The Devil's Prey

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daylightmoon123445

The story is great! The writing style is unique to hook the reader in the first chapters. But I didn't like how you pictured the FC as a sweet, innocent little angel, those are a bit...cliche? But hey, that's just my opinion, the story is great so far and I'm looking forward to how this ends. Kudos to the author!

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NyxReveuse

The Author wasted no time in captivating me off with the intriguing synopsis~ The writing style is pretty good while the first few chapters are enough to hook the reader in to find out what happens! Great Job Author ^^ [img=recommend][img=update]

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Lee_Hazel

Wow the story is so cool! the writing style, the pattern i like it all. Great job Author!

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Sakura_Charmash

It's so well written that the story captures and consumes you from the get go. More than that I found the character building standing out. I'm intrigued by both the hero and heroine, their slightly muddled dynamic and how this would play out. Certainly going to read further to find out.

LV 13

Su_Jeong

This is quite an interesting story to read. The author has done a decent job bringing the characters to life. I can really sympathize with the FL—she's not having things easy, but it's great that she has spunk and resilience, and she's not just waiting for someone to save her. Apart from the grammatical errors (at times quite obvious ones), the story is easy to read and understand. Welldone👍

LV 14

MerrySweet

The story captures your heart from the very beginning, Whitney is a very impressive FL, if you're into strong FLs like me then don't hesitate to pick up this story!

LV 3

FA3zy

Interesting and we've met few amusing and well built character, i highly recommend this book to anyone...it's a well done art, i urge the author to keep it up.

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EveZenier

Fascinating! This story is so full of emotions that I can't even explain it. The struggles of the kids totally wrecked my heart. Its pace, writing style everything is up to par. This is the one story which can get you hooked up from the get go. Well done, Author! Hope you keep up the work.

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BrightBrain256

Great writing by author. The title and chapter titles leave on captivated and looking forward to more. Looking forward to more from you author

LV 12

MGDriver

Great start to the story, intrguing characters. I feel like the dialogue could be improved a lot more. The sentences are also too tightly packed together for the purpose of a webnovel (e.g need more broken up paragraphs - too many lines clumped together) The dialogue should be clearly separated as well for ease of reading. Going past that, the lack of description of the environment makes it hard for the reader to actually picture how the scene looks like in their head. Not saying you have to go overboard, but needs a bit more words of description to help the reader along in defining the scene.

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GMSJakers

The sypnosis grabs my attention immediately, and I'm already interested in what happens next. Very good book—excellent book. The writing is good, and the development isn't rushed by any chance.

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VWjam

The writing quality is ok. It sometimes switches between past and present tense which is a little startling, but it doesn't subtract from the overall plotline. The story is easy to digest but some of the scenarios are wordy. If the grammar is cleaned up and the sentences are a little more compact, the reading experience will be more enriched. Also, it was a little difficult to picture the city setting as a whole. But the characters are ok. They're still developing, so I don't have a favorite character yet (but I do dislike--in the sense that I am enjoying the plotline--the ML. He's just doing what he needs to do, but, like, still...). There's a lot to look forward to.

LV 14

ThePotatoKing

You got enemies to lovers AND mafia? Consider me sold! Love the characters. Writing is superb. Already a great story in the making.

LV 2

Rainandstorm

Wholala, I really look this book, The intriguing name, wonderful plot and all the drama and romance... it really worth it, Good job to the amazing author

LV 14

DetectiveEspionist

I am just getting started but wanted to share my thoughts. It is a good story with lots of suspense. Besides a few grammar mistakes it is great.

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Mayline

Aye, what a heavy writing style! I got hooked with the sad story tbh Even though the decor is not often described, I can picture every single character, they have a strong personality and that's what makes most of the quality of this novel~ Like this story so far, nice work