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This is too cringe to be readable. This author took Robin's character and included her in the MC's crew so they can use her as a plot point for MC to flex. There are little to no emotional build-up to each scenes. The characters easily promise life long devotion to the MC in exchange for being saved. It comes off more as a game mission than an organic process that develops the chemistry between characters. Not to mention Robin. Robin was so done dirty, moreso than how she was done dirty by Oda. I always come with hopeful expectation that these authors would do Robin justice, because why else would they confidently include her in their cast, right? But no. She's always relegated to either being the damsel in distress, a background character or a cocksleeve. I really thought this author would be the same, because their profile seems feminine enough to pass as a female, meaning they might understand the glaring mistakes Oda makes when utilizing his female characters. It's extremely disappointing for a non-harem-collecting fanfic. I can see why this was dropped. The entire thing is absolute garbage, even for garbage standards, because this should've been better than the hornfest fanfics in this site by fundamentals alone.
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This FF is quite good. I enjoy seeing different point of view in One Piece World other then my own, so good job Author, keep up the good work!
Pretty good work. It's nice seeing someone putting so much work into something that they enjoy doing. I just wanted to say that your novel is pretty interesting and to keep up the good work :)
hemm i can say that this novel worth reading... maybe you think mc devil fruit are weak...but try think about it more deeper... when mc haki leveled to max level his ashura hand will became nightmare to everyone... it like fighting grap that have many hunderds of hand.....hahahahaha
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Good Story, I like it but a question is in my mind aauthor-sama, will he get Ace(Gol D Roger's sword) one of the 12 meito like Whitebeard's Murakumogiri
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Its good and interesting with some new ocs the story keeps on developing for good now just what we need is stable updates....................
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i love this novel. <33333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333
Alright so, this is a good story but with glaring mistakes mc is weak as **** even though he has mastered the most advanced form of haki as one should know that in order to master haki you need a very powerful body. Apart from that since he already has a strOng physique (as he has mastered haki) he should have no problem with mastering his devil fruit as it reqUires stamina, we also saw that when blackbeard got tremble tremble fruit he instantly was able to use it to its full power. yes i agree that awakening the fruit is not Easy as it requires one to be familiar with their fruit. However even without awaking his fruit or eveN without his devil fruit just based on his Haki alone he should be able to fight an Admiral. Yes he may not be able to win duE to his lack of experience but fight them on an equal footing should be of no problem specially sCinCe he has master emission haki. After all in one piEce the hIgh level battle are all about haki and devil fruit are just for support pUrPoses as we Saw in the fight between whitebeard and roger. So anyways i felt that author has some serious lack of understanding about the anime But apart from that the character design of the mc was great 👍 as well as the whole training arc i enjoyed those But then it went downHill as it did not make sense for the mc to be so weak Also for a mythical zoAn his devil fruit was specially weak In fact Robin’s devil fruit seemed much stronger as she did not have any limitations on the number of hands the devil friit Could grow amd also we saw her Use the devil fruit to create Giant legs which could stomp entire armys. So again some serious work needed on the devil fruit... ... would suggest the auther to google AshuRa in Indian mythology as it will give him a loT of ideas. Thats all, hope you do a Rewrite as Your idea has a lot of potential as long as you fiX the obvious mistakes.
I'll start by talking about what I thought of this fanfic so far. The beginning of the story was good, the protagonist presented himself as an intelligent person and with a strategic mind, but little by little he changed and became more stupid and noisy, like the typical MC shonen. Another thing I didn't like about this fanfic is the fact that the author gave the protagonist an Akuma no Mi of the Mythic Zoan type where in theory he should transform the user into an Asura, but the only thing she does is to grow more arms, none special ability or physical transformation that we all know that an Akuma no Mi of the Zoan Mythic type has, because in all Akuma no Mi of the Zoan type a type of physical transformation in the user, be it a hybrid or total form, in addition, all Akuma no Mi of the Mythic Zoan type have a special ability, for example, the admiral of the Sengoku fleet in his Buddha form has the ability to generate shock waves with his palms and Marco of the Whitebeard pirates has flames that are capable of healing the user, Akuma no Mi appears to be of Paramecia type instead of Zoan type, the author suggested that a big change will occur when awakening happens, but to use Akuma no Mi’s hybrid or full transformation skills isn’t n It is necessary to be in the state of Upon awakening, by the way, this Akuma no Mi chosen for the protagonist is very impractical, because the greater the number of arms the slower the MC is, there is also the fact that the arms that come out from the back have a range smaller than the main arms, since the created limbs do not extend, unless opponents attack from behind for the rest of the things there are few advantages, it would have been better not to have given MC an Akuma no Mi if it were so, nor has the excuse of running out of time, since the protagonist has eaten Akuma no Mi for years, in all these years has he never seen another skill besides growing more hands? I don't think it's possible. Anyway this fanfic is not to my liking, but I will give 4 stars to motivate the author, because it is not easy to write a story. Sorry for any grammatical errors, I am writing this through the Google translator.
