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Hey everyone Author here to say thanks for reading and Also I hope that you enjoy reading my story. I really enjoy these types of stories so I decided to write my own it’s also my first time doing this so just a warning. And to those who write a review thank you that you would take the time to write one means a lot. -ACv1
I just really, really, really like this story. It's wholesome, kinda epic, has Slice of life, Sports, Music, Romance and everything I love to see. Besides, Birdie is best girl ever.
I've been looking everywhere for this type of genre to read but i was quite disappointed because everytime a person talks the other person just blushes and it's kind of cringe plus the story starts off the same as another novel i've read i don't know which one copied who but yeah and writing is quite messy he describes actions with *.........* when he could make it way better i'd not recommend it and the story starts off with everything already happening which he couldve just added it into the plot so we can see the development for example when he gets out of the hospital he's already in love with someone (Still flirts with older woman though) when he could've just added the romance into the story for plot to read would've been a better option.
Well I feel like there is only subplots and less about the world they are in and the timeliness except these I love this novel fresh and beautiful 😍
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Only problem is i started following this ayear ago and it still hasn’t gone any further since than. Everything is first rte but the story is slow To deliver .
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I really enjoyed the story, but the story development ist too fast for me . And sometimes I think the Mc get's thinks to easily. But I like that the system doesn't dominate the Story , it's something different from other ''System'' like Story's .
it's a rip off of jay arslan but not as good, it's still a pretty good read. I just hope it won't be dropped. .
the best. ................................................................................................................................................
This book is doing rAther well and i am totally loOking forward to more. character development is in its way along With some romance and the begining of The MCs career. i like how hes not entirely reliebt on his system but wOuld enjoy seeing more development with that too. yay and best wishes! ♥️♥️♥️♥️
Hey there! Good day for writing! If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to contact geekyteddyyo@gmail.com. A brief introduction, some sample charpters or links will be appriciated when reaching out.
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Don't stop please 😢............................................................................................. ..........................
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Eu gosto de como o romance está indo tão longe. Não há muitos romances como esse, todos os outros são descartados e nunca terminados, então espero que você continue atualizando. Eu geralmente gosto de harém, mas este é um caso em que não me importo que seja um único par e com o amigo de infância dele. Eu só espero que não haja trapaça e desgosto mais tarde na linha
Please more. Another great chapter. Story looks good. Cant wait to read more. Please more. Another great chapter. Story looks good. Cant wait to read more.
I love this story dear! And I also love this genre alot!! It's slow paced and interesting. But please use punctuation marks . It's very hard to understand the paragraphs. Thanks alot for the story.❤️☺️☺️☺️
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I really like novels like these, it's a shame that there is so little of them, i hope you do not drop it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
The novel is basically a direct copy of Jay Aslan: Journey to the Top. The setting and plot was copied, commiting copyright infringement. It is a lower quality version of it too. Chapters (at least time of reading) were not edited that great (baddish grammar). With chapters being pretty short too, and so far it is just (essentially sameish) developmemt skipping the details in the original, I gave up on continuing reading. I like that some1 is contuing the saga os Elawn, but u need to at least make it fan fic or change a lotbof stuff, case u r stealing property and can get in a lot of trouble. Don't sign a contract either if stuff isnt changed, since I wouldnt be surprised if they take huge advantage down the road like debt+fines, at least credit the novel btw..
Really good story. I voted a power stone. Keep updating more please. Really good story. I voted a power stone. Keep updating more please. Really good story. I voted a power stone. Keep updating more please.
Good story. Keep updating more. Good story. Keep updating more. Good story. Keep updating more. Good story. Keep updating more. Good story. Keep updating more.
I love this book. Please continue!!! Need more characters so... hi hi hi hi hi hi hi hi hi hi hi hi hi hi hi hi hi hi hi hi hi hi hi hi hi hi
Maaf. Ini agak sedikit receh menurut saya. Karakter2nya kurang dalam dan terkesan membosankan. Keseluruhan karakter termasuk pemeran utamanya sangat plain. Tidak kuat, sehingga saya bisa bilang sangat tidak spesial untuk ukuran karakter utama.
Good story. Keep it coming guys. Good story. Keep it coming guys. Good story. Keep it coming guys. Good story. Keep it coming guys. Good story. Keep it coming guys. Good story. Keep it coming guys.
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I must say that this is one of my fav genre; Transmigration, modern (earth civilization), snowbiz (not yet shown, but I hope so). So yeah, it's sad when seeing this review section because just 1 guy reviewed it before I do. Maybe a little bias because it is literally just expressing my liking to the genre, but who cares. Anyway it's still early to tell the tales, so I can't say much of it.
Hey everyone Author here to say thanks for reading and Also I hope that you enjoy reading my story. I really enjoy these types of stories so I decided to write my own it’s also my first time doing this so just a warning. And to those who write a review thank you that you would take the time to write one means a lot. -ACv1
I just really, really, really like this story. It's wholesome, kinda epic, has Slice of life, Sports, Music, Romance and everything I love to see. Besides, Birdie is best girl ever.
