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I will post a chapter when I had an idea pop up in my head so no schedule, and I'm a new writer who only write for fun
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Writing Quality : 3 stars ( not great but for sure not bad ) Stability of Updates : 3 stars ( no complains here ) Story Development : 2 stars Character Design : 1 star World Background: 1 star This story feels as plastic, it's not the actions any ration human would do . We have at first a 1 wish which was quite a cheap one (regeneration) . the problem comes to how much of regeneration are we talking about ??: like Picollo , Maji boo or what ? Then we come to sentences and the way characters and ;MC talks that feels too robotic... Maybe the author forgot about the personalities of low lvl characters but giving them an unnatural way of acting makes it difficult and unnconfortable to read . I wasn't even able to finish the 1 chapter ( read about 80% of it ) and I didn't want to continue . Unfortunately the author needs to polish skills for when the world build, characters personalities and basic logic . He tried but failed ( the important thing is he tried )