JohnnyReever

JohnnyReever

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Just like chill and read books ,so on and so forth.

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JohnnyReever
JohnnyReever
9 days ago
Commented

Space marine chapter

"We're not here for a sightseeing trip," Darius replied calmly. "Master Kayvaan and I are here to handle the formalities for creating the Space Marine Corps."

Warhammer 40k : Space Marine Kayvaan

Warhammer 40k : Space Marine Kayvaan

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JohnnyReever
JohnnyReever
9 days ago
Commented

If I remember correctly there was none when the Imperium came to be either. So a former space marine asking this shit is quite off.

"Of course it's true. Are you saying there's no sea left on Terra?"

Warhammer 40k : Space Marine Kayvaan

Warhammer 40k : Space Marine Kayvaan

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JohnnyReever
JohnnyReever
9 days ago
Commented

What you might want to say is that the star systems are too far away that the light of the astronomicon doesn’t reach it. Or something along those lines.

Kayvaan's eyes widened. "Are you saying these galaxies are so far away that even the Immaterium doesn't reach them?"

Warhammer 40k : Space Marine Kayvaan

Warhammer 40k : Space Marine Kayvaan

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JohnnyReever
JohnnyReever
9 days ago
Commented

That makes zero sense. The immaterium is everywhere.

Kayvaan's eyes widened. "Are you saying these galaxies are so far away that even the Immaterium doesn't reach them?"

Warhammer 40k : Space Marine Kayvaan

Warhammer 40k : Space Marine Kayvaan

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JohnnyReever
JohnnyReever
9 days ago
Commented

Author, galaxies and star systems are entirely different things.

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JohnnyReever
JohnnyReever
9 days ago
Commented

Three galaxies?? You mean star systems?

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JohnnyReever
JohnnyReever
12 days ago
Posted

The story premise is good. Execution needs work. Chapters need serious combing through to fix mistakes. Mistakes like calling the Adeptus Custodes , the imperial guard. Or calling space marine chapters , star marine corps. This might also just be a translation for all we know.

JohnnyReever
JohnnyReever
12 days ago
Commented

Please stop saying marine corps instead of marine chapter

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JohnnyReever
JohnnyReever
12 days ago
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*Custodes

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JohnnyReever
JohnnyReever
12 days ago
Commented

Imperial Guards? You mean custodians? Both are entirely different branches.

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Warhammer 40k : Space Marine Kayvaan

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  • The Wound In The Stars original

    The Wound In The Stars

    Movies ACTION TRANSMIGRATION KINGDOMBUILDING INTERSTELLAR

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    What happens when you suddenly get dropped into a galaxy far far away. You have a few god given gifts , how will you use them. AN: This is my first time writing. I hope this goes well. I am just writing as hobby . sorry in advance ,if the updates are irregular in the future, but i will try my utmost to keep this going. All constructive criticisms are welcome. I don't know all the lore, so I have to do a lot of digging around to find them. And this story will most certainly deviate from canon a little bit, the MC existing itself is a deviation in the flow of canon. Please rate and review. Disclaimer : I don't own the Cover Image. Pillaged that of google. All writes of Star Wars belong to Disney or any other Mega corporations that might buy Disney in the future . I only lay claim to the original characters that pop up all over because I am a lazy ass who thinks making shit up is better than finding canon names and the story arc I introduce( well sometimes). Warning: The first ten chapters are a bit tough to read. It took me that long to realise that spacing in Microsoft Word and Web-novel are different. Will edit it in the future. With that out of the way, ENJOY!

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