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Hi, I'm the author of the adventurer system! Also, this is a shameless review. first of all, I don't have much vocabulary so some words are repeated, but I guarantee you that I already made each arc of the story. I admitted that there are some grammatical issues, but don't blame me English is not my native language hahaha! I will try to fix it as soon as possible. About Drake? All question has the answer, so stay tuned. To the readers, read my work I hope you enjoy it, I'm really glad this is the reason why I keep writing, thank you!
I could only make it through chapter 16 due to the horrible writing/translating of the book. It just seemed to get worse as I read. I might be tempted to keep reading if the story was worth it, but it was not even close to it. From the beginning it is just a travesty. You get introduced to the MC as he get sneak attacked right after winning a competition in front of everyone which causes him to be a paraplegic and yet it seems that he was punished for it. His medical bills are so expensive that it causes issues for him even though he is the victim. Supposedly it gets hashed out at some point according to the author's review, but I didn't last that long. We get to the game which supposedly is super popular worldwide, but the MC knows nothing about it even though his sister has been playing it for some time. She gets him the helmet to play the game but doesn't tell him anything about it and the MC makes no effort to understand the game. There are inconsistencies throughout the plot and incorrect values for level and stats. It just stacks up. Good luck if you try to read it. You will need it.
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Grammar and Story telling are garbage. I couldn't even manage to force myself to read till chapter 20. The thing about story telling though, what the f**k happened to the dude who crippled the MC on live television. He get arrested? Fined? Nothing at all, really?
I generally don't read stories other than fanfiction but this one was good. So I suggest reading it. [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
The grammar is poor mc is poorly written things are skipped the mc goes from having issues with a mob to being able to Nike a bunch of them from 1 level up the game AI seems mental
the plot ot the story was great and show a great potential. sadly I just found the MC to dumb and naive. and one character that girl is just hateful. with her just made the reading exprience to painful to read. tried to read and give it a chance. sadly it reach to the point i dont want to read it any more. dont get me wrong the novel is great. maybe it not just for me. doing great for this novel. keep up the great work.
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Starting Off the grammar Is quite poor with random missing words and sentences that make zero sense to native English speakers. The world background is quite poor with the MC essentially having been attempted murdered but seems nothing happened to that person And MC doesn’t sue or anything. There is no real reason given in the game why the AI decided to skip steps beyond O well. Then when set in the fighting zone MC goes from running and struggling with a single mob to somehow being able to nuke 13 after a single level gain with the fight magically just being complete. The plot armor here would make a nuclear superpower scared to attack. It makes no sense and this ruins the story.
I read up to chapter 40 and what I can say is that there are very absurd elements in this novel. The event that leaves Mc paraplegic can easily be described as an assassination attempt and the consequences for the villain who did it are not discussed later. The Mc doesn't know about the game's existence when he gets his virtual helmet, and the sister who has taken care of him for 4 years (who is also a player) is another item without explanation. The possibility of bringing something from the game to the real world (and the Mc not knowing the game) leaves me perplexed. The Mc is unable to join the game for 2 days to escape problems and his not doing ANY research on the rules of the game during this period is proof of his foolishness. I'm honestly going to drop this novel because this level of nonsense is too big for me. Translated by GT
This isnt the worst book in the world, but its incredibly difficult to read if youre a native english speaker or if you have reached that level of speech, if the grammar and writing is improved i might give it another shot, but right now it is not good enough to keep me reading
Same clinche poor Mc's family, struggling mc and his sister. Mc tries to give his sister a good life. But I got enough with it. The starting of the story is so boring. You could have cut that part but you still made the tragic story that was not logical for me. Sorry, I don't want to know further.
It starts with the cliché of someone hurting him and he can't do anything... are you dirty? Can such a wound be considered an attempted murder, and the police or the government do nothing? says he barely has money when he could have sued both the other guy's master and the one who attacked him. and then the cliché of playing the game without knowing what to do that his sister gave him starts, I've read many with the same script (literally the same) congratulations for your creativity
J'en suis au début de l'histoire et ça m'énerve, je suis désolée, mais c'est mon avis, le mc est un imbécile qui ne connait rien a rien il a été blessé et a eu une paraplégie... Mais ce qui est super chiant c'est que t'as une autre meuf qui quand il commence le jeu qui lui fait pas son évaluation de caractère et après t'en a une autre qui le trouve arrogant alors qu'il parle juste normalement, ça c'est encore super énervant... Et cette même meuf le sous estime et dit qu'il triche ça m'a vraiment soulé. Je dis ça mais je suis juste au premier chapitre peut être que vous vous allez accroché mais moi j'arrêterai ce roman il me met surtout de mauvaise humeur... Bravo a l'auteur quand même d'écrire une histoire.
