Thank you :D
Dewi, eaea
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Fantasy · HANA_PUSPARINI
Pretty good start, but it could be better. Some sentences are quite long, perhaps you can shorten them. Though, you may want to be careful with your - how to say it... (pemenggalan kalimatnya?). Anyway, good luck! :D
Ex-beta? So, it's like rank where people can be replaced after some times?
As an ex-betha, her mother is much more aware of the problems that often arise while on duty. That's why the queen gave her a talisman necklace because it was proven to protect her when she was in danger. Even though her mother was in danger, for Keren's birth mother the most important thing was that her daughter was safe and would carry on the task that the white wolf queen had not accomplished. If the queen's life is threatened, the queen will keep her daughter because Keren is also predicted by the queen as a future queen.
Fantasy · HANA_PUSPARINI
If he's weak, why is he an alpha?
Renji is thirty years old. Renji is Alpha, even though he is weak but Keren is always helpful when tracking the whole village and guarding the island. Keren is also an expert on location maps.
Fantasy · HANA_PUSPARINI
Wah, padahal menurutku healer itu job yg paling menguntungkan. Kalau main game juga selalu pilih yg ada skill healing-nya. Dasar Yugala, mainnya kurang jauh kamu nak
I wish the same T.T
Something came up and I couldn't do daily update, but I'm fine. Very sorry about that. Thanks for your support :D
dateng njemput, langsung masuk kabin, dan bikin geger satu pesawat. cliche, tapi moga aja ada kehebohan yg tak terprediski. tiba2 ada bom di pesawat dan si jendral berubah jd hero, misalnya :'D
Apologize for the long absence, I was abroad for weeks and just got back home. It saddened me, but I plan to end it here. Have to write my other novels next month. So sorry to say this - I just haven't got the time to change its completion status :'(
Mafia Lord's Librarian: A Satire of Love at First Sight
Urban · Aliast