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เขียนรีวิวI liked it Star wars with 40k elements to it bravo this site always needs more 40k thanks for the story
Author the story is good but out of tge entire novel most of the chapters around 80% are information dump. No one wants to read and most dosent have the time to read that as it gets boring after a certain point of time. in certain events which exceed 5 or 6 chapters each chapter is an info dump and even skipping it dosent actually skip the story. So please author kindly take this suggestion into account and reduce the info dump on chapters and just keep the story progressing otherwise it will get boring. Also if you are writing so much in one chapter then reduce the number of chapters if they are not about the story and just info which no one actually reads.
MC: SI Anakin Rating: 5/10 Harem: Aayla, Shaak Ti, Padme, Ashoka, Barris, Zannah, The Daughter It's really boring to read in my opinion. The long and repetitive information and not enough conversations but pure description and explanation are just too tough.
well, im writing this review after reading until chapter 73 "knighthood III" and droping here; First; this fanfic was good and interesting the first 50 chapters, it had his problems with cuting out of the story things when it was becoming interesting like "SPOILER" when he contact with Narro Sienar and tells him about the bomb, the author develop 2 chapters about that incident and before resolving it he just cut to black and tells us the conclution, this happens a couple times in others chapters. Second; im not fan of harems because they almost always are bad developed, i gave this fanfic a chance even if it had this tag because the reviews give it a lot of praises so i thought it most be very good and the harem most been very good developed, well, his relationship with Barris was good developed, but my disapointment was incredible when girls like Aayla and Master Shaak started to come up out of nowhere like they are very close to him for years or something, and less not forget that Aaila with just one interaction with anakin developed a bond force out of nowhere, so yeah, harem is semi trash, i say sami beacuse i saw worse but isn't good enough to be even reciclable trash. And Third; basically the drop that spilled the glass, in knighthood chapters the trials are transmitted for gains or something, i doubt that is the Jedi's ways, they have a presentator Jedi wich is very animated wich is very weird for a jedi, the author cut in the middle of his fight test with Yoda and tells us the results, and then they do and transmit the "flesh trial" a trial made in the old Jedi Order and i doubt is still aplied in the republic jedi order, but they still aply it for not specific reason and yes, they still transmit it to all universe and they even have a gallery with spectators that aren't all jedi and/or not even from the senate, just random big fish in the trade industry. And hte worst part here is the MC says first, "i would have to take of my nanosuit for thist test" (i forgot to mention that the emperor of the space marines was a sith lord just to put warhammer 40000 things here) and then says "im not going to take it of because i don't want to feel pain" wich is fair enought but then you shouldn't have said before that you would tak off then, and the more cringe and my dropping point was when he pretended to feel pain he started to say PG curses like "merlin's beard" or the more stupid thing he said at the end "yer' a wizard 'arry". so yeah, this "was" a good fanfic until the author started to write like if he started to suffer from braind damage or something. so, if you as a reader don't mind bad written harem/romance (wich there's any close to romance in this fanfic), incomplete parts on an story or... whatever it was what i read in chapter 73 then yeah, go read this, im just writting this review because i felt i lost my time reading this fanfic, how i hate to not have others fanfic to read wich was why i gave this thing a chance.
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I want to like this, but everything related to romance is pure garbage in this novel. I can't even count how many times I've cringed or rolled my eyes at the the stupidity going on in this. The author is trying to set up a harem but doesn't seem to realize that everything feels contrived and asinine for anyone with a brain.
เปิดเผยสปอยเลอร์Underrated. Intresting story and new guiding plot, many EU/legends connections which is awsome for me. Generally I love Ahsoka character and for me was well-guided. I don't mind harem, but mostly it gets in the way of the story, yet here wasn't bad. I pretty much liked ending. Good fic i hope for more in sw universe ;)
average or bad in the 8 chapters I read. I've never faithfully followed Star Wars or even seen a complete film, but even I know that this fic completely deviates from everything the Star Wars universe should be
The translation is good but everything else is bad. I don't understand how this book got so many good reviews... There are too many unnecessary explanations here that drag the story along without any purpose. I really didn't enjoy reading the story so I stopped in chapter 5
Why did u remove Sasuke based Naruto novel? Kindly add it back and also this novel is awesome.
