Return of the Immortal Mage

A very nice novel. Just try to put some imagination thought words and use some little pictures so that public can feel the reality of the story any ways keep working you are doing a very good work keep trying hard one day youll reach to the top Regards, Hassan ahmed🙂

Umm... btw the story is good but try to make the story look like that its now gonna happens likewise in simple words i wanna say this that work on that part of your story which can create a image on the readers mind. This would make your novel more ridiculous and hence more readers would be attractive towards. By the way keep it up... Aisay hi shugul mela rakhao Shugul ka shugul kaam ka kaam Parho na bs 24 ghantay yehi kaam kartay raho crore patti ban jao gay😂😂😂😂

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QATCOD

Shameless author 5 star review. Even though the first chapter will seem kind of difficult to read but believe me the story will get better as it progresses so please read until the end.

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PandaRayne

You may think I'm being harsh but I wanted to give the author and anyone who would like to write a story some advice. I like the plot of the story, but it could use more descriptive words about his surroundings, the people he meets and the things he is doing. I would like to see punctuation when someone is speaking as it kind of disrupts the flow of the story. I was finding it very difficult to lose myself in the world of this story as by chapter 5 I am normally drawn in. Also if you want to explain a certain word can you wait until the end of the chapter please. I will check back later. I hope you still continue with writing this story just with a few tweaks. I thinks it could be a good story.

This novel is already very good but it should focus more at character development and it should also increase the number of chapters released per day. Just keep up the good work.

🤩🤩❤ Aesey hee shugal mela lgai rakho.. Crorepati ho jaoge... Can I get hard copies of your books? 😃😃 . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .

It is a good story but it needs some work. It should be a lot fluent and the character design should be more. As there is not much about the character in story. It is a good story and I recommend it.

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hihixd3

I like the storyline of the novel and that there arent filler chapters but chapters with actual content. But i get the feeling that its more like an approximate recount of what happened in the past instead of a story that lives in the moment. Maybe its just that i prefer an other writing style though but thats what i think about it, so i rated it like that.

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KeyLessHeart

nice book. Note to author: Just please add "..." when a person is speaking. it will be 5 star. thank you. ....................................

Although the novel's story is quite good but it still has some minor flaws and the author should try to cover these flaws. Overall this novel is quite good.

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GBFirestorm

Sound's interesting but kinda confusing. When people are speaking there should be " to indicate they are speaking but there is not. This makes it confusing as you have to work out if that is in the character's head thinking or actually speaking or describing the scene