I've been looking everywhere for this type of genre to read but i was quite disappointed because everytime a person talks the other person just blushes and it's kind of cringe plus the story starts off the same as another novel i've read i don't know which one copied who but yeah and writing is quite messy he describes actions with *.........* when he could make it way better i'd not recommend it and the story starts off with everything already happening which he couldve just added it into the plot so we can see the development for example when he gets out of the hospital he's already in love with someone (Still flirts with older woman though) when he could've just added the romance into the story for plot to read would've been a better option.
Well I feel like there is only subplots and less about the world they are in and the timeliness except these I love this novel fresh and beautiful 😍
LOOKING GOOD SO FAR PLEASE UPDATE MORE IF YOU CAN [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
Only problem is i started following this ayear ago and it still hasn’t gone any further since than. Everything is first rte but the story is slow To deliver .
real hooked on this [img=fp][img=fp][img=fp][img=fp][img=fp][img=fp][img=fp][img=fp][img=fp][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp]
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I really enjoyed the story, but the story development ist too fast for me . And sometimes I think the Mc get's thinks to easily. But I like that the system doesn't dominate the Story , it's something different from other ''System'' like Story's .
it's a rip off of jay arslan but not as good, it's still a pretty good read. I just hope it won't be dropped. .
the best. ................................................................................................................................................
This book is doing rAther well and i am totally loOking forward to more. character development is in its way along With some romance and the begining of The MCs career. i like how hes not entirely reliebt on his system but wOuld enjoy seeing more development with that too. yay and best wishes! ♥️♥️♥️♥️
Hey there! Good day for writing! If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to contact geekyteddyyo@gmail.com. A brief introduction, some sample charpters or links will be appriciated when reaching out.
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Don't stop please 😢............................................................................................. ..........................
gggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggoooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooodddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddd
Eu gosto de como o romance está indo tão longe. Não há muitos romances como esse, todos os outros são descartados e nunca terminados, então espero que você continue atualizando. Eu geralmente gosto de harém, mas este é um caso em que não me importo que seja um único par e com o amigo de infância dele. Eu só espero que não haja trapaça e desgosto mais tarde na linha
Please more. Another great chapter. Story looks good. Cant wait to read more. Please more. Another great chapter. Story looks good. Cant wait to read more.
I love this story dear! And I also love this genre alot!! It's slow paced and interesting. But please use punctuation marks . It's very hard to understand the paragraphs. Thanks alot for the story.❤️☺️☺️☺️
Recommend!!! Recomended!!! Recomended!!! Recomended!!! Recomended!!! Recomended!!! Recomended!!! Recomended!!! Recomended!!! Recomended!!! Recomended!!! Recomended!!! Recomended!!! Recomended!!! Recomended!!! Recomended!!! Recomended!!! Recomended!!!
Really cool story. Keep updating more please.Really cool story. Keep updating more please.Really cool story. Keep updating more please.Really cool story. Keep updating more please.Really cool story. Keep updating more please.Really cool story. Keep updating more please.
I really like novels like these, it's a shame that there is so little of them, i hope you do not drop it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
The novel is basically a direct copy of Jay Aslan: Journey to the Top. The setting and plot was copied, commiting copyright infringement. It is a lower quality version of it too. Chapters (at least time of reading) were not edited that great (baddish grammar). With chapters being pretty short too, and so far it is just (essentially sameish) developmemt skipping the details in the original, I gave up on continuing reading. I like that some1 is contuing the saga os Elawn, but u need to at least make it fan fic or change a lotbof stuff, case u r stealing property and can get in a lot of trouble. Don't sign a contract either if stuff isnt changed, since I wouldnt be surprised if they take huge advantage down the road like debt+fines, at least credit the novel btw..
Really good story. I voted a power stone. Keep updating more please. Really good story. I voted a power stone. Keep updating more please. Really good story. I voted a power stone. Keep updating more please.
Good story. Keep updating more. Good story. Keep updating more. Good story. Keep updating more. Good story. Keep updating more. Good story. Keep updating more.
I love this book. Please continue!!! Need more characters so... hi hi hi hi hi hi hi hi hi hi hi hi hi hi hi hi hi hi hi hi hi hi hi hi hi hi
Maaf. Ini agak sedikit receh menurut saya. Karakter2nya kurang dalam dan terkesan membosankan. Keseluruhan karakter termasuk pemeran utamanya sangat plain. Tidak kuat, sehingga saya bisa bilang sangat tidak spesial untuk ukuran karakter utama.
Good story. Keep it coming guys. Good story. Keep it coming guys. Good story. Keep it coming guys. Good story. Keep it coming guys. Good story. Keep it coming guys. Good story. Keep it coming guys.
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I must say that this is one of my fav genre; Transmigration, modern (earth civilization), snowbiz (not yet shown, but I hope so). So yeah, it's sad when seeing this review section because just 1 guy reviewed it before I do. Maybe a little bias because it is literally just expressing my liking to the genre, but who cares. Anyway it's still early to tell the tales, so I can't say much of it.