Well, just take your time. Although, this is a matter for all beginners. And it's not that I was a great author myself, but I started out about the same way. I just didn't post this on the webnovell, leaving it for the Russian audience... I hope the translator got my speech right.
Thanks for the comment. When I arrive after work, I'll fix it right away. Either I accidentally deleted the continuation of the phrase at the moment of editing, or the translator messed up and ate some text. Thanks again for your vigilance! After all, such simple mistakes prevent immersion in this work.
"How old are you, Stiles?" Charlie's cop instincts kicked in involuntarily, trying to gather as many facts about the teenager as possible. Profiling people like him was the norm.
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Events are moving too fast. Therefore, the text seems a little crumpled, as if you are afraid to forget what you want to embody in this idea and try to write the text from the picture that stands in your head as soon as possible. But, in principle, it was good[img= горжусь]
Thanks, I fixed it. Apparently, having written the name by ear, I took it a little wrong)
His eyes, which had been brown before, had changed to a yellow-orange iris, scaring the hell out of him.
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I would be happy if you could continue to think in this way:) Dreams-dreams...
And I wrote Kimura, right? Damn, I must have confused it with another character from another fandom. Due to work, it will take me a day and a half to get home, so please wait...:)
"Do you need help?" The man got out of the car and approached the boy, and only now he noticed the condition he was in, "God, you're freezing, run and get in the truck!"
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Suddenly the klaxon sounded again from behind. Stilinski turned back on instinct and saw a red-orange truck coming toward him, slowing down, obviously preparing to stop.
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Fixed it.
"How old are you, Stiles?" Charlie's cop instincts kicked in involuntarily, trying to gather as many facts about the teenager as possible. Profiling people like him was the norm.
Twilight: My name is Mieczyslaw Stilinski, you can just - Stiles
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