Sweet_xiyue

Sweet_xiyue

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2019-05-09 เข้าร่วมแล้ว Global
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Sweet_xiyue
Sweet_xiyue
1 years ago
Posted

From what I've read i can tell your story is quite interesting. The storyline is engaging, the characters are well built. The background is written well. Overall everything is on point. Keep it up waiting for more.

Sweet_xiyue
Sweet_xiyue
1 years ago
Replied to MrAuthor101

Thanks a lot for pointing out all my mistakes. I appreciate it a lot. I will try to improve my writing. I always feel my writing is missing something but now i know where and why. And i loved it how you didn't sugarcoat your words I needed a harsh comment like this to wake up from my overconfidence. Now i will truly focus on doing this right and change your opinion on my book.

Sweet_xiyue
Sweet_xiyue
1 years ago
Posted

The book is pretty interesting. I am not into sci-fi. But your book got me hooked. I loved how you described the world in the future how technology has developed to this point. I loved the main character. You can go into the story and feel it. The only thing i can say i need more chapters. waiting for it....

Sweet_xiyue
Sweet_xiyue
1 years ago
Posted

This story just became one of my favourite ones. I couldn't stop reading untill i realised it was the end. The characters, the details the way you described it in simple words to understand all of those hit the point. The only problem is on chapter 11 where you confused two names Zhang wei and Ning yu. Please check it. Otherwise everything is pretty good. waiting for more

Sweet_xiyue
Sweet_xiyue
1 years ago
Commented

yes...go girl

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REBIRTH AND REVENGE

REBIRTH AND REVENGE

Fantasy · g_d

Sweet_xiyue
Sweet_xiyue
1 years ago
Commented

Yeah you're good for nothing living the luxury that you're sister made

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Li Jing strode over to Li Na, looking down at her with a mixture of disgust and amusement. "I just wanted to remind you, Li Na, that everything you have in this world is because of me. You've always been the weaker sister, the one who couldn't handle anything. And now, you're stuck here in this tiny room, while I'm living the life of luxury. It must be so pathetic to be you."

REBIRTH AND REVENGE

REBIRTH AND REVENGE

Fantasy · g_d

Sweet_xiyue
Sweet_xiyue
1 years ago
Posted

I loved how the story started. How you described the world. I especially like apocalypse so it's a good read for me. Since it's a FL lead story. you have described it beautifully. overall evening was quiet on point. And the story literally takes you to experience the whole world you've written. waiting for more

Sweet_xiyue
Sweet_xiyue
1 years ago
Commented

Thank God ..

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Story No Longer Exists

Story No Longer Exists

Fantasy · OldNispy

Sweet_xiyue
Sweet_xiyue
1 years ago
Commented

hmm....

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Story No Longer Exists

Story No Longer Exists

Fantasy · OldNispy

Sweet_xiyue
Sweet_xiyue
1 years ago
Posted

First of the idea of the book is quite interesting. I love how you described the whole plot. The characters are also well built. The only drawback is some typos here and there and some grammatical mistakes. Overall it's quite good. I would advise you to read the whole chapter before posting.

  • Rebirth of The Devil: Locked Memories ?? original

    Rebirth of The Devil: Locked Memories ??

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    In her previous life, born in a wealthy family she had everything, money, caring parents and siblings, a loving boyfriend, and a loyal friend. She lived a perfect life Until everything became a lie. When everything became to crumble around her life. Until she understood the life she was living was fake. When she broke until only scars remained. But when she opened her eyes again she found herself back ten years ago, when she was still ignorant about everything. She was given a second chance in life or is it? Then what are these broken memories in her head. Does everything really happened ? Is she really reborn? What will Alena do ? Can she find the key to her locked memories or will she live her life is revenge ? Let us follow the journey of Alena and support her through her life.

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