Reborn in Game of thrones with LOHP as Arya Stark (DROPPED)

LV 4

Lazy_Fox111

Proofread your own work and you'll see the issues yourself. The fic severely lacks in contexts and the grammar needs some work. It has potential and could live up to it if it was properly revised.

LV 2

Celleborn

You really should put in your synopsis that if the reader didn't read your other work they will find this fic very hard to understand. Well, this or use the fact that there are only 7 chapters and edit them to put more context. There is A LOT of cultivation stuff with a lot of details that don't mean anything with prior knowledge. I would recommend more details in the first chapter when the mc mention that this the third life, and a minor explanation of the cultivation concepts when introducing them. Hope these tips helps.

LV 5

SUBSCRIBE_MY_LIST

Extreme northern wuxia cultivation and uplifting fix-it story. It's alright, the writing quality would benefit from a spellchecker, the story does develop rapidly although for a large part along lines that arent even remotely impossible to develop at those speeds even in our world. The character him/her self is a bit bland, I feel no emotional connection with it, nor is it Arya in anything but name. The chapters are of fantastic size, so that's major kudos right there. World background is mostly what is default to the series her agricultural upliftment programs that somehow outperform most countries irl combined lol

LV 1

Andrew_Miheso

Interesting premise but the plot feels rushed and too unrealistic. None of it is believable and the characters make no sense. Each character behaves abnormally

LV 6

Narvin

Writing Quality 2 Stability of Updates 4 Story Development 4 Character Design 4 World Background 4 The total score 3.6 An interesting story. But very difficult to read