ONE OF THE BEST ONE PIECE FANFIC EVER!!! KEEP IT GOING BROO!!! .....................................................................................
Only up to chapter 9 but I have already have two major problems with this story.... The mc was stated to not have any friends so he was a very isolated individual. He was like Shikamaru in the fact he was a genius and read/watched clouds every day. This was like the first impression we get of the mc. Then suddenly out of nowhere, it all went out the window. It's like the author made him a completely new character. A very upbeat individual who shouts a lot and is a little stupid. Trying to make the mc like roger I guess? I don't have a problem with this type of character however, the fact that the first impression of him was just so vastly different just rly destroys the story. Like what happens if the author decides he doesn't like this type of personality in the future and does a 180 again... We will always be asking questions cause it has already happened once so it will prob happen again. The other thing that annoys me is the author's liberal use of capital letters. It is just way too jarring to read. If you want us to know that he is speaking loudly, shouting or whatever you use ! I mean that is the whole fcking point of them... Oh yeah, not rly a problem per se but why tf does he need two swords and guns? I mean that's just way too much no? It should be one gun and one sword or two swords in each hand or two guns instead. There is literally no upsides to having two of each weapon. If he had more hands then yeah but he only has two... Sry but this just doesn't make sense to me... It's like... say he is fighting someone and has both swords in his hands. He wants to use his gun but fck how can he? He would need to sheath one of his swords and reach for his gun. Same if it was the other way around. But if he does this he would just be asking to get destroyed by the opponent... One second in a fight can mean everything. They only feasible way he could fight with them all is if he threw them to the ground when he needs to change. This thou has massive downsides of say what happens if he needs to use it again? He can't because he threw it to the ground... and then is he going to just throw his weapons to the ground every time? No matter how you put it, it just makes absolutely no sense...
the novel is one long talk no jutsu , the interaction is incredibly dull and unbelievable . the stories concept is cool and I cant hate on one piece so ill give it a decent rating. good luck on the rest of the novel author
HAREM?... HAREM?...HAREM?... HAREM?...HAREM?... HAREM?...HAREM?... HAREM?... HAREM?...HAREM?... HAREM?... HAREM?...HAREM?... HAREM?... HAREM?...HAREM?... HAREM?... HAREM?...HAREM?... HAREM?... HAREM?...HAREM?... HAREM?... HAREM?...HAREM?...
Only complaint is the amount of chapters. Keep up the good work 👍 Pls make more chapters
Don't drop please i ses lot of author drop their novel ! i like to read fanfict it is funnier then the original since in original it is always the same Thing with MC being predictible in his act
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The story has a fantastic writing style. I hope we can see more stories like these that have a great story plot. I hope the author continues to write great stories like this <3
This FanFic is very good. I just started reading the first 4 chapters, and I can already tell it's exciting. The plot is very cool and I would like to see more of its development. Keep it up my g !! Looking for more content to come !!
it's pretty good..... . and this fanfic has its own story line/original plot... which makes it more interesting... . overall its light hearted fic
I see the writing quality improving after every chapter. It really gets good, especially after Alex waving Luffy goodbye which kind of “inspired” luffy to be pirate king as well. It parallels with the interaction of Robert and Alex when Alex was younger. I look forward to more chapters ! (maybe a filler one on how Makino and Franco got along well but thats just me)
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Okay my review so far, i like your novel its very interesting and have a lot of potential so keep it up 👍🏻. Now i would suggest that you make the chapter a bit more detailed to make it a bit longer so it would be more filling, other than that like i said its a good novel and im looking forward for more amazing chapters 😁😁
Nice story and a wonderful start. Please update it daily for more reading............ ..... ................................................
Pretty bland fanfic. Mc is following luffy's path to a tea and even meeting Luffy's yet to be crew. It doesn't make sense. 10 years before luffy and everything remains the same as on One piece. What's the point then? Mc eats a devil fruit, but doesn't use it and we don't really know if that devil fruit is even usefull in any way... Not to mention mc is too strong for blue seas and paradise people. It's just a 1 dimensional mess of a story.
