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Here I am posting a review I never posted one usually I just comment but I am going because of two things First the potential and the quality of the story Second the talent of the Author So I will start with the positive points of the story As this is a fanfiction i will start with the world building or more precisely its consistency with the original story (DB) the author really paid homage to the original story how he described the world or how he organizes the arcs it's just extraordinary and not to mention the ki system one of the weak points of db the inconsistency in fights or how the ki works the author managed to make it coherent and the explanations are one of the best that I have seen in a fiction I can't give less than 5 for the world building Now for the writing like the world building it's really very good the author has real talent for that for me a good author is an author who can transmit the emotion he wants to the readers and he succeeded in doing that you feel the emotions and that the world is alive and the fights are beautiful you don't have a character that forget a move he has or don't know when to use it and you really feel the excitement during the fights some time there too many description it can annoy some but that all there just another thing i will explain in the end For me the writing deserved a 4,5 It's almost perfect not a 5 but that's normal it's the author's first fiction and with his talent I'm sure he'll improve For the Updates it's quite consistent I saw the author take a break between the arcs but normal maybe he thinks about the story or just rests a little but apart from that it's very consistent So 4,5 well deserved I would like to give a perfect score but I try to be as objective as possible Finally the Characters they are perfect the author managed to make them intelligent and transformers 1 dimensional characters into 3 dimensional characters you really understand their choice and he even managed to make even secondary characters memorable I have nothing to complain about even the main character is intelligent and has a cool character development (something I don't personally like but it won't influence my notation because I try to be as rational as possible I will explain at the end of the review of some want to know) Here is my review Those were the positive points, now let's move on to the negatives First thing it's about the writing and the second and last is something completely subjective it won't have any influence over my rating let's start the first thing is gags and the goofyness of the story there is too much especially at the beginning of the story but that's not really the problem as I said I try to be as objective as possible and the humor is subjective it's not something that should be taken intro account intro the rating so i will explain why it's too much (It decreases as the story progresses and the author improves) the gags and humor should never have an impact in the story and should never influence the characters an example in some parts of the story the mc did let picolo take Gohan and MC was charged to inform chichi naturally she was angry that the MC did let picolo take him and she threatened the MC to protect his son even if it cost him his life and the mc was so afraid he didn't say a word and nodded the gag that the angry chichi makes other characters afraid is normal it exists even in DB but it should never influence the course of the story the MC is stronger he shouldn't put his life in danger because of a gag he can promise to protect Gohan because of guilt or empathy but never because of a gag another thing mr.popo did train the mc the gag was that mr.popo is the strongest that a gag some may find it funny other not but that is not the problem at some point the narrator says that Mr po-po is stronger than zeno here is the problem first as i said a gag should never have an impact on the story and even less the power rankings of fiction and a narrator should be neutral it would be okay if The mc said that while thinking Because that would be just his opinion (maybe influenced by fear of the moment or just as a joke) but the narrator should stay neutral because in a story any thing the narrator says should be the True that was all I have to say about the humor let's go to the last thing my opinion about the mc (again my personal opinion and it has nothing to do with the quality of the story and it didn't influence my rankings) at the start I really liked the MC in the start Even when born as a human he did succeed in becoming stronger he was intelligent rational and would do anything to make the earth survive and would always make the most rational choice even if he had to sacrifice character (he didn't really sacrifice character just made sure that the story followed the canon an example made sure that goku was dead against Raditz so he can go to Kaio and lean kaioken for the fights against Vegeta later because he wasn't strong enough at that moment) i like his logical thinking not being blinded by his emotions (that was because he sees the characters just as characters not as real people) but as the story progressed he became more and more human and promised himself to never again sacrifice his friends even if he has to die The Characters development was amazing author i have nothing to say about it especially the confrontation with Picolo but I would have preferred his character was still the same i liked his rational manipulative personality that who did put the result before the process again that was just my preference Author good luck with the rest of the story you really have talent don't give up I tried to put my emotions out of the rating as much as possible and give the story the rating it deserves out of respect for the author
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every character in this is 3D and not just 1-dimensional , nappa, raditz, zarbon, even that frog from planet namek this story have the Weak to strong MC trope so if you want MC who have the planetary power level since he is a baby this is not for you,
Equuleus_Nox. If this story ever ends for some reason without making it to atleast dragon ball super. I will find you.
