Modern Family: Genius

It's aight. Personally the story is going too fast. In three chapters he has escaped a gang, gotten adopted and met the entire family. Also the writing is mid. Writing in first Person works sometimes but this just isn't it. it's written in a weird mix of past tense and present tense. The plot is intreasting. I don't know how or why MC knows about Modren Family. It's probably because I skimmed it. Keep working author but try to make the ploy a little slower. You could have made him escaping the gang into multiple chapter. Yet you finished it in a couple hundred words. Besy of luck author and keep writing to improve :)

Meh not bad, atm it's boring and I want to get back to Modern Family. At first my first problem was that things were going too quick like another reviewer said. The second was that he is doing things, but not really interacting with the family. For instance, he has a crush on Haley I believe, but no explanation on why. What makes him like her? We get shown minimal interactions between them two besides him TELLING US he stopped her first kiss, I believe? You could've written a scene of what happened. Another problem is that he's very focused on education and his career instead of creating a story around the family and interacting with them before the canon show starts. Nothing wrong with that, but It could've been more balanced in interacting with them more. Now were in a movie I forget the name of and the only reason I know that is because the events all seem very familiar. There was no explanation on who these people are or even if the mc knows them from his past life. Now the story is just copying whatever happened in the movie. Again, very quickly. Way too fast, slow down. The author could have had the mc interact more with the characters and change things. But from what I can tell it's the same. I believe it all comes down to slowing the story down and integrating the main character into the world you've built rather than him being a side show when things are happening. I have a bad feeling that when Modern Family canon starts it's going to be the same thing where the mc has no impact on the story, and instead we just get a copy of what happens in the show with him just sorta being there or him doing his own thing while canon is happening. At the moment it's boring with the comedy movie part of the story, but I will wait and hope it gets better. Btw, sorry for the word vomit of a review but I wanted to get my thoughts down.