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Thank you for reading my fanfiction. I enjoyed writing this story and hope you, readers, too enjoy it. I know it's not the best out there and it has many flaws. But I love my work none the less. It's the first story I ever wrote/typed. I'd appreciate if you write a review and let me know what I can improve on so that I can write a better story if I decide to write another.
Again, Thank you for reading. You're awesome.
(UNDERGOING EDITING. DON'T GET SALTY IF SOME IN-LINE COMMENTS GET DELETED. I MIGHT EVEN REPLACE WHOLE CHAPTERS. COMPLETE EDITED VERSION ON WATTPAD)
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Edmund Vulpis discovers the legacy of his ancestors after his mother dies at the hands of his father. With the memories of his progenitor, Naruto Uzumaki, watch as he takes on the wizarding world with the power of chakra and shifts the gears in the grand scheme of things.
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This story is mainly set in Harry Potter-verse with certain elements of Naruto.
The story follows canon for the first three years.
English is not my native language so forgive me if the grammar is inappropriate at some places. I review the chapters many times but still, some errors may remain. Point them out and I'll correct them.
If any of you find this story on fanfiction.net, rest assured that I am the same person who published it on that site. So I am not copying it from someone. And neither is he copying it from me as we are the same person.
WARNING: Unbridled use of profane language. Read at your own risk. The story also has torture scenes but I think there's only one that's a bit gut-wrenching so you'll be good. Just skip it if you want. Almost all of the story is from MC's POV. I just used past tense and 3rd person viewpoint so it may get confusing given the choice of words in the narration.
And of course, I don't own Harry Potter and Naruto or any of their characters.
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That was one of THE BEST novels that combined Harry Potter and Naruto With a well thought character and background creating a masterpiece that leave the Faithful readers happy until the end. Thank you for the great Works.
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What can I say, MC personality is sick. You may want a badass and OP MC but in this case, OP yes he is, but badass? not even close. The first few years in Hogwarts stay the same like canon, or worse its a fast walkthrough with MC commentary on the side. He doesnt even do anything at all. Just watching, while commenting like an asshat. MC interested with Genderbent Harry Potter or in this case Iris Potter when they met in front of whatever mirror hiding the phil stone. After that MC grew overprotective with Iris for no fkin reason, he just met with her, blushed, and went overprotective as well as trashtalking like he feels he Trump or something. And the most annoying thing in this fanfic is Author always switched POV in the middle of chapter, and author wrote again what MC has told us in Iris's POV. Its just like repeating the same boring things over and over again that I just skipped the whole POV changes. What a disappointment, but well anyway thanks for completing this. Atleast author got some balls to finish his fanfic while tons of them just outrightly dropped theirs, good or bad.
harry potter and Naruto 2 in 1... loved the concept.. some of the facts feel right.. looking forward for more................................
This fanfic sooooo ASMR from the beginning till the end. It shame that only had 50 chapter. Many thanks to lord author, this Harry Potter ff was the best so far. ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐
I just can't with this story. I have no idea why it's rated so highly. This entire story is a crazy speed-run of the HP series, a poorly developed and forced romance between the MC and a gender-bent Harry Potter, with some edgy, teenage angst thrown in for good measure. Within 10 chapters there has already been 2 years worth of plot, none of which the MC actually had a single thing to do with, it's more of a foot note. In fact, after 2 years in Hogwarts I don't think he has ever even cast a single spell. The MC thinks that he's smarter and stronger than everyone at only 11-12 years of age. I get that this is supposed to be a Naruto x HP crossover, and the MC uses chakra instead of magic, but it's done in a completely unrealistic way which doesn't make sense no matter how you look at it. Knowing the story of Naruto, having an 11-year-old who has only just learned about his chakra, and only just started to develop his chakra suddenly be able to learn a shadow clone jutsu is already farfetched, but his first attempt summoning 25 clones, then quickly improving that to 45 is insane. Also adding in all the other jutsu he has just apparently acquired without any training what-so-ever just fills the story with holes. The MC is affinity for fire, earth and lightning chakra, yet talks about killing Dumbledore with a Rasengan, which is wind. It just makes no sense. One other thing which bugged me, is that at 11-years-old and after only just learning about chakra, he's fully able to put his father, who is the head of a family, a strong wizard and a former death eater, completely under a genjutsu, with the logic being because it's a move which uses chakra and not magic, nobody in the universe can counter it. This makes literally 0 sense to me. Genjutsu is just an illusion, and there are plenty of illusion spells already in the HP universe. Saying it is impossible to counter or resist just because it's a different power base is ridiculous, at the end of the day an illusion is an illusion. Also, for some reason, the author has this annoying habit of giving everyone nicknames. Peacock, Weasel, Ferret, Old coot etc. It's just pointless and kind of annoying. Rant over.
