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Would love a rewrite on scribble ............................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................
14 chapters in you might think that isnt much your right i dropped this because this isnt what i was looking for i wanted a story about the games not a story about how the mc gets stronger unnecessary at that 14 chapters in and we only got 1 view inside the game you think with a title like that you would get more but nope i dont want to bother reading more i know il only get disappointed and dont get me started on how rushed the story was it felt like the author was trying to rush the story to get the story somewhere I know for sure this story was intended without the game making thingy because of the mc He says he was low on money, hmm strange he has a game make cosmetics but then i thought about why he may wanted a clean incoming for you know taxs BUT NOOO HE GOES TO ANOTHER COUNTRY USING THE AIRPLANE JOINS IN AN ILLEGAL FIGHTING PLACE FOR MONEY i was wrong I was confused i thought of this desision in a way without the game making thingy and it made sense i dont know why he wanted money but if it was for some plans it would make sense This entire fanfiction was seems to be intended without the game making system now I know I shouldn't bother reading further
The story is really cool, I like the concept, I was afraid the author would get involved in what doesn't look like Tony's kidnapping, I'm glad that's not the case.The story is not perfect, it lacks a lot of things, like an intro for the games to understand what we fell into, the fact that there is no intro for R.E seemed strange to me, sad that there are no more updates.
A great Marvel fanfiction!! I like it!!! 😁👍👍 It have a great translate/grammar, so it's good.. It have a great story.. But I like more if it have more pov from game user 😍😍 Can't wait to see next chapter.. Keep up the good work author san 😁😁👍👍
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this novel is at the level of neither boring nor fun, it can be said that the author lacks ideas to make a more exciting story but that is still in the category of a good novel
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une perte de temps totu est incoherant dans cette fic le mc est nerf , au bout de 2 mois 1000 personne connaissent son jeu , meme si on est en 2008 les gens savent communiquer bordels et un charle mechant apparait de nul par comme l'ancien et l'ajout d'OC alors que je sais pas on est dans MARVEL
overall good story but mc is like doesn't even exist.... And the story is too hasty...................................................................
I really love it pal, I hope you can do more to this novel. It has good storytelling and writing quality, However I will deduct 2 points out of 25 points BECAUSE YOU NEED TO UPDATE PLEASE
Currently a couple chapters in, got to say the story plot isn't bad and there is definitely a lot of potential,however the writing style is a little inconsistent, and there is very little attention to detail.thus making it hard to become invested in the story, however, the author can be seen throughout the story researching more and asking the readers for helpful criticism, so I suppose the story can't be all that bad. Also since the story does invoke curiosity all of these 'flaws' can be passed over. good job 👏🏾 keep up the good work.
Even if you don't have a good person and your partner is a good person and you are 33 and you don't want them that often you don't want them and you are
I am so glad that you are back writing this. My boredom as been satisfied and don’t worry when you are not posting imma just re read it until you posts again.
more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.
Adorei está fic vou continuar acompanhando vc criou algo totalmente novo nunca vi uma fica desse tipo e o jeito que vc interage os personagens é muito bom só espero que vc não drope essa fic e melhore a interação do protagonista pois ele quase não interagiu com o mundo Marvel mesmo que seja o começo do mcu
Ótimo(Great)!..................................................................................................................................................................
i liked this fanfiction alot but not the whole contract with the ancent one thing that was a reall let down if i do say so my self...........
i know the score is kinda low but i am actually enjoying this way more than my score suggests. It is pretty unique and im loving the game creation stuff, i wish i found this later so i could have binged more at once.
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Easily classified as a well written story. It's well balanced and the pov change doesn't make one claustrophobic in the slightest. The fact it can make side characters more excellent.
Thanks for your work. Keep up the good work. 👍👍👍👍👍👍🙏🙏🙏🙏❤️❤️❤️🐨🐨🐨🐨🐨🐨🐨🐨🐨🐨🐨🐨🐨🐨🐨🐨🐨🐨🐨🐨🐨🐨🐨🐨🐨🐨🐨🐨🐨🐨🐨🐨🐨🎉🎉🎉🎉
i really like the game creation system but i was sceptical when the mc decided to join an underground fight ring for money but when he find out it was a death match he should have backed out instead he joined and without hesitation murdered a muntant named pyro then went on with life. so yeah not on board with an mc as an unfeeling killer.
Great but I would like more of game being played Especially ark and the new game Don’ t mind this [img=fp][img=fp][img=fp][img=fp][img=fp][img=fp][img=fp][img=fp][img=fp]
เปิดเผยสปอยเลอร์
Con toda la sinceridad posible del mundo tengo que decir que me encanta este fan fic es uno de los mejores que e leido y estoy super emocionado por el siguiente capitulo....
nice fiction but the pace of progress in the world seems slow to me, there is too much complexity in the editing sometimes people get confused while reading it
Shameless author here adding my own review ......................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................
Would love a rewrite on scribble ............................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................