Una cosa que me e recordado revisando mi conocimiento de dragón ball e recordado de qué me sonaba lo de la zona pues esto es un nombre que ya estaba en dragón ball por qué tienes que saber que los 18 ahora 12 universos está envuelto por la zona neutral un lugar de dimensiones superiores en expansión sin fin que abarca sus Universos empequeñeciéndolos hasta convertirlos en esferas , en ella existe una incontable cantidad de planetas por ejemplo en planeta donde se hizo el torneo de champa y bills a lo que quiero llegar todo lo que está en la zona neutral se dice que está " en la zona" todo lo que está fuera de ella se llama "Fuera de la Zona"
the fic starts out kinda OK, but then the author keeps trying to replicate abridged comedy into the fic which gets tedious fast. also the author keeps making up reasons to preserve cannon which is dumb. if you could go ssj4 from day one and wipe everyone from the start why wouldn't you? if you want goku to keep training just show him that there is a higher power level.
Alright! I’ve been reading this for a while and completely forgot to give it a review! {Writing Quality: 5/5 - Superb!} {Updating Stability: 5/5 - The Author used to update every 2 days, but it recently decreased because he has his own life, and now its slowly increasing back to the same schedule. He’s mentioned many times that he has planned this fanfic really far, so we can hope for it to not be forgotten or left on hiatus anytime soon.} {Story Development: 5/5 - The approach to the story and its battles are amazing and the direction the story heads as well as unexpected variables appearing. (Dont worry, it doesn’t stray from cannon)} {Character Design: 5/5 - The emotions, thoughts and feelings isn’t shown just for our MC, but for everyone.} {World Background: 5/5 - I’m not one to overly focus on world background itself, but the history and new takes are interesting, always keeping me on hook.} Now a lot of readers hated on this because the MC (Ajax) is a human, not a saiyan or anything. However, he has unique abilities that haven’t been properly explored in canon, but that’s what the author is doing here; - Adaptation & Ki - His adapting ability is as said, he can adapt to attacks he’s already been hit with before, but this doesn’t necessarily make him invulnerable. If a second attack is stronger than the first attack he had adapted to, then he will undoubtedly take some damage. Ajax’s mastery over Ki is phenomenal and they way it’s described and used in battle makes you wonder the endless possibilities with it. The way he has something called the zone, an area of which is under his control. The author also makes use of techniques that don’t have much of an appearance in the canon, such as the Multi-form technique. They also make use of telepathically speaking to one another during a fight. What’s more impressive is the MC’s cunningness and is regarded as a tactician. Everyone will always look towards him for a plan of attack, where you can actually feel their lives are on the line in the midst of battle. In the beginning the MC views everyone as fictional characters, and doesn’t hesitate to sacrifice some of the Z fighters. However, the author makes great use of character development, where Ajax breaks down into a mess and cries into bulma’s shoulder, finally seeing everything and everyone as real. Also, his development of strength is not selfish as other fanfics would portray the MC as. It’s shown Ajax cares for his comrades to grow stronger along with him and he does so in the book. It’s only in the Frieza Arc now, but the direction the author decided to head in is absolutely amazing. The fanfic doesn’t just focus on Ajax himself, but also some chapters and definitely the fights are dedicated to other Z fighters. Another major thing to note, is this book also has comedic attrributes, so its not serious 24/7, there’d be moments of laughter in between or during fights, conversations and during training. Especially the way Ajax mocks the enemies. I’ve said all I can think of right now, but there’s still a lot more great things to be said about this book and the author. READ IT!
Best dragon ball fanfic hands down, not just on this app, but ever. Hope it goes all the way through, becuase it’s been amazing to experience so far.
This is just a gorgeous tribute to the I.P.! Haven’t read fanfiction since my teens and let me just say that i wish i’d have this quality in the actual show and manga. Chef’s kiss. I won’t say I was liking how it was early on, in the saiyan saga. Stuck around mainly because the mechanics for the application of ki and such special moves within the world of dragonball were very insightful. But i figured the story would just be a power fantasy, till you know picollo drops some no F’s aura on the OC insert. I think the author is more madly respectful of he DB characters than the goated akira was XD. Not a fan of the Poronga wish, but i get it. Loving the amped dificulty for your adaption though.
