LordSputnik

LordSputnik

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I still consider myself an amateur writer, and I tend to write brutally honest reviews, so you won't get a generic "This is great!" review from me.

2018-06-14 เข้าร่วมแล้ว United States
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LordSputnik
LordSputnik
3 months ago
Commented

Much better! This isn't AI-generated but is AI-enhanced. I'm okay with that. The excessive use of em dashes is a telltale sign of this.

LordSputnik
LordSputnik
3 months ago
Replied to SHADOW_AND_LIGHT

I can see that English is a second language and sympathize with you. I recommend writing in your native language and then using AI to translate it into English. All of the detectors I use say this is 90-100% AI content. If you use AI only for the translation, then it won't read like an AI-generated novel.

LordSputnik
LordSputnik
3 months ago
Posted

This novel and the other ones on this account are far better than the novels on their other account, SHADOW_AND_LIGHT. If they're not the same person, then I apologize, but the coincidences are plentiful. Overall, this is a clone of "Global freeze: I Built a Doomsday Shelter." If you're familiar with that novel or manhua, then you will probably notice the similarities within the first three paragraphs. The Good: I love a good combination of regression and OP MC. The plot isn't trying to be anything deep or thought-provoking making this very easy to read. The Bad: It is extremely shallow, but that isn't honestly a bad thing for this novel. Some of the "mechanics" behind his regression are missing making the plot confusing if you're unfamiliar with these sorts of novels, but that shouldn't be an issue for most of us. The Neutral: I personally like this. It's not complicated to follow, but I wish we had more characters who actually mattered besides the MC. This is my own wish, and it is your story, so keep at it, good sir!

LordSputnik
LordSputnik
3 months ago
Posted

Overall, we have yet another AI-generated story. If this isn't 100% AI-generated, then it is heavily assisted by generative AI. Like all AI novels, it reads nicely, but small inconsistencies begin to form, and the story feels lifeless since AI cannot build characters either. Some of the "reviews" are from alt accounts, but I will also not take the time to write a good review if the author isn't willing to write the novel themselves.

LordSputnik
LordSputnik
3 months ago
Posted

Overall, if you're a fan of the "I Am the Fated Villain" novel or comic, you are going to like this. It shares MANY similarities with it, with the exception of that we get tons of erotic 'extras' that the original lacks. The systems are similar enough that I would be very surprised if the author didn't take tons of inspiration from "I am the Fated Villain." The Good: Above average XXX scenes, good mix of story with a sprinkling of comedic moments, but not a comedy by any means. Pure male power fantasy done right. For their first novel on Webnovel, this doesn't read like someone's first novel. While the writing quality isn't amazing, it is significantly better than the average first novel of most writers. (I still cringe looking at my first, The Alterra Project, when I look at the earlier chapters.) The Bad: Due to the nature of this type of novel, we're lacking a lot of the world background and characters are very quick to be introduced and forgotten. This isn't a huge problem though because this story is purely for the MC and is not meant to be thought provoking, but I personally like deeper characters. No updates for a week after going premium is a bad sign, but hopefully, the author is just gathering their thoughts and penning up more chapters. The Neutral: I personally wish for more in-depth characters that we can watch grow together, but that is just my personal wish and not the purpose of this story, so it doesn't affect this review. I can't say how the later chapters are because I'm cheap, but the author is off to a good start and seems to know exactly what they're doing.

LordSputnik
LordSputnik
4 months ago
Posted

Overall, this is another gene power-leveling fantasy with all of the tropes you'd expect. Expect monsters, cultivation of sorts, and the standard weak-to-strong story with the standard slums start. It isn't bad, but some word choices make it read awkward. Is this due to a mistranslation possibly? I don't know. Unfortunately, I can't give it a full review since it isn't exactly long enough yet, but I am interested in where this is going. Keep it up, author, and consider using Grammarly or something similar to catch the many word choice mistakes.

LordSputnik
LordSputnik
4 months ago
Posted

Overall, it is another AI-generated story that is about as lifeless as one would expect from an AI-generated story. I don't understand why people are posting AI-generated stories on this site. What could've been an interesting story is now just generic and ordinary—ruined by AI.

LordSputnik
LordSputnik
4 months ago
Commented

Nevermind, my question was answered. [img=recommend]

A figure emerged from behind one of the twisted spires of metallic rock in this particular environment. Their weapon was raised and… searching. The soldier's uniform was unlike her own - marking him as one of *them*. An enemy combatant. A soldier from the other universe. The man's protective visor locked onto the sight of Naia and he immediately took better aim.

The Price of Harmony

The Price of Harmony

Sci-fi · Seraphelki

LordSputnik
LordSputnik
4 months ago
Commented

Who is the enemy? So far, all I can recall are mindless creatures, not enemies. Or are the mindless creatures the enemies?

"The pocket's stability is tenuous at best. We also have reason to believe the enemy may also be aware of its existence."

The Price of Harmony

The Price of Harmony

Sci-fi · Seraphelki

LordSputnik
LordSputnik
4 months ago
Commented

Sector 7G, love the Simpson's reference. (Or possibly The Mandalorian, albeit a much more obscure reference)

"Three hours ago, our long-range scanners in Quadrant 4 detected an anomalous Dead Zone in sector 7-G."

The Price of Harmony

The Price of Harmony

Sci-fi · Seraphelki

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  • The Alterra Project original

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