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Fate a powerful concept of life. as proved by myths and history.
The more you try to hinder it, the stronger it becomes.
Born from two beings that should have never Met.
He became an abomination, something that should have never existed.
My first book, so please if I make any grammatical errors, or write anything that you feel is wrong, bear with me. and help me in pointing out my mistake.
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The story starts with a bang and seeing that makes you hyped. I like how you used the POV to describe the story of the book. There are some typos in places, if you make them up the story is fabulous.
As far as the story goes, it's good. You have well described your characters and your world. The story is a little fast-paced, but nothing too bad. Where I have a very big issue is the writing quality. Errors. Errors everywhere. Words wrongly used, typos, missing capitals, weird chat bubbles. You should really get yourself editing software. It would help you very much. Go for Grammarly or ProWritingAid. But get one. The whole premise is really good, but the grammar makes it harder to follow. Fix that, and you got yourself a gem in the rough :) Keep up the good work :)
Writing Quality: I'm sorry but the novel is filled with words that should be capitalized that aren't. Surprisingly the grammar and punctuation is well done! Paragraphs are formatted nicely as well. Stability of Updates: The chapters are consistently being released. Story Development: The story is written in first person and follows Liam and Maria. The transitions are easy to follow, which helps with the reading of the story. The flow feels quite fast for me, but it doesn't stop the novel from being understood. Character Design: Our main protagonists are easy to relate to and are not badly designed. Looking forward to the cast expanding further and more character tropes being used. World Background: At first you might expect your typical cliche setting, but there is a depth to the story that I am excited for! Keep up the great work and hope to see more!
A very nice read! The grammar and descriptions are fluent, and the story is captivating. The dialogue sounded authentic and relatable as well, which is something I often see authors struggle with. Good job author!
Authors shameless review: as the writer of this novel, I believe it will be a very interesting and fun journey. so stick with me, together we can make it to the top[img=strong].
The second review, as per request. The writing quality has greatly improved. I would give it five stars, but some little details still need work. Like the slang Cuz, instead of Because. Or the chat bubbles are still bundled up. Split those up, so we know exactly when the person talking switches. The rest was already so much better than last time :) Stability of Updates, you lost a star. You need to post every day to earn that fifth star :P Story and Character Stay at 5 stars since they are still beautiful. Same for the 4 star world background, that I still find lacking in the starting chapters :) But overall, I can see the improvement :) Keep up the good work, you are getting better :)