14 chapters in you might think that isnt much your right i dropped this because this isnt what i was looking for i wanted a story about the games not a story about how the mc gets stronger unnecessary at that 14 chapters in and we only got 1 view inside the game you think with a title like that you would get more but nope i dont want to bother reading more i know il only get disappointed and dont get me started on how rushed the story was it felt like the author was trying to rush the story to get the story somewhere I know for sure this story was intended without the game making thingy because of the mc He says he was low on money, hmm strange he has a game make cosmetics but then i thought about why he may wanted a clean incoming for you know taxs BUT NOOO HE GOES TO ANOTHER COUNTRY USING THE AIRPLANE JOINS IN AN ILLEGAL FIGHTING PLACE FOR MONEY i was wrong I was confused i thought of this desision in a way without the game making thingy and it made sense i dont know why he wanted money but if it was for some plans it would make sense This entire fanfiction was seems to be intended without the game making system now I know I shouldn't bother reading further
The story is really cool, I like the concept, I was afraid the author would get involved in what doesn't look like Tony's kidnapping, I'm glad that's not the case.The story is not perfect, it lacks a lot of things, like an intro for the games to understand what we fell into, the fact that there is no intro for R.E seemed strange to me, sad that there are no more updates.
A great Marvel fanfiction!! I like it!!! 😁👍👍 It have a great translate/grammar, so it's good.. It have a great story.. But I like more if it have more pov from game user 😍😍 Can't wait to see next chapter.. Keep up the good work author san 😁😁👍👍
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this novel is at the level of neither boring nor fun, it can be said that the author lacks ideas to make a more exciting story but that is still in the category of a good novel
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une perte de temps totu est incoherant dans cette fic le mc est nerf , au bout de 2 mois 1000 personne connaissent son jeu , meme si on est en 2008 les gens savent communiquer bordels et un charle mechant apparait de nul par comme l'ancien et l'ajout d'OC alors que je sais pas on est dans MARVEL
overall good story but mc is like doesn't even exist.... And the story is too hasty...................................................................
I really love it pal, I hope you can do more to this novel. It has good storytelling and writing quality, However I will deduct 2 points out of 25 points BECAUSE YOU NEED TO UPDATE PLEASE
Currently a couple chapters in, got to say the story plot isn't bad and there is definitely a lot of potential,however the writing style is a little inconsistent, and there is very little attention to detail.thus making it hard to become invested in the story, however, the author can be seen throughout the story researching more and asking the readers for helpful criticism, so I suppose the story can't be all that bad. Also since the story does invoke curiosity all of these 'flaws' can be passed over. good job 👏🏾 keep up the good work.
Even if you don't have a good person and your partner is a good person and you are 33 and you don't want them that often you don't want them and you are
I am so glad that you are back writing this. My boredom as been satisfied and don’t worry when you are not posting imma just re read it until you posts again.
more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.more.
Adorei está fic vou continuar acompanhando vc criou algo totalmente novo nunca vi uma fica desse tipo e o jeito que vc interage os personagens é muito bom só espero que vc não drope essa fic e melhore a interação do protagonista pois ele quase não interagiu com o mundo Marvel mesmo que seja o começo do mcu
Ótimo(Great)!..................................................................................................................................................................
i liked this fanfiction alot but not the whole contract with the ancent one thing that was a reall let down if i do say so my self...........
i know the score is kinda low but i am actually enjoying this way more than my score suggests. It is pretty unique and im loving the game creation stuff, i wish i found this later so i could have binged more at once.
. ,......,......................,.....,.....,......................,.... . . ,......,......................,.....,.....,......................,.... .
Easily classified as a well written story. It's well balanced and the pov change doesn't make one claustrophobic in the slightest. The fact it can make side characters more excellent.
Thanks for your work. Keep up the good work. 👍👍👍👍👍👍🙏🙏🙏🙏❤️❤️❤️🐨🐨🐨🐨🐨🐨🐨🐨🐨🐨🐨🐨🐨🐨🐨🐨🐨🐨🐨🐨🐨🐨🐨🐨🐨🐨🐨🐨🐨🐨🐨🐨🐨🎉🎉🎉🎉
i really like the game creation system but i was sceptical when the mc decided to join an underground fight ring for money but when he find out it was a death match he should have backed out instead he joined and without hesitation murdered a muntant named pyro then went on with life. so yeah not on board with an mc as an unfeeling killer.
Great but I would like more of game being played Especially ark and the new game Don’ t mind this [img=fp][img=fp][img=fp][img=fp][img=fp][img=fp][img=fp][img=fp][img=fp]
เปิดเผยสปอยเลอร์ Con toda la sinceridad posible del mundo tengo que decir que me encanta este fan fic es uno de los mejores que e leido y estoy super emocionado por el siguiente capitulo....
nice fiction but the pace of progress in the world seems slow to me, there is too much complexity in the editing sometimes people get confused while reading it
Shameless author here adding my own review ......................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................