Biokinetic Ability in Dragon ball

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eduardo_quintero

Está muy bien espero que puedas continuar con la historia si es posible Gracias Gracias Gracias Gracias Gracias Gracias Gracias Gracias Gracias Gracias Gracias Gracias Gracias

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MadDevilBR

Harem stories in dragon ball are rare, so I'm looking forward to more, if I'm ever displeased I'll change this review as a warning.................

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Kaioshin

Many of the 2-star voters did not read the story until chapter 20 or 10. The problems have already been solved in general, so enjoy it~~ I started doing translations and corrections using chatgpt, so most if not all of the problems are likely already resolved. Enjoy~~

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SpectreOfKaos

Flow is very choppy otherwise pretty good could do with an editor to help smooth it out.

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Beardy

Though you have what could be a solid FF there is a few teething issues, mainly the flow of the story is a little off putting. PS. Bio-kinetic is about the manipulation of energy and not biology, either you have misunderstood the abilities or your title is wrong. If you need to know what Bio-kinetic is, search about Gambit from Marvel or Hisoka Morow from Hunter x Hunter. All the best.

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NPSC2377

I would like to present the female characters in the story to be the harem of the monks, but who will get into it, but you will choose to enter (there will be gender-swapped characters like Goku characters that you choose to change the gender from the original as well, with the gender-switching character will have (female) as well) : Android 21 (good and evil) , Android 17(female) , Android 18 , Angela , Annin , Caulifla , Cheelai , Cocotte , Colonel Violet , Erasa , Fasha , Hasky , Heles , Kale , Kusu , Launch , Mai , Marcarita , Maron , Miss Piiza , Nain , Princess Snake , Ranfan , Mermaid , Tights , Towa , Vados , Videl , Yurin , Zangya , General White's Sisters(If you take this too, you may need to add some chapters.) , Frieza (female) , Cell (female) , broly (female) , Vegeta (female) , raditz (female) , piccolo(female) , majin buu (female).

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Magicial

The story is interesting, some people complain about the writing, but this story is readable, with an understandable story, I'll see how it develops in the future.

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Huonto

Your idea is good, but the writing needs improvement. If you fix it, I'll read the story.

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Lord_Cynrik

The grammar is absolutely atrocious. I’m used to reading mtl translations so that kind of stuff usually doesn’t bother me, but I legitimately couldn’t understand what was being said at certain times, and it ruins the flow of the story when i get caught up in deciphering the grammar. The story seems fine so far, though the MC is getting way too strong way too fast, with a power level of 90,000 when he’s still a toddler without having a hyperbolic time chamber or transformations or gravity training or any of that.

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Gilgameshthebrave

The story itself is very good, there are fan fics that start and I don't understand anything that's happening, it's already here to understand because it explains

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THE_GreatRed

bro this fanfic is lit.But pls continue iron man fanfiction

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jhesus_curtus

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CONNER_Jackson

more please, really good so far has great potential

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Sergio_Navarrete

Nice concept, I'll see where this goes!

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Kaioshin

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SKAJ

I'm confused why is there a same book? are they different?

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NewManagement

Obviously the author deletes bad reviews. Couldn’t make it ch 5. Besides long explanations on things that are obvious in DBZ. The grammar is really bad. MTL is easier to read. Best of luck

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Lizrock

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Mina_Emad_7648

what happened I was reading it then the chapters are gone