Only got a few chapters in so the high ratings on updating stability and world background are just me giving author the benefit of the doubt. Concept itself, while not necessarily original, is good. But 1) the grammar and writing style (author "mysteriously" leaving out stuff in an to me really annoying way, like there is no motivation for stuff more then whether it is convenient for author or not) are horrible. And 2) characters feel really flat, no realistic emotions from mc. I would give it another try if it was editet to flow better though.
Book Has an intersting story similar to some other famous stories about a VR game. Author has very poor grammer and sentence structure. If you can get passed poor grammer and sentence structure then this is a good book.
highly recommended! Must read! ♥️♥️ highly recommended! Must read! ♥️♥️ highly recommended! Must read! ♥️♥️ highly recommended! Must read! ♥️♥️ highly recommended! Must read! ♥️♥️ highly recommended! Must read! ♥️♥️
Hello Jigx 👋 As I have stalked a bit, I have seen from reviews that you have grammar and sentence flow problems? It made the ratings plummet down. I will offer my help if you want? Though I am not a good one at it. So what're your thoughts? Please reply here if you want. Hehe 👍
I am a typical vrmmorpg lover and so far I'm liking story .but the grammatical errors are unbearable that I'm still at chapter 18 for reading almost a half day time.
I have to say you have a good story here but i would suggest getting a editor or someone that can help with grammar and writing quality. Even though the mistakes are small it can throw off some ones reading and it gets annoying but other then that the story is great And i look forward to future chapters
already read so many of this type but I'm disatisfied on vrmmorpg because that they are weak on real world. and now that he is even crippled in realworld, what will happen when theres problem on real world what he can do? game all day?.
First of all, I am not a pro at making reviews 2nd It's my opinion and what I think about it. 3rd I don't care if anyone will be offended by this. and 4th I read up to chapter 9 The story has good potential but grammar has problems, the systems (power level, the name color) is not good (maybe gets better later), plot armor is thick, I think the MC is dumb and contradicts himself. Over all good but the mc to cliche for me and the grammar and systems need polishing.
Honestly the story is very interesting, but the grammar is soooo bad it is very hard to read in the beginning chapters you can hardly understand what is going on because of the grammar but it can be fixed if the author decides to do so [img=faceslap]
The Story has potential, but the Characters and poorly written, alongside the World Background. Updates are decent and the Writing Quality is the ugh. I'm not good with Grammar myself but your story is full of writing mistakes and jumbled words like for example "I went the to shop" I noticed that a lot where you have 2 words mixed together. Final Review: 3.2 Star
Coming to the plot of the story, I really liked it. The male lead's character of not giving up is kinda nice. A trait which I like. Coming to the writing it has a few grammatical mistakes along with the change in tenses, it's quite mixed up. But nothing that can't be corrected. All the best for your book[img=recommend]
Me personally, I love systems as they bring you into the video game-like world and takes you away from reality. As of chapter for it's been a good read with a likable male lead. Certainly a story for one to kick back on a Friday afternoon and enjoy. I'll update more as I read more but so far, keep up the great work, writer!
I jumped into this with no expectations, and was greatly surprised honestly. It's a very intriguing start for the story, and I'm more than curious to read what happens next. Honestly, AMAZING job!!
The story starts strongly with a believable character suffering from an unjust trauma. It's an excellent setting for a weak-to-strong character. The author has a great imagination, give it a try!
Coool Story. First thing first... I love all the works based on virtual games and sometimes I wish to be in one of them. Anyway about this work, I love it. Everything seems awesome, world development - well planned, characters design and development - superb quality, storyline - A1 and writing quality - gooood and since the author is updating this story quite regularly so I believe I'll not have to wait two or three to get updates and that is just awesome. Since this story is in sprity I wish author wins it and for that I'll be quite happy to help him. Well done author.
The plot was there but the writing quality wasn't what I expected. There were issues: There were loads of issues. Perhaps focusing on grammar and sentence structure to be specific, would be better for you.