The novel had a LOT of lore info (wookiepedia???), but really accurate, the characters and situations are maybe a little bit under developed, but they doesn't stick tho the original lore, and there are a couple of twists, maybe it should be nice more villain development, but is great story so, it's the best complete star wars fanfic novel that i ever saw
A NOVEL WITH A BEGINNING AND AN END . Just for that I'm voting 5 * . Overall great story of en op mc. Pretty ok intrigue. Not much more to say
The author know a lot about the star wars ore, but this is basically a perverted projection of the authors desires using the MC of star wars as a vessel of them. Frankly, who is gonna beieve in a child with a dirty old man piloting it? or the whole behavior of his mom...even all Mind Trick of the world cant keep a mother from ignoring what her child is doing for so long periods, particularly for a pair that was raised in poverty and slavery. I wanted to read star wars fanfiction, not this star mockery.
A good fanfic. Although, in my opinion, the story suffers from having unnecessarily long descriptions at many times and rushing events too quickly at other times, overall this work is very readable. I recommend it
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There is just to much info dump that it gets mind numbing reading it and it can even be repetitive and Mc ascension among the jedi was way to fast i mean seriously 1 mission you won't even see if the mc can do those consistently or how he would deal with setbacks and failures. Because of the massive info dumps I can't even remember any meaningful character development even the relationship of the mc be it friendship or love gets overshadowed because of this. I feel this would've been a really good fic if you focus more on the story rather than info I stopped reading around chapter 85
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I tried to finish it. I really did. I saw that people said it was mostly info dumps but I pushed through the first dozen chapters that were just straight wiki copy/paste.The info dumps were just replaced by tangents. So many tangents. I would read a paragraph or two, maybe up to five then skim 2-5 paragraphs because it was just an unrelated tangent. The time line is unclear once he grows up. it says he was playing nice and slow expanding, but it seemed to all take place with one year.I will say, the time he spent with the Jedi, was written much better. not so many tangets, the story progressed well, and the dialog wasn't great, but it was ok.Once He leaves the Jedi, the story just becomes almost unbearable to continue. The dialog becomes confusing with most people sounding like robots with some sprinkle of "playfulness" mixed in.And so. many. tangents. that most of the time just repeat what an earlier tangent said. But I would say about half of the chapter would be a tangent you could just skip.
Boring as hell, simple. The writer explained to much every time I want to give it another chance I get bored again. Horrible story
I liked it Star wars with 40k elements to it bravo this site always needs more 40k thanks for the story
Author the story is good but out of tge entire novel most of the chapters around 80% are information dump. No one wants to read and most dosent have the time to read that as it gets boring after a certain point of time. in certain events which exceed 5 or 6 chapters each chapter is an info dump and even skipping it dosent actually skip the story. So please author kindly take this suggestion into account and reduce the info dump on chapters and just keep the story progressing otherwise it will get boring. Also if you are writing so much in one chapter then reduce the number of chapters if they are not about the story and just info which no one actually reads.
MC: SI Anakin Rating: 5/10 Harem: Aayla, Shaak Ti, Padme, Ashoka, Barris, Zannah, The Daughter It's really boring to read in my opinion. The long and repetitive information and not enough conversations but pure description and explanation are just too tough.
well, im writing this review after reading until chapter 73 "knighthood III" and droping here; First; this fanfic was good and interesting the first 50 chapters, it had his problems with cuting out of the story things when it was becoming interesting like "SPOILER" when he contact with Narro Sienar and tells him about the bomb, the author develop 2 chapters about that incident and before resolving it he just cut to black and tells us the conclution, this happens a couple times in others chapters. Second; im not fan of harems because they almost always are bad developed, i gave this fanfic a chance even if it had this tag because the reviews give it a lot of praises so i thought it most be very good and the harem most been very good developed, well, his relationship with Barris was good developed, but my disapointment was incredible when girls like Aayla and Master Shaak started to come up out of nowhere like they are very close to him for years or something, and less not forget that Aaila with just one interaction with anakin developed a bond force out of nowhere, so yeah, harem is semi trash, i say sami beacuse i saw worse but isn't good enough to be even reciclable trash. And Third; basically the drop that spilled the glass, in knighthood chapters the trials are transmitted for gains or something, i doubt that is the Jedi's ways, they have a presentator Jedi wich is very animated wich is very weird for a jedi, the author cut in the middle of his fight test with Yoda and tells us the results, and then they do and transmit the "flesh trial" a trial made in the old Jedi Order and i doubt is still aplied in the republic jedi order, but they still aply it for not specific reason and yes, they still transmit it to all universe and they even have a gallery with spectators that aren't all jedi and/or not even from the senate, just random big fish in the trade industry. And hte worst part here is the MC says first, "i would have to take of my nanosuit for thist test" (i forgot to mention that the emperor of the space marines was a sith lord just to put warhammer 40000 things here) and then says "im not going to take it of because i don't want to feel pain" wich is fair enought but then you shouldn't have said before that you would tak off then, and the more cringe and my dropping point was when he pretended to feel pain he started to say PG curses like "merlin's beard" or the more stupid thing he said at the end "yer' a wizard 'arry". so yeah, this "was" a good fanfic until the author started to write like if he started to suffer from braind damage or something. so, if you as a reader don't mind bad written harem/romance (wich there's any close to romance in this fanfic), incomplete parts on an story or... whatever it was what i read in chapter 73 then yeah, go read this, im just writting this review because i felt i lost my time reading this fanfic, how i hate to not have others fanfic to read wich was why i gave this thing a chance.
