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I think a lot of the dialogue from your story is the same as other stories, where the main character's name is Edward, and also the main character comes from the Baratheon family and is even Robert's twin, I mean isn't this the same as you stealing someone else's work??
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its good so far. ............................................................................................. 🗿
The grammar is just wrong, the MC practically only talks in his mind, paragraphs are missing and everything is too slow.
sorry bro, can't be more. Just read four chapters and I've had enough of your MCs, sociopath , psychopath and sadistic....those are complete words to describe your MC.
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this ff has/had potential, and I was excited to read based on the concept, but the delivery is poor. simple things like grammar and punctuation can be ignored, but there are issues beyond the little mistakes that make this hard to read. continuity gets screwy with character interactions. constantly messes up character names and pov is all sorts of convoluted. (though that does get a little better the more you go on) paragraph long explanations of things totally unrelated to the story or character, to never be mentioned again, that ruins immersion. and more but that's the stuff you notice quickly. this work seems like most chapters weren't proofread and the author is rushing through their work. However, if the author rewrote this, I'd give it a chance because, again, the concept is great. but this draft needs work.
I really liked this fanfiction, it has a great protagonist with development, a small doubt in the future will you make a fanfiction of one piece, star wars, invincible, dc(with one kryptonian MC) or ben 10? they are works that I also like as well as my hero academia so I would like to know if you are going to make fanfictions about them
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The mc is given far too much power and is completely overpowered as a child. As in cultivating elemental control of space, time, soul, reality, mind etc. Alot of his feats aren't properly explained either. like how on earth can he do that. Real problem is his birth period, it's fine to do pre-canon but then trying to preserve some parts of the canon and invalidate others isn't working. Not truly bad by any means, the mc just needs to be heavily nerfed and maybe be born later.
Character is good. Way too op for that place tho. Like whats the point of anything when he older he can just destroy everything. Dumb and makes growth useless. Talks about making brothers useful and not be like show bit gives up at 2 yr old. Author seems lazy here. Mc just going let family die and without Dracula memories he still acts psychotic and just willing kill all his family if needed. He gives up on all them and even when renely born he like i hate yis character from show so i give up and ill kill him later. Pure idiotic and ff going to trash bin real quick. Some may just gor a passing read but for a actual good ff of GOT then leave
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This is a story where the protagonist's mental monologue occupies more than 90% of the chapters. The interaction and conversation with other characters is minimal, being overshadowed by the unnecessary dumping of information or the protagonist's mental monologue. I thought the story would be about building a kingdom or country, unfortunate this is about the beautiful protagonist and how feminine her face is. Something absurd, which causes cringe or annoyance, is that since he was a baby the protagonist has his priority for 'his women' and what he will do to help them.
is this ff is like the rest of ff novel. just going to dropping or not entering the plot
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its pretty grate story and I love it author is getting batter and batter [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
Excellent History. You improved a lot compared to the previous ones. I hope there are many chapters and don't abandon it since it has excellent potential. To my taste, it lacks a lot of dialogue and there is a lot of unnecessary information, but it improves with each chapter. I will look forward to the updates
Interesting and fun, the MC is OP so that's that. And the grammar is way better then your previous stories. keep up the good work.
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Tiết lộ Spoiler Yes, can't wait for more its a great story and I love it [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
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Tiết lộ Spoiler I think a lot of the dialogue from your story is the same as other stories, where the main character's name is Edward, and also the main character comes from the Baratheon family and is even Robert's twin, I mean isn't this the same as you stealing someone else's work??
more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more
its good so far. ............................................................................................. 🗿
The grammar is just wrong, the MC practically only talks in his mind, paragraphs are missing and everything is too slow.
sorry bro, can't be more. Just read four chapters and I've had enough of your MCs, sociopath , psychopath and sadistic....those are complete words to describe your MC.
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this ff has/had potential, and I was excited to read based on the concept, but the delivery is poor. simple things like grammar and punctuation can be ignored, but there are issues beyond the little mistakes that make this hard to read. continuity gets screwy with character interactions. constantly messes up character names and pov is all sorts of convoluted. (though that does get a little better the more you go on) paragraph long explanations of things totally unrelated to the story or character, to never be mentioned again, that ruins immersion. and more but that's the stuff you notice quickly. this work seems like most chapters weren't proofread and the author is rushing through their work. However, if the author rewrote this, I'd give it a chance because, again, the concept is great. but this draft needs work.
I really liked this fanfiction, it has a great protagonist with development, a small doubt in the future will you make a fanfiction of one piece, star wars, invincible, dc(with one kryptonian MC) or ben 10? they are works that I also like as well as my hero academia so I would like to know if you are going to make fanfictions about them
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I'm loving the story bro keep writing it please upload more more[img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
The mc is given far too much power and is completely overpowered as a child. As in cultivating elemental control of space, time, soul, reality, mind etc. Alot of his feats aren't properly explained either. like how on earth can he do that. Real problem is his birth period, it's fine to do pre-canon but then trying to preserve some parts of the canon and invalidate others isn't working. Not truly bad by any means, the mc just needs to be heavily nerfed and maybe be born later.
Character is good. Way too op for that place tho. Like whats the point of anything when he older he can just destroy everything. Dumb and makes growth useless. Talks about making brothers useful and not be like show bit gives up at 2 yr old. Author seems lazy here. Mc just going let family die and without Dracula memories he still acts psychotic and just willing kill all his family if needed. He gives up on all them and even when renely born he like i hate yis character from show so i give up and ill kill him later. Pure idiotic and ff going to trash bin real quick. Some may just gor a passing read but for a actual good ff of GOT then leave
Tiết lộ Spoiler This is a story where the protagonist's mental monologue occupies more than 90% of the chapters. The interaction and conversation with other characters is minimal, being overshadowed by the unnecessary dumping of information or the protagonist's mental monologue. I thought the story would be about building a kingdom or country, unfortunate this is about the beautiful protagonist and how feminine her face is. Something absurd, which causes cringe or annoyance, is that since he was a baby the protagonist has his priority for 'his women' and what he will do to help them.
is this ff is like the rest of ff novel. just going to dropping or not entering the plot
Es una historia buena. me pregunto si el MC tendrá hijos, como los trataría. [img=recomendar][img=recomendar][img=recomendar][img=recomendar]
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its pretty grate story and I love it author is getting batter and batter [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
Excellent History. You improved a lot compared to the previous ones. I hope there are many chapters and don't abandon it since it has excellent potential. To my taste, it lacks a lot of dialogue and there is a lot of unnecessary information, but it improves with each chapter. I will look forward to the updates
Interesting and fun, the MC is OP so that's that. And the grammar is way better then your previous stories. keep up the good work.
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Tiết lộ Spoiler Yes, can't wait for more its a great story and I love it [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
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