Someone can tell me who is the waifu? please i need to know this . is Bulma ? number 18? >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>
Whole character arcs. It doesn't just focus on the mc. It's an actual cohesive story with fleshed out characters and motivations. It's a realistic slow burn for the main character's power. The character changes... It's just peak. I am fiending for more.
honest thoughts of this story after reading countless dragon ball fics. pure rubbish. the author is doing everything he can to weaken the mc. this dragon ball not some Chinese cultivation novels no need for miracle backers or plants or pills or to be the literal son of the plane/heavens to have plot armor. yet for som3 damn reason the author just doesn't learn his dang lesson dragon ball is a world where literally anyone can be the strongest if they train hard enough learn ki control and manipulation and a few wishes for a stronger body and some training gear, someone can become God level easily. I don't understand why the author just couldn't make the mc struggle a bit fight som3 losing battles here and there train get stronger and push the story forward. the whole need to follow Canon is just Boring a stupid. it's why I love the Chinese dragon ball fics even tho 99% of them are all sayian based at least the Chinese fics know how to say screw plot I'll do my own thing
By far the best Dragon Ball fanfic. This is the wet dream of any Dragon Ball...
honestly, best dragon ball fanfic ever. even though he's only human, he can contend with others with his creativeness
Really good story with a nice side of comedy and well written fights, which is a surprise coming from a DBZ ff which their canon is pretty simple. The author expands on the characters by adding some character traits to some who were sorely lacking in personality and depth. I really have nothing to complain about when it comes to this novel as it is exactly what it advertises: an alternate Dragon Ball. At the time of writing this review, the author is at the end of the Namek arc and the OC's involvement, as well as the nuanced character changes, are clearly felt and I for one enjoy them. Definitely give this novel a try, you won't regret it!
One of the best things I've read in a long time (Muito boa mesmo)[img=atualização][img=atualização][img=atualização][img=atualização][img=atualização]
one of the best fan fictions I've ever read. the care in how the characters are written and how they feel towards the main character is well done. the beginning is somewhat iffy, but it only gets absolutely better and stays consistent as it goes on. it really is worth the read.
Buena historia, le da un aire fresco a la saga y no se hace repetitivo. Me gusta como se manejan los personajes dandoles nuevas personalidades haciendo que se sientan mas vivos y menos planos. Otra cosa destacable de la obra seria sobre el dilema del mc de seguir la ruta original conllevando a tragicas perdidas en el futuro pero garantizando una ruta segura o arriesgarse a cambiar el canon. En general muy buen trabajo. PSDT: Seria epico si Janemba y Tapion hacen una apracion en el futuro aunque sea una referencia.
For now the best developed dragon ball stories Ive ever read the character developement is on point and the redemption of Ajax is gonna go hard
Absolute peak Dragon Ball fanfic. I thank you author for creating this masterpiece.
Best novel I've read about Dragon Ball 🤩🤩🤩 This is the first novel I see about a human incarnation in Dragon Ball, where humans are always underestimated, but you've made it fun to read, it's made his power development balanced without exaggeration, and his character development is also fun, and the story development is amazing because the characters have other dimensions not portrayed in the original story. Thanks for this masterpiece.
At first I enjoyed it, although I absolutely hated the fact that he was going out of his way to preserve canon I could understand it. When Piccolo confronted him after the battle with vegeta I was ecstatic hoping for some change. And what does the mc do the moment he steps on namek with his pitiful power level ? he ditches everybody and runs to another village because they didn't go to the village he originally wanted. I just stared at his stupidity in shock and that's where I gave up He acts like the world will definitely bend to his plans then starts panicking when it doesn't. I can't do this anymore more
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Running into so many Chinese harem power fantasy fan fics, this was one of the best breaths of fresh airs I've run into. It's slow pacing with in-depth character development, which I feel like most fan fic authors are pressured into russing because of comments, but he keeps it at his pace, which I'm glad for. the world development keeps the story fresh, adding new back stories and motivation to existing characters and adding threats and enemies that encourage deviation or unpredictability from the usal cannon that everyone is familiar with, so instead of thinking "I wonder when he gonna get to this part in dbz", it's now "I wonder what's going to happen in this version of dbz", I know it's a lot of praise for a fanfic but i really enjoy when it's not mindless power fantasy copy and paste format that I had to leave a review. The MC has flaws, and the story is slow paced, which I personally enjoy, I get that this could be a big turnoff for some, but I think you should give it a try.