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I want to like this, but everything related to romance is pure garbage in this novel. I can't even count how many times I've cringed or rolled my eyes at the the stupidity going on in this. The author is trying to set up a harem but doesn't seem to realize that everything feels contrived and asinine for anyone with a brain.
เปิดเผยสปอยเลอร์Underrated. Intresting story and new guiding plot, many EU/legends connections which is awsome for me. Generally I love Ahsoka character and for me was well-guided. I don't mind harem, but mostly it gets in the way of the story, yet here wasn't bad. I pretty much liked ending. Good fic i hope for more in sw universe ;)
average or bad in the 8 chapters I read. I've never faithfully followed Star Wars or even seen a complete film, but even I know that this fic completely deviates from everything the Star Wars universe should be
The translation is good but everything else is bad. I don't understand how this book got so many good reviews... There are too many unnecessary explanations here that drag the story along without any purpose. I really didn't enjoy reading the story so I stopped in chapter 5
Why did u remove Sasuke based Naruto novel? Kindly add it back and also this novel is awesome.
The novel had a LOT of lore info (wookiepedia???), but really accurate, the characters and situations are maybe a little bit under developed, but they doesn't stick tho the original lore, and there are a couple of twists, maybe it should be nice more villain development, but is great story so, it's the best complete star wars fanfic novel that i ever saw
A NOVEL WITH A BEGINNING AND AN END . Just for that I'm voting 5 * . Overall great story of en op mc. Pretty ok intrigue. Not much more to say
The author know a lot about the star wars ore, but this is basically a perverted projection of the authors desires using the MC of star wars as a vessel of them. Frankly, who is gonna beieve in a child with a dirty old man piloting it? or the whole behavior of his mom...even all Mind Trick of the world cant keep a mother from ignoring what her child is doing for so long periods, particularly for a pair that was raised in poverty and slavery. I wanted to read star wars fanfiction, not this star mockery.
A good fanfic. Although, in my opinion, the story suffers from having unnecessarily long descriptions at many times and rushing events too quickly at other times, overall this work is very readable. I recommend it
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There is just to much info dump that it gets mind numbing reading it and it can even be repetitive and Mc ascension among the jedi was way to fast i mean seriously 1 mission you won't even see if the mc can do those consistently or how he would deal with setbacks and failures. Because of the massive info dumps I can't even remember any meaningful character development even the relationship of the mc be it friendship or love gets overshadowed because of this. I feel this would've been a really good fic if you focus more on the story rather than info I stopped reading around chapter 85
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I tried to finish it. I really did. I saw that people said it was mostly info dumps but I pushed through the first dozen chapters that were just straight wiki copy/paste.The info dumps were just replaced by tangents. So many tangents. I would read a paragraph or two, maybe up to five then skim 2-5 paragraphs because it was just an unrelated tangent. The time line is unclear once he grows up. it says he was playing nice and slow expanding, but it seemed to all take place with one year.I will say, the time he spent with the Jedi, was written much better. not so many tangets, the story progressed well, and the dialog wasn't great, but it was ok.Once He leaves the Jedi, the story just becomes almost unbearable to continue. The dialog becomes confusing with most people sounding like robots with some sprinkle of "playfulness" mixed in.And so. many. tangents. that most of the time just repeat what an earlier tangent said. But I would say about half of the chapter would be a tangent you could just skip.
Boring as hell, simple. The writer explained to much every time I want to give it another chance I get bored again. Horrible story