I'd like how the story goes on, the character development and the world building, and it always made me excited what will happen next. Thanks Author keep it up! we are always here your reader to support you!!!!! [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
Hi, I'm the author of the adventurer system! Also, this is a shameless review. first of all, I don't have much vocabulary so some words are repeated, but I guarantee you that I already made each arc of the story. I admitted that there are some grammatical issues, but don't blame me English is not my native language hahaha! I will try to fix it as soon as possible. About Drake? All question has the answer, so stay tuned. To the readers, read my work I hope you enjoy it, I'm really glad this is the reason why I keep writing, thank you!
I could only make it through chapter 16 due to the horrible writing/translating of the book. It just seemed to get worse as I read. I might be tempted to keep reading if the story was worth it, but it was not even close to it. From the beginning it is just a travesty. You get introduced to the MC as he get sneak attacked right after winning a competition in front of everyone which causes him to be a paraplegic and yet it seems that he was punished for it. His medical bills are so expensive that it causes issues for him even though he is the victim. Supposedly it gets hashed out at some point according to the author's review, but I didn't last that long. We get to the game which supposedly is super popular worldwide, but the MC knows nothing about it even though his sister has been playing it for some time. She gets him the helmet to play the game but doesn't tell him anything about it and the MC makes no effort to understand the game. There are inconsistencies throughout the plot and incorrect values for level and stats. It just stacks up. Good luck if you try to read it. You will need it.
เปิดเผยสปอยเลอร์ Grammar and Story telling are garbage. I couldn't even manage to force myself to read till chapter 20. The thing about story telling though, what the f**k happened to the dude who crippled the MC on live television. He get arrested? Fined? Nothing at all, really?
I generally don't read stories other than fanfiction but this one was good. So I suggest reading it. [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
The grammar is poor mc is poorly written things are skipped the mc goes from having issues with a mob to being able to Nike a bunch of them from 1 level up the game AI seems mental
the plot ot the story was great and show a great potential. sadly I just found the MC to dumb and naive. and one character that girl is just hateful. with her just made the reading exprience to painful to read. tried to read and give it a chance. sadly it reach to the point i dont want to read it any more. dont get me wrong the novel is great. maybe it not just for me. doing great for this novel. keep up the great work.
เปิดเผยสปอยเลอร์ Starting Off the grammar Is quite poor with random missing words and sentences that make zero sense to native English speakers. The world background is quite poor with the MC essentially having been attempted murdered but seems nothing happened to that person And MC doesn’t sue or anything. There is no real reason given in the game why the AI decided to skip steps beyond O well. Then when set in the fighting zone MC goes from running and struggling with a single mob to somehow being able to nuke 13 after a single level gain with the fight magically just being complete. The plot armor here would make a nuclear superpower scared to attack. It makes no sense and this ruins the story.
I read up to chapter 40 and what I can say is that there are very absurd elements in this novel. The event that leaves Mc paraplegic can easily be described as an assassination attempt and the consequences for the villain who did it are not discussed later. The Mc doesn't know about the game's existence when he gets his virtual helmet, and the sister who has taken care of him for 4 years (who is also a player) is another item without explanation. The possibility of bringing something from the game to the real world (and the Mc not knowing the game) leaves me perplexed. The Mc is unable to join the game for 2 days to escape problems and his not doing ANY research on the rules of the game during this period is proof of his foolishness. I'm honestly going to drop this novel because this level of nonsense is too big for me. Translated by GT
This isnt the worst book in the world, but its incredibly difficult to read if youre a native english speaker or if you have reached that level of speech, if the grammar and writing is improved i might give it another shot, but right now it is not good enough to keep me reading
Same clinche poor Mc's family, struggling mc and his sister. Mc tries to give his sister a good life. But I got enough with it. The starting of the story is so boring. You could have cut that part but you still made the tragic story that was not logical for me. Sorry, I don't want to know further.
It starts with the cliché of someone hurting him and he can't do anything... are you dirty? Can such a wound be considered an attempted murder, and the police or the government do nothing? says he barely has money when he could have sued both the other guy's master and the one who attacked him. and then the cliché of playing the game without knowing what to do that his sister gave him starts, I've read many with the same script (literally the same) congratulations for your creativity
J'en suis au début de l'histoire et ça m'énerve, je suis désolée, mais c'est mon avis, le mc est un imbécile qui ne connait rien a rien il a été blessé et a eu une paraplégie... Mais ce qui est super chiant c'est que t'as une autre meuf qui quand il commence le jeu qui lui fait pas son évaluation de caractère et après t'en a une autre qui le trouve arrogant alors qu'il parle juste normalement, ça c'est encore super énervant... Et cette même meuf le sous estime et dit qu'il triche ça m'a vraiment soulé. Je dis ça mais je suis juste au premier chapitre peut être que vous vous allez accroché mais moi j'arrêterai ce roman il me met surtout de mauvaise humeur... Bravo a l'auteur quand même d'écrire une histoire.
