Police in Los Angeles

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Msilver

This is straight google translation of this novel: 美剧世界：从洛城巡警开始 I really like it for now, so I give all five stars except translation I just can't place more than one star for copy-paste quality. It's interesting story, MC is not too OP unlike many other stories. He os OP, but up to 250+ chapters not crazy powerful. For now at least there is a Harem but, it's not too big for now. There is only three girls and one in maybe category. Two outta three girls actually officially married to each other and they keep it secret that he is with them. Oficially he have only one girlfriend. Author don't present MC as know it all and perfectly remember all TV-Shows, so far most characters that got screen time are from tv-shows. On side NOTE: But because this is mechanical translation and Author does not present characters from outside perspective of who they are and from which Tv- Show. MC did not recognize from where his girlfriend from, but reading this story and introduced characters she must be from some show. Does anyone know from where she is?

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Grim999

Firstly, I want to commend you on your creativity and willingness to share your work with the community. Writing fanfiction is a passion for many, and it's always great to see new stories being told in the worlds we all love. However, there are several areas where your story could benefit from some improvement. **1. Spelling and Grammar:** One of the most noticeable issues with your fanfiction is the consistent spelling and grammar errors. These mistakes can be distracting for readers and take away from the overall enjoyment of the story. I recommend using a spell checker or even a grammar tool like Grammarly to help catch these errors. Additionally, having a beta reader—someone who can proofread your work before you post it—can make a significant difference. **2. Storytelling:** While the premise of your story is interesting, the execution needs some work. A good story has a clear structure with a beginning, middle, and end. It also develops its characters and plot in a way that keeps the reader engaged. In your case, the narrative often feels rushed or disjointed. Take your time to build the story, develop the characters, and establish the setting. Think about what drives your characters and how their interactions move the plot forward. **3. Character Development:** Your characters are at the heart of your story, but they need more depth. Readers connect with characters who have clear motivations, flaws, and growth. Spend time exploring your characters' thoughts and feelings, and show how they change throughout the story. This will make your characters more relatable and your story more compelling. **4. Dialogue:** Dialogue is a powerful tool in storytelling, but it needs to be believable and true to the characters. Some of the dialogue in your fanfiction feels out of character or forced. Try reading your dialogue out loud to see if it sounds natural. Also, remember that dialogue should help move the plot forward or reveal something important about the characters. **5. Pacing:** The pacing of your story is also something to consider. Some scenes feel rushed, while others drag on too long. Balancing the pacing can help maintain the reader's interest and keep the story engaging. Consider breaking up long scenes with action or dialogue, and don't be afraid to slow down in moments that require more detail or emotional depth. **Conclusion:** Overall, I see a lot of potential in your story. With some attention to spelling, grammar, and storytelling techniques, it could become a much stronger piece. Remember, writing is a process, and it's okay to make mistakes as long as you learn from them. Keep writing, keep improving, and don't hesitate to seek out resources or feedback to help you grow as a writer. Thank you for sharing your work, and I look forward to seeing how your writing evolves!

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Goblin_1000

I don't understand why there are such low reviews. The story is very interesting, the author is obviously familiar with many American TV series, and the main character's character is normal. The influence of the system is not that big, the system does not make the main character super strong.

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Drigok_Yuri_Is_NTR

I don't like yuri so that's why it's a 1

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Beserkfury

Anyone know where the raw of this translation are from. ! ! ! ! ! !

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LastGod

ive read enough to say this is probably the best adaptation of a chinese fanfic i have ever seen. While it does still have the smell of MTL it has none of the repugnant nature or bad dialog and translation. Not only that the story is fun and cool and the world seem realistic characters have personality and overall i just want to read more. Thier are somethings that the author misses about us police byt none of it is really that bad. Like that most cops buy and carry thier own tourniquet no adays. So no need to use a belt. Really want u to keep this up and please keep the quality this good i will read every chapter.

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Daoist728592

I am absolutely in love with this book and I hope it will be updated soon.the storyline is great but I think bailey and john are soulmates I love Ali larter and her character but john and bailey are endgame I mean they did get married.

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honeyseeto_02

It's really good. I just personally have a dislike for Harems so I don't plan on continuing this. If this didn't have harem, I would've rated 5 stars.

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DaoistrrzsRp

this is a good story keep going don't stop like the other

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Kaiju_Theo

I hope this won’t stop like the others novels author plc finishe this amazing book 🙏🙏🙏🙏❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️🤭

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David19687

I drooped this novel then came back then droped it and now Im back. I dont like this novel I truley dont and I dont know if I just have to much time on my hands or if I have some psychological problem but I keep going back so 5 star exept writing quality since its like a 3.5/5 chineseness

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HEU3BECTHCOT6

it is easy to read and good writing and elaboration of original works, I read it in 2 days, dude, keep writing! for a person who knows nothing about anything else from the series, besides.

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earth_19998

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Marishadoww

this Chinese novel was actually 🔥 but i stopped reading it when he got to New York. to many series I don't know every one of them

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Goldenlion

Need more chapters plz I like this book

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M4reicko

i Like the Idea behind this Story. easy to understand but Not simple. many different worlds or you can say sources and all of them Mixed together to make Something amazing. sry for my broken english but i Hope you can understand my massage Like i can understand this amazing Story 👍

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Goblin_1000

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