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Not a big fan of the writing style over all. The main character is a pushover and coward who lacks the conviction to take action thereby leading him to witness these 'dark' moments. I'd like to see more character development
No me importa la moralidad de un protagonistas ni lo que haga, pero no puedo soportar un protagonistas como el de este libro, simplemente no se porque no cae bien, es desagradable
for me everything is good except for the mc. the few first chapter it show that the mc is a bit cowerd and stupid. I cannot explain why i dislike his cowerdness because it's understandable in his situation. as for the stupid thing he does for me is that he chooses to join a bandit that can kill him potentially rather then searching for a job.
I rarely write reviews cause it takes too much time but this seems like a story with potential ruined by MCs character design. Through I won’t be very harsh with my review and will try to be as thorough as possible for helping author to improve. Normally I don’t start with negative feedback, but let me be honest. The start was really bad. No one wants to read about an absolute simp MC with dumb personality. Maybe author added it cause he wanted to make him funny and make his goal simple, as is the title of the book: To ‘obtain’ Raider Ei in any way. Which I don’t mind to be honest. But no one likes to relate themselves to a Reddit mod personality guy. So let’s start with detailed review. ——— Chapter Read till: 7 - Writing quality: 4/5 Quality seems good. Readable and simple. The only problem is like there’s anexcessive use of exclamation marks, which can turn off many readers. Also MC talking in a way too casual manner to everyone can ‘maybe’ turn down some readers? - Updating Stability: 5/5 6 chapters a week is more than enough to fill this rating to 5. That’s a great release schedule. - Story Development: 4/5 I would say that story design is very generic, but it’s good too. It’s simple. We know MC’s goal and his personality from the get go, which ‘could’ be a great way to start. BUT I didn’t like how MC just get super demotivated as soon as he learnt that he don’t have any money and he can’t register as an adventurer. He then sat down at a random lake wasting his own time. This is completely different from his character. If he is actually obsessed with Ei, then he would definitely not mind swooping low as to beg for Mora or try to get work anywhere nearby just to meet ends meet. If he didn’t awaken his system, then he would have wasted hours of time and would have starved to death! Which is a massive dumbness from MCs side if you want to make him smart and strong enough to ‘obtain’ Ei. There’s just more to it then that. But I’ll stop at that as that’s the massive turn off I felt during my read. - Character Design: 1/5 At start I felt like he was basically jokingly simping for Ei. And even if he was not, I would have been fine if he was at least smart enough to accomplish what he wants to achieve. Like I mentioned earlier, it is a massive turn off just from reading how he would have potentially wasted time if he didn’t awaken his System. The character is also not likable. He’s simping. And maybe there are people who might relate to it, but there aren’t many who will actually enjoy his excessive simp behavior and his dumb decisions at many points. - World Background: 4/5 I like Genshin but I don’t like their starting story development. But it’s an definitely decent work to have as an World Background. ——— Overall: 3.6/5
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After reading it, it's quite enjoyable, the author doesn't scare away from diving into the dark side of humanity, but also the protagonist is interesting to read, though this FF is without it's flaws, some skills seems to not connect smoothly with it's downsides, and the protagonist can be sometimes dumb and annoying to read but overall it's a great FF, defo a must read.
Harem bukan? ★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★
The MC charater is like idiot and the story development is like wind cause they doesn't make sense
its good , comparable to serenity system and some other ogs just make sure to keep update stability. we need like 1 ch everyday plssssssssssssssssssssss
I have read all the chapters, and it's pretty amazing! Y'all MUST read it! ........................ ...................... .................. ............... ............ .......... ......... ........ ....... ..... ... .. .