good story by far the best in terms of Dragon Ball Fan Fics. 1. The main character of this story is a human and I think that's amazing,I'm tired of watching drgaon ball fanfics have the same trope of an overpowered sayain blah blah blah.Its very predictable and this is a new way of going about it and so far so good. 2.Some of you may be worried about him being human because if the fact its dragon ball and their are bigger forces at play like Frieza ect,Yes the Main character knows this and he wishes for an amazing ability throught the earthly dragonballs.Do not believe anyone telling you that the ability is nerfed or underwhelming,They are the same people expecting a fast paced story where the Mc becomes an "ancient legendary God baby big boy sayain" like grow up. 3.The writing quality is amazing so far so good,My only problem with this is the updating schedule, It's very slow but that's just my opinion it's steady I think it's like 1 chapter per week..I'm just addicted and want more...but yeah I did end up giving the updating stability 3 stars it should be 4 stars but I just want more chapters.. 4.World background not much to say on this end, It's a DragonBall fanfic everything is described well so like...idk bro it's DragonBall we know what everything looks like already bit the descriptions are great as well. 5.Story development is amazing.I love how it develops in such a nice pace.Not everything is happening fast and oh my God,The way characters react to his actions is amazing for example when he killed ___ person to forward the plot, Piccolo was questioning him and others looking at him suspiciously or when he let _____ person die,That also raised a few eye brows.His actions affect the reactions if those around him and I think that's great because UT brings more life to the side characters around him. 6.Overall this story is a 4.0 at least for me and I would give it a higher rating If the author just dropped more chapters 😭. The development is nicely done,Writing quality amazing,Sidr characters feel real and not just there for convenience,World background is great but I've already watched the show so I know what things look like but the descriptions can help you picture them better as well. 7.Advice, Moving forward I would like if the author posted images of what he was describing and what the main character did look like, I've seen other novels and fan fics do this and I think it would be a great addition if you just add a text that says image and then posted a picture of what you want us to see as readers by commenting on the image.That would be amazing as well.Please do update more if you can, I think this will help your fanfic grow faster because by all means I think this fanfic is the DragonBall version of Naruto faint smile both stories are peak.
Here I am posting a review I never posted one usually I just comment but I am going because of two things First the potential and the quality of the story Second the talent of the Author So I will start with the positive points of the story As this is a fanfiction i will start with the world building or more precisely its consistency with the original story (DB) the author really paid homage to the original story how he described the world or how he organizes the arcs it's just extraordinary and not to mention the ki system one of the weak points of db the inconsistency in fights or how the ki works the author managed to make it coherent and the explanations are one of the best that I have seen in a fiction I can't give less than 5 for the world building Now for the writing like the world building it's really very good the author has real talent for that for me a good author is an author who can transmit the emotion he wants to the readers and he succeeded in doing that you feel the emotions and that the world is alive and the fights are beautiful you don't have a character that forget a move he has or don't know when to use it and you really feel the excitement during the fights some time there too many description it can annoy some but that all there just another thing i will explain in the end For me the writing deserved a 4,5 It's almost perfect not a 5 but that's normal it's the author's first fiction and with his talent I'm sure he'll improve For the Updates it's quite consistent I saw the author take a break between the arcs but normal maybe he thinks about the story or just rests a little but apart from that it's very consistent So 4,5 well deserved I would like to give a perfect score but I try to be as objective as possible Finally the Characters they are perfect the author managed to make them intelligent and transformers 1 dimensional characters into 3 dimensional characters you really understand their choice and he even managed to make even secondary characters memorable I have nothing to complain about even the main character is intelligent and has a cool character development (something I don't personally like but it won't influence my notation because I try