An amalgamation of plot holes, bad character design and weak story. The reading experience was wrinkling my brain, nothing makes sense and left me frustrated and had nothing else to say but, "THIS IS SO STUPID!"
Worth reading, it's an interesting mix of Harry Potter and naruto,,..........................................................................
The first 20 chapters are Canon + stalker. After that, the story finally has changes worth a damn and grows to become a very entertaining fic. I rated it quite high as a result. I had wanted to drop the fic early on because nothing changed from canon. Then I stuck around out of curiosity if this guy would ever deviate from canon and was pleased to find he did, and from then on did so drastically. It was quite fun to see the author grow in his skills from then on out, he clearly was upset by the criticism, but managed to rise to the challenge by giving it his all. The result being that after chapter 20 the fic becomes pretty good! So chin up, author. You did great work and grew beyond anyones expectations despite the adversities. Well done.
I love this book. I may not be a big fan of crossovers but this book us good . it really gets a thumbs up for me😂and the character twists were insane as well as the plot which went completely out the window.
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A really nice story, which can keep you up on your toes. I have absolutely loved this. Hope the author will keep on writing more terrific fan-fictions.
liked pretty much everything not much to say a free fan fic and a readable one. i liked the romance of the novel with iris and ed. don`t liked the dafne part very much feels forced but is a good read nonentheless.
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THIS IS ONE OF THE BEST OF NOT THE BEST HARRY POTTER FAN- FIC THAT I HAVE EVER READ. 😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😀 THE AUTHOR SHOULD KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK AND WRITE MORE INTERESTING FAN FICS IF POSSIBLE ON LONG LIVE SUMMONS, DAMANCHI OR NOVELS LIKE SHOUJO GRAND SUMMONING ,E.T.C AS THEY ARE REALLY COOL ....ANYWAYS THANKS AGAIN FOR AN AUSOME FAN FIC😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😊😊😊😊😊☺☺☺☺☺☺☺😆😆😆😆😆😆😆😆😆😇😇😇😇😇😇😇😉😉😉😉😉😉😉😉😉😉😉😉
Very good Read. A tad bit fast but it doesn't drop in quality. So I would definitely recommend it to everyone. Also very satisfying ending.
The merger of Naruto and Harry Potter was done here perfectly. The story was good enough with some nice moments. Ending was good unlike few other where the author just **** up the ending. Overall a nice story.
I'm quite pleased with the ending of this novel. Hope the author continue to make another interesting novel in the future.
This story is.... PERFECT!! It took one month for this story to get finished, that may be a short timeframe. But damn, this Harry Potter Fanfic is good, it's Harry Potter x Naruto (mainly Harry Potter). From the betrayal, redemption, and love at first sight, with a bit of comedy this story is borderline good. At first I was a bit stunned with the original MC being a female (Iris Potter) but it grew on me, the characters have their own personality, yet they have not much screen time it's enough to know who they are and why they're there. The ending is a bit rushed tbh, but at least it had an ending. So go read it! Stop reading this review and go read this hidden gem!
This is a really good fanfiction of harry potter with the addition of narutoverse. I enjoyed reading it till the end. ██████████████████████
The story is a good one and I personally found it interesting till the end. This is a completed story, which means that there is no reason to fear it being abandond. If you have time and need something to read i would defenitly recommend reading it, as long as you don't hate harry potter and naruto.
gotta say didn't expect him to pull of the fusion so masterfully and seamlessly you have my respect good sir.