character that appeared. I also think the world background is well describe. I'll keep reading slowly untill the latest chapter and might as well update my review rating and my new thought.Overall, the book is worth the time. I hope you guys who read my review will give it chance to read the earlier chapter. You definitely gonna get hook.

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Meowder

First of all, I want to highlight the author's willingness to allot one whole chapter to magnificently describe the world of the story. I was a bit upset at the mc's pathetic life along with his pathetic father. This though, highlights the author's amazing work at telling the backstory of the mc. The story development is amazing neither too fast paced nor too slow. Definitely a good read for me!

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Reveries_

I'm chapter 16. but I like the book . at first I didn't understand and confused because it was my first time reading this kind of book [img=faceslap] but I like it . I'm still in chapter 16. so when I'm finished I will comment again.[img=update][img=update]

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Treein

This is one of the best book I've ever read. And the author's a very interesting guy. I hope everyone who comes in can give it a try. You won't regret it.

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KetchupxD

The book is good, I loved the concept, keep writing author. [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=update][img=update]

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AthensAwaitsMe

The world building was so fantastic! I felt like I was actually seeing the world appear right before my eyes! Great job, author! I'm excited to see more!

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YeshuaH

I'm still reeling from the emotional rollercoaster this story put me through. It left me wanting more, especially in season 2, where I hope to see the villains face justice. The world-building is solid, but I'd love more visual descriptions of the environment and the characters' appearances. Despite that, the story's development is awesome, and the world-building is stellar, making it an engaging read. I've only read a few chapters, but I highly recommend this story. It's not too predictable and strikes a balance that appeals to a broad audience. The interactions between characters are unexpectedly gripping, adding depth to the experience. I can't wait to see how the MC tackles the challenges ahead. The author's dedication to describing the story's world is admirable, and the pacing is just right. It's definitely worth a read, and I'm excited to continue.

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intothedarkabyss

My reading experience may be different, super different - but it's important to note that I don't speak for someone else's experience. In addition to the feedback I provided in my Google Document and in-line comments, I'd like to share some additional thoughts here. I admire the author's willingness to learn and their openness to criticism. Yep, they are keen and responsive. The story itself holds a lot of potential. In my own perspective, I believe it could be further enhanced with a more developed and concise story structure. Unpopular opinion, a shorter prelude would be more effective. However, it's super important to acknowledge that creative direction is ultimately the author's right. Grammar-wise, I can see that the author is making a genuine effort, and I'm super happy to observe improvements with each chapter. What's needed now is to focus on the narrative with emotional depth, ensure a proper sentence structure, and seamlessly connect thoughts. Sadly, I had to drop this story - okay, this isn't bad. But hear me out first. I just found it increasingly difficult to maintain interest due to the prolonged drama. However, this is purely a reflection of my personal reading experience. Nevertheless, it was still a nice reading journey.

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BookWormDaoist23

The readers might find the novel a bit awkward. It's so because the author tried to apply the TV show screenwriting style here. If you think of the chapters as one of the episodes of the show...things might become a bit clearer..

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Shadow_Magus

Really well written excluding the tiny gramma mistakes here and there, which do not take away from the reading experience. Characters are will written and the flow of the plot is good without it being too slow or without too many time-skips within a short period of time.

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lolalovemi

synopsis is awesome and makes you want to start reading already urhhh🤭🤭🤭

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Patrik_Crown

Geez how I love this book. Excellent work Author! Interesting story, MC development is great, and the entire world is well thought out. I didn't see any mistakes on my way through your chapters that captivated me like Vanilla Ice Cream :D. Keep posting Author and I'll keep reading. Collection and Pstone are done :) WAITING FOR NEW CHAP!!! #triggered!!! Peace~

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HallCowden

This is interesting. I added it in my collections and will be sure to check this out!

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MansonFD7

With several advices I've given to you on each paragraph comments', I'd hope you'll understand from what I've said to you. I'd have a good faith this novel will be in the front page of this book. But still, I'd like you to fix the synopsis to make it more sense with the story, and also change your title to be more brief and give it an oomph to make the reader felt more engaged with your book. Maybe titled it like "Mystery Of Aboron"/"Blackened Days"/"Tormented Souls"/"Love To Suffer"/something that's somehow hyperbolic. Hope this'll help.

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Dark_Ember_7708

I've only read one chapter, and I love it. It was hard for me to focus at first, but I quickly changed as it went on. Def gonna come back to finish this one

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GEEGEE

The way I am still upset after reading😭😭😭 author I wanna find you😭😭😭😭.A good and emotionational rollercoaster there.The depiction of reality got me entirely engrossed.Hope season 2 will have smthing good in store. wanna c d evil being punished and losing.

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Dungeon_Warrior

I really enjoyed the book. Keep it up Author

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Brian_Hanes_117

The world background is solid but i'd like to see more visual description regarding what the surrounding environment looks like. The character deign is good overall, but I want to know what the characters look like. Story development is awesome, worldbuilding is stellar, and the writing is fun. I've only read the first 3 chapters, but I really recommend this story. From what I've seen it isn't too predictable, but it also isn't incredibly dark or distasteful in a way that would turn some readers off. I think the story is crafted in a manner that can appeal to a range of audiences.

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AnimeTagz

Nice story. Poor Tom can't catch a break. Well at least thing are looking up.