Only got a few chapters in so the high ratings on updating stability and world background are just me giving author the benefit of the doubt. Concept itself, while not necessarily original, is good. But 1) the grammar and writing style (author "mysteriously" leaving out stuff in an to me really annoying way, like there is no motivation for stuff more then whether it is convenient for author or not) are horrible. And 2) characters feel really flat, no realistic emotions from mc. I would give it another try if it was editet to flow better though.
Book Has an intersting story similar to some other famous stories about a VR game. Author has very poor grammer and sentence structure. If you can get passed poor grammer and sentence structure then this is a good book.
highly recommended! Must read! ♥️♥️ highly recommended! Must read! ♥️♥️ highly recommended! Must read! ♥️♥️ highly recommended! Must read! ♥️♥️ highly recommended! Must read! ♥️♥️ highly recommended! Must read! ♥️♥️
Hello Jigx 👋 As I have stalked a bit, I have seen from reviews that you have grammar and sentence flow problems? It made the ratings plummet down. I will offer my help if you want? Though I am not a good one at it. So what're your thoughts? Please reply here if you want. Hehe 👍
I am a typical vrmmorpg lover and so far I'm liking story .but the grammatical errors are unbearable that I'm still at chapter 18 for reading almost a half day time.
I have to say you have a good story here but i would suggest getting a editor or someone that can help with grammar and writing quality. Even though the mistakes are small it can throw off some ones reading and it gets annoying but other then that the story is great And i look forward to future chapters
already read so many of this type but I'm disatisfied on vrmmorpg because that they are weak on real world. and now that he is even crippled in realworld, what will happen when theres problem on real world what he can do? game all day?.
First of all, I am not a pro at making reviews 2nd It's my opinion and what I think about it. 3rd I don't care if anyone will be offended by this. and 4th I read up to chapter 9 The story has good potential but grammar has problems, the systems (power level, the name color) is not good (maybe gets better later), plot armor is thick, I think the MC is dumb and contradicts himself. Over all good but the mc to cliche for me and the grammar and systems need polishing.
Honestly the story is very interesting, but the grammar is soooo bad it is very hard to read in the beginning chapters you can hardly understand what is going on because of the grammar but it can be fixed if the author decides to do so [img=faceslap]
The Story has potential, but the Characters and poorly written, alongside the World Background. Updates are decent and the Writing Quality is the ugh. I'm not good with Grammar myself but your story is full of writing mistakes and jumbled words like for example "I went the to shop" I noticed that a lot where you have 2 words mixed together. Final Review: 3.2 Star
Coming to the plot of the story, I really liked it. The male lead's character of not giving up is kinda nice. A trait which I like. Coming to the writing it has a few grammatical mistakes along with the change in tenses, it's quite mixed up. But nothing that can't be corrected. All the best for your book[img=recommend]
Me personally, I love systems as they bring you into the video game-like world and takes you away from reality. As of chapter for it's been a good read with a likable male lead. Certainly a story for one to kick back on a Friday afternoon and enjoy. I'll update more as I read more but so far, keep up the great work, writer!
I jumped into this with no expectations, and was greatly surprised honestly. It's a very intriguing start for the story, and I'm more than curious to read what happens next. Honestly, AMAZING job!!
The story starts strongly with a believable character suffering from an unjust trauma. It's an excellent setting for a weak-to-strong character. The author has a great imagination, give it a try!
Coool Story. First thing first... I love all the works based on virtual games and sometimes I wish to be in one of them. Anyway about this work, I love it. Everything seems awesome, world development - well planned, characters design and development - superb quality, storyline - A1 and writing quality - gooood and since the author is updating this story quite regularly so I believe I'll not have to wait two or three to get updates and that is just awesome. Since this story is in sprity I wish author wins it and for that I'll be quite happy to help him. Well done author.
The plot was there but the writing quality wasn't what I expected. There were issues: There were loads of issues. Perhaps focusing on grammar and sentence structure to be specific, would be better for you.
I'd like how the story goes on, the character development and the world building, and it always made me excited what will happen next. Thanks Author keep it up! we are always here your reader to support you!!!!! [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]