Great Chap.
If you are not sure about the Rom in the novel, no need to force it. Forcing it will tilt the direction of the novel and many plots in the future. As I see you are going into the fighting/ruthless direction for the novel. If you can later in the story write salvation/redemption from the cruelty and bloodthirsty nature of the MC according to the direction you wish the story to progress. right now you can introduce a possible "love interest" but they stay as friend/acquaintance for now.
but I am not confident in writing it
Douluo Dalu:Shards of Fate
Anime & Comics · Ashriel_Sain
We already know there are realms in SL, so why not connect the MC's Martial Soul to a different realm where these demons come from/break their cage, and assist MC? Then you would not need to or have extra work for creating a back story from them in the SL continent. They would be just coming from a different realm. So no timeline changes are needed. He will be the first to connect to his realm. Similar to Yuanen Yehui's Fallen Angel MS.
What happened to the TL it's so broken?
Change those --> that or based on the context, if MC's enemy is one person or a group of people. bastard --> bastards
He will survive and destroy those wretched bastard
Douluo Dalu:Shards of Fate
Anime & Comics · Ashriel_Sain
r noattling --> rattling
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Douluo Dalu:Shards of Fate
Anime & Comics · Ashriel_Sain
Even after reading the fanfic from the start, I always considered Jiang Yun and Yun Yi as 2 separate people. But they are one. And only now realized that both are evil people. Both of them do not consider other people's lives and only care for their goals. Even Jiang Yun loves his women because they have talent and only listen to him, otherwise he would kill them if they were not on his side, to nip the problems for later on.
https://69shu.biz/b/61881.html Douluo Dalu: Shooting the Sun. I like the initial half of the novel, but the later half turns to Sh*t. Very disappointed by the ending.
enjoy the cold
This will be last chapter for this month as I have a fucking camp which is 20% of my final grades.
Douluo Dalu:Shards of Fate
Anime & Comics · Ashriel_Sain