to be as rational as possible I will explain at the end of the review of some want to know) Here is my review Those were the positive points, now let's move on to the negatives First thing it's about the writing and the second and last is something completely subjective it won't have any influence over my rating let's start the first thing is gags and the goofyness of the story there is too much especially at the beginning of the story but that's not really the problem as I said I try to be as objective as possible and the humor is subjective it's not something that should be taken intro account intro the rating so i will explain why it's too much (It decreases as the story progresses and the author improves) the gags and humor should never have an impact in the story and should never influence the characters an example in some parts of the story the mc did let picolo take Gohan and MC was charged to inform chichi naturally she was angry that the MC did let picolo take him and she threatened the MC to protect his son even if it cost him his life and the mc was so afraid he didn't say a word and nodded the gag that the angry chichi makes other characters afraid is normal it exists even in DB but it should never influence the course of the story the MC is stronger he shouldn't put his life in danger because of a gag he can promise to protect Gohan because of guilt or empathy but never because of a gag another thing mr.popo did train the mc the gag was that mr.popo is the strongest that a gag some may find it funny other not but that is not the problem at some point the narrator says that Mr po-po is stronger than zeno here is the problem first as i said a gag should never have an impact on the story and even less the power rankings of fiction and a narrator should be neutral it would be okay if The mc said that while thinking Because that would be just his opinion (maybe influenced by fear of the moment or just as a joke) but the narrator should stay neutral because in a story any thing the narrator says should be the True that was all I have to say about the humor let's go to the last thing my opinion about the mc (again my personal opinion and it has nothing to do with the quality of the story and it didn't influence my rankings) at the start I really liked the MC in the start Even when born as a human he did succeed in becoming stronger he was intelligent rational and would do anything to make the earth survive and would always make the most rational choice even if he had to sacrifice character (he didn't really sacrifice character just made sure that the story followed the canon an example made sure that goku was dead against Raditz so he can go to Kaio and lean kaioken for the fights against Vegeta later because he wasn't strong enough at that moment) i like his logical thinking not being blinded by his emotions (that was because he sees the characters just as characters not as real people) but as the story progressed he became more and more human and promised himself to never again sacrifice his friends even if he has to die The Characters development was amazing author i have nothing to say about it especially the confrontation with Picolo but I would have preferred his character was still the same i liked his rational manipulative personality that who did put the result before the process again that was just my preference Author good luck with the rest of the story you really have talent don't give up I tried to put my emotions out of the rating as much as possible and give the story the rating it deserves out of respect for the author
เปิดเผยสปอยเลอร์ every character in this is 3D and not just 1-dimensional , nappa, raditz, zarbon, even that frog from planet namek this story have the Weak to strong MC trope so if you want MC who have the planetary power level since he is a baby this is not for you,
Equuleus_Nox. If this story ever ends for some reason without making it to atleast dragon ball super. I will find you.
Una cosa que me e recordado revisando mi conocimiento de dragón ball e recordado de qué me sonaba lo de la zona pues esto es un nombre que ya estaba en dragón ball por qué tienes que saber que los 18 ahora 12 universos está envuelto por la zona neutral un lugar de dimensiones superiores en expansión sin fin que abarca sus Universos empequeñeciéndolos hasta convertirlos en esferas , en ella existe una incontable cantidad de planetas por ejemplo en planeta donde se hizo el torneo de champa y bills a lo que quiero llegar todo lo que está en la zona neutral se dice que está " en la zona" todo lo que está fuera de ella se llama "Fuera de la Zona"
the fic starts out kinda OK, but then the author keeps trying to replicate abridged comedy into the fic which gets tedious fast. also the author keeps making up reasons to preserve cannon which is dumb. if you could go ssj4 from day one and wipe everyone from the start why wouldn't you? if you want goku to keep training just show him that there is a higher power level.
