It seems good and promising liked the starting and hope the story will get more interesting as it goes well there's always room for improvement
Jinsang
The next day Jinrong comes to academy. He walks while being absent minded and is suddenly blended within a crowd he doesn't know why the crowd has collected so he asks a person about it. He replies that she is Wang sixi. She is now of the most beautiful girl in campus and is also 2nd ranked in Imperial academy. So, she is from Wang family and this all ruckus is created by her. Well in my opinion all this ruckus for one person is not worth it.
Return of the Immortal Mage
Fantasy · QATCOD
Well I really don't mind criticisms cause I know that they are due to my own lack of writing skills. And I will improve the earlier chapters I was not able to write because of my exams. Doo now I will rewrite my chapters.
It'll get better after some chapters.
Actually these chapters will be rewritten after 20 or 30 chapters.
They did not live inside the Jin family mansion due to family issues so they were not killed but they were just a minor supporting character so I didn't feel it suitable to make another entrance but they will come back in upcoming chapters.
Well every review is valuable.
I will write it in sometime as I also understand this mistake of mine.
Hmmm, Your advice is good and I had already noticed these kind of problems and they will be resolved after sometime as I will rewrite the story when I reach 100 chapter or when this season will be finished.
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original Return of the Immortal Mage
4.31
A mage who was at the top of the world was betrayed and then killed by his own brother. Unexpectedly he got reborn in his past self. He decided to uncover the secret of his brother's betrayal and to take revenge on all those people who had bullied him.121 Chs 489 คอลเลกชัน
Really liked the opening and how the story is unfolding the first chapter's characters introduction was really good and liked the story along with the character and the world's background
King Of Harem: My Divine Liquid Can Give Exp!
Fantasy · 1st_Manga_KING