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The story will focus on the Protagonist who wants to improve himself first before becoming strong. In the process, he will experience many dark events, friendship, horror, mystery, comedy, and more. If you read it all the way through, you'll find it interesting and amazing <3 You might feel bored in some chapters. Take a break, and enjoy it when your mood improves. Because whether or not the story is interesting is caused by your mood too. Take care of your health! And we'll meet at the ending! I'll try to update every day, by the way. However, busyness doesn't allow me at all 😭
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Not a big fan of the writing style over all. The main character is a pushover and coward who lacks the conviction to take action thereby leading him to witness these 'dark' moments. I'd like to see more character development
No me importa la moralidad de un protagonistas ni lo que haga, pero no puedo soportar un protagonistas como el de este libro, simplemente no se porque no cae bien, es desagradable
for me everything is good except for the mc. the few first chapter it show that the mc is a bit cowerd and stupid. I cannot explain why i dislike his cowerdness because it's understandable in his situation. as for the stupid thing he does for me is that he chooses to join a bandit that can kill him potentially rather then searching for a job.
I rarely write reviews cause it takes too much time but this seems like a story with potential ruined by MCs character design. Through I won’t be very harsh with my review and will try to be as thorough as possible for helping author to improve. Normally I don’t start with negative feedback, but let me be honest. The start was really bad. No one wants to read about an absolute simp MC with dumb personality. Maybe author added it cause he wanted to make him funny and make his goal simple, as is the title of the book: To ‘obtain’ Raider Ei in any way. Which I don’t mind to be honest. But no one likes to relate themselves to a Reddit mod personality guy. So let’s start with detailed review. ——— Chapter Read till: 7 - Writing quality: 4/5 Quality seems good. Readable and simple. The only problem is like there’s anexcessive use of exclamation marks, which can turn off many readers. Also MC talking in a way too casual manner to everyone can ‘maybe’ turn down some readers? - Updating Stability: 5/5 6 chapters a week is more than enough to fill this rating to 5. That’s a great release schedule. - Story Development: 4/5 I would say that story design is very generic, but it’s good too. It’s simple. We know MC’s goal and his personality from the get go, which ‘could’ be a great way to start. BUT I didn’t like how MC just get super demotivated as soon as he learnt that he don’t have any money and he can’t register as an adventurer. He then sat down at a random lake wasting his own time. This is completely different from his character. If he is actually obsessed with Ei, then he would definitely not mind swooping low as to beg for Mora or try to get work anywhere nearby just to meet ends meet. If he didn’t awaken his system, then he would have wasted hours of time and would have starved to death! Which is a massive dumbness from MCs side if you want to make him smart and strong enough to ‘obtain’ Ei. There’s just more to it then that. But I’ll stop at that as that’s the massive turn off I felt during my read. - Character Design: 1/5 At start I felt like he was basically jokingly simping for Ei. And even if he was not, I would have been fine if he was at least smart enough to accomplish what he wants to achieve. Like I mentioned earlier, it is a massive turn off just from reading how he would have potentially wasted time if he didn’t awaken his System. The character is also not likable. He’s simping. And maybe there are people who might relate to it, but there aren’t many who will actually enjoy his excessive simp behavior and his dumb decisions at many points. - World Background: 4/5 I like Genshin but I don’t like their starting story development. But it’s an definitely decent work to have as an World Background. ——— Overall: 3.6/5
เปิดเผยสปอยเลอร์ After reading it, it's quite enjoyable, the author doesn't scare away from diving into the dark side of humanity, but also the protagonist is interesting to read, though this FF is without it's flaws, some skills seems to not connect smoothly with it's downsides, and the protagonist can be sometimes dumb and annoying to read but overall it's a great FF, defo a must read.
Harem bukan? ★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★
The MC charater is like idiot and the story development is like wind cause they doesn't make sense
its good , comparable to serenity system and some other ogs just make sure to keep update stability. we need like 1 ch everyday plssssssssssssssssssssss
I have read all the chapters, and it's pretty amazing! Y'all MUST read it! ........................ ...................... .................. ............... ............ .......... ......... ........ ....... ..... ... .. .
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The story will focus on the Protagonist who wants to improve himself first before becoming strong. In the process, he will experience many dark events, friendship, horror, mystery, comedy, and more. If you read it all the way through, you'll find it interesting and amazing <3 You might feel bored in some chapters. Take a break, and enjoy it when your mood improves. Because whether or not the story is interesting is caused by your mood too. Take care of your health! And we'll meet at the ending! I'll try to update every day, by the way. However, busyness doesn't allow me at all 😭