Alright! I’ve been reading this for a while and completely forgot to give it a review! {Writing Quality: 5/5 - Superb!} {Updating Stability: 5/5 - The Author used to update every 2 days, but it recently decreased because he has his own life, and now its slowly increasing back to the same schedule. He’s mentioned many times that he has planned this fanfic really far, so we can hope for it to not be forgotten or left on hiatus anytime soon.} {Story Development: 5/5 - The approach to the story and its battles are amazing and the direction the story heads as well as unexpected variables appearing. (Dont worry, it doesn’t stray from cannon)} {Character Design: 5/5 - The emotions, thoughts and feelings isn’t shown just for our MC, but for everyone.} {World Background: 5/5 - I’m not one to overly focus on world background itself, but the history and new takes are interesting, always keeping me on hook.} Now a lot of readers hated on this because the MC (Ajax) is a human, not a saiyan or anything. However, he has unique abilities that haven’t been properly explored in canon, but that’s what the author is doing here; - Adaptation & Ki - His adapting ability is as said, he can adapt to attacks he’s already been hit with before, but this doesn’t necessarily make him invulnerable. If a second attack is stronger than the first attack he had adapted to, then he will undoubtedly take some damage. Ajax’s mastery over Ki is phenomenal and they way it’s described and used in battle makes you wonder the endless possibilities with it. The way he has something called the zone, an area of which is under his control. The author also makes use of techniques that don’t have much of an appearance in the canon, such as the Multi-form technique. They also make use of telepathically speaking to one another during a fight. What’s more impressive is the MC’s cunningness and is regarded as a tactician. Everyone will always look towards him for a plan of attack, where you can actually feel their lives are on the line in the midst of battle. In the beginning the MC views everyone as fictional characters, and doesn’t hesitate to sacrifice some of the Z fighters. However, the author makes great use of character development, where Ajax breaks down into a mess and cries into bulma’s shoulder, finally seeing everything and everyone as real. Also, his development of strength is not selfish as other fanfics would portray the MC as. It’s shown Ajax cares for his comrades to grow stronger along with him and he does so in the book. It’s only in the Frieza Arc now, but the direction the author decided to head in is absolutely amazing. The fanfic doesn’t just focus on Ajax himself, but also some chapters and definitely the fights are dedicated to other Z fighters. Another major thing to note, is this book also has comedic attrributes, so its not serious 24/7, there’d be moments of laughter in between or during fights, conversations and during training. Especially the way Ajax mocks the enemies. I’ve said all I can think of right now, but there’s still a lot more great things to be said about this book and the author. READ IT!
Best dragon ball fanfic hands down, not just on this app, but ever. Hope it goes all the way through, becuase it’s been amazing to experience so far.
This is just a gorgeous tribute to the I.P.! Haven’t read fanfiction since my teens and let me just say that i wish i’d have this quality in the actual show and manga. Chef’s kiss. I won’t say I was liking how it was early on, in the saiyan saga. Stuck around mainly because the mechanics for the application of ki and such special moves within the world of dragonball were very insightful. But i figured the story would just be a power fantasy, till you know picollo drops some no F’s aura on the OC insert. I think the author is more madly respectful of he DB characters than the goated akira was XD. Not a fan of the Poronga wish, but i get it. Loving the amped dificulty for your adaption though.
Someone can tell me who is the waifu? please i need to know this . is Bulma ? number 18? >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>
Whole character arcs. It doesn't just focus on the mc. It's an actual cohesive story with fleshed out characters and motivations. It's a realistic slow burn for the main character's power. The character changes... It's just peak. I am fiending for more.
honest thoughts of this story after reading countless dragon ball fics. pure rubbish. the author is doing everything he can to weaken the mc. this dragon ball not some Chinese cultivation novels no need for miracle backers or plants or pills or to be the literal son of the plane/heavens to have plot armor. yet for som3 damn reason the author just doesn't learn his dang lesson dragon ball is a world where literally anyone can be the strongest if they train hard enough learn ki control and manipulation and a few wishes for a stronger body and some training gear, someone can become God level easily. I don't understand why the author just couldn't make the mc struggle a bit fight som3 losing battles here and there train get stronger and push the story forward. the whole need to follow Canon is just Boring a stupid. it's why I love the Chinese dragon ball fics even tho 99% of them are all sayian based at least the Chinese fics know how to say screw plot I'll do my own thing
By far the best Dragon Ball fanfic. This is the wet dream of any Dragon Ball...
honestly, best dragon ball fanfic ever. even though he's only human, he can contend with others with his creativeness
Really good story with a nice side of comedy and well written fights, which is a surprise coming from a DBZ ff which their canon is pretty simple. The author expands on the characters by adding some character traits to some who were sorely lacking in personality and depth. I really have nothing to complain about when it comes to this novel as it is exactly what it advertises: an alternate Dragon Ball. At the time of writing this review, the author is at the end of the Namek arc and the OC's involvement, as well as the nuanced character changes, are clearly felt and I for one enjoy them. Definitely give this novel a try, you won't regret it!
One of the best things I've read in a long time (Muito boa mesmo)[img=atualização][img=atualização][img=atualização][img=atualização][img=atualização]
one of the best fan fictions I've ever read. the care in how the characters are written and how they feel towards the main character is well done. the beginning is somewhat iffy, but it only gets absolutely better and stays consistent as it goes on. it really is worth the read.
Buena historia, le da un aire fresco a la saga y no se hace repetitivo. Me gusta como se manejan los personajes dandoles nuevas personalidades haciendo que se sientan mas vivos y menos planos. Otra cosa destacable de la obra seria sobre el dilema del mc de seguir la ruta original conllevando a tragicas perdidas en el futuro pero garantizando una ruta segura o arriesgarse a cambiar el canon. En general muy buen trabajo. PSDT: Seria epico si Janemba y Tapion hacen una apracion en el futuro aunque sea una referencia.
For now the best developed dragon ball stories Ive ever read the character developement is on point and the redemption of Ajax is gonna go hard
Absolute peak Dragon Ball fanfic. I thank you author for creating this masterpiece.
Best novel I've read about Dragon Ball 🤩🤩🤩 This is the first novel I see about a human incarnation in Dragon Ball, where humans are always underestimated, but you've made it fun to read, it's made his power development balanced without exaggeration, and his character development is also fun, and the story development is amazing because the characters have other dimensions not portrayed in the original story. Thanks for this masterpiece.
At first I enjoyed it, although I absolutely hated the fact that he was going out of his way to preserve canon I could understand it. When Piccolo confronted him after the battle with vegeta I was ecstatic hoping for some change. And what does the mc do the moment he steps on namek with his pitiful power level ? he ditches everybody and runs to another village because they didn't go to the village he originally wanted. I just stared at his stupidity in shock and that's where I gave up He acts like the world will definitely bend to his plans then starts panicking when it doesn't. I can't do this anymore more
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Running into so many Chinese harem power fantasy fan fics, this was one of the best breaths of fresh airs I've run into. It's slow pacing with in-depth character development, which I feel like most fan fic authors are pressured into russing because of comments, but he keeps it at his pace, which I'm glad for. the world development keeps the story fresh, adding new back stories and motivation to existing characters and adding threats and enemies that encourage deviation or unpredictability from the usal cannon that everyone is familiar with, so instead of thinking "I wonder when he gonna get to this part in dbz", it's now "I wonder what's going to happen in this version of dbz", I know it's a lot of praise for a fanfic but i really enjoy when it's not mindless power fantasy copy and paste format that I had to leave a review. The MC has flaws, and the story is slow paced, which I personally enjoy, I get that this could be a big turnoff for some, but I think you should give it a try.
good story by far the best in terms of Dragon Ball Fan Fics. 1. The main character of this story is a human and I think that's amazing,I'm tired of watching drgaon ball fanfics have the same trope of an overpowered sayain blah blah blah.Its very predictable and this is a new way of going about it and so far so good. 2.Some of you may be worried about him being human because if the fact its dragon ball and their are bigger forces at play like Frieza ect,Yes the Main character knows this and he wishes for an amazing ability throught the earthly dragonballs.Do not believe anyone telling you that the ability is nerfed or underwhelming,They are the same people expecting a fast paced story where the Mc becomes an "ancient legendary God baby big boy sayain" like grow up. 3.The writing quality is amazing so far so good,My only problem with this is the updating schedule, It's very slow but that's just my opinion it's steady I think it's like 1 chapter per week..I'm just addicted and want more...but yeah I did end up giving the updating stability 3 stars it should be 4 stars but I just want more chapters.. 4.World background not much to say on this end, It's a DragonBall fanfic everything is described well so like...idk bro it's DragonBall we know what everything looks like already bit the descriptions are great as well. 5.Story development is amazing.I love how it develops in such a nice pace.Not everything is happening fast and oh my God,The way characters react to his actions is amazing for example when he killed ___ person to forward the plot, Piccolo was questioning him and others looking at him suspiciously or when he let _____ person die,That also raised a few eye brows.His actions affect the reactions if those around him and I think that's great because UT brings more life to the side characters around him. 6.Overall this story is a 4.0 at least for me and I would give it a higher rating If the author just dropped more chapters 😭. The development is nicely done,Writing quality amazing,Sidr characters feel real and not just there for convenience,World background is great but I've already watched the show so I know what things look like but the descriptions can help you picture them better as well. 7.Advice, Moving forward I would like if the author posted images of what he was describing and what the main character did look like, I've seen other novels and fan fics do this and I think it would be a great addition if you just add a text that says image and then posted a picture of what you want us to see as readers by commenting on the image.That would be amazing as well.Please do update more if you can, I think this will help your fanfic grow faster because by all means I think this fanfic is the DragonBall version of Naruto faint smile both stories are peak.