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This is too cringe to be readable. This author took Robin's character and included her in the MC's crew so they can use her as a plot point for MC to flex. There are little to no emotional build-up to each scenes. The characters easily promise life long devotion to the MC in exchange for being saved. It comes off more as a game mission than an organic process that develops the chemistry between characters. Not to mention Robin. Robin was so done dirty, moreso than how she was done dirty by Oda. I always come with hopeful expectation that these authors would do Robin justice, because why else would they confidently include her in their cast, right? But no. She's always relegated to either being the damsel in distress, a background character or a cocksleeve. I really thought this author would be the same, because their profile seems feminine enough to pass as a female, meaning they might understand the glaring mistakes Oda makes when utilizing his female characters. It's extremely disappointing for a non-harem-collecting fanfic. I can see why this was dropped. The entire thing is absolute garbage, even for garbage standards, because this should've been better than the hornfest fanfics in this site by fundamentals alone.
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This FF is quite good. I enjoy seeing different point of view in One Piece World other then my own, so good job Author, keep up the good work!
Pretty good work. It's nice seeing someone putting so much work into something that they enjoy doing. I just wanted to say that your novel is pretty interesting and to keep up the good work :)
hemm i can say that this novel worth reading... maybe you think mc devil fruit are weak...but try think about it more deeper... when mc haki leveled to max level his ashura hand will became nightmare to everyone... it like fighting grap that have many hunderds of hand.....hahahahaha
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Good Story, I like it but a question is in my mind aauthor-sama, will he get Ace(Gol D Roger's sword) one of the 12 meito like Whitebeard's Murakumogiri
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Its good and interesting with some new ocs the story keeps on developing for good now just what we need is stable updates....................
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i love this novel. <33333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333
Alright so, this is a good story but with glaring mistakes mc is weak as **** even though he has mastered the most advanced form of haki as one should know that in order to master haki you need a very powerful body. Apart from that since he already has a strOng physique (as he has mastered haki) he should have no problem with mastering his devil fruit as it reqUires stamina, we also saw that when blackbeard got tremble tremble fruit he instantly was able to use it to its full power. yes i agree that awakening the fruit is not Easy as it requires one to be familiar with their fruit. However even without awaking his fruit or eveN without his devil fruit just based on his Haki alone he should be able to fight an Admiral. Yes he may not be able to win duE to his lack of experience but fight them on an equal footing should be of no problem specially sCinCe he has master emission haki. After all in one piEce the hIgh level battle are all about haki and devil fruit are just for support pUrPoses as we Saw in the fight between whitebeard and roger. So anyways i felt that author has some serious lack of understanding about the anime But apart from that the character design of the mc was great 👍 as well as the whole training arc i enjoyed those But then it went downHill as it did not make sense for the mc to be so weak Also for a mythical zoAn his devil fruit was specially weak In fact Robin’s devil fruit seemed much stronger as she did not have any limitations on the number of hands the devil friit Could grow amd also we saw her Use the devil fruit to create Giant legs which could stomp entire armys. So again some serious work needed on the devil fruit... ... would suggest the auther to google AshuRa in Indian mythology as it will give him a loT of ideas. Thats all, hope you do a Rewrite as Your idea has a lot of potential as long as you fiX the obvious mistakes.
I'll start by talking about what I thought of this fanfic so far. The beginning of the story was good, the protagonist presented himself as an intelligent person and with a strategic mind, but little by little he changed and became more stupid and noisy, like the typical MC shonen. Another thing I didn't like about this fanfic is the fact that the author gave the protagonist an Akuma no Mi of the Mythic Zoan type where in theory he should transform the user into an Asura, but the only thing she does is to grow more arms, none special ability or physical transformation that we all know that an Akuma no Mi of the Zoan Mythic type has, because in all Akuma no Mi of the Zoan type a type of physical transformation in the user, be it a hybrid or total form, in addition, all Akuma no Mi of the Mythic Zoan type have a special ability, for example, the admiral of the Sengoku fleet in his Buddha form has the ability to generate shock waves with his palms and Marco of the Whitebeard pirates has flames that are capable of healing the user, Akuma no Mi appears to be of Paramecia type instead of Zoan type, the author suggested that a big change will occur when awakening happens, but to use Akuma no Mi’s hybrid or full transformation skills isn’t n It is necessary to be in the state of Upon awakening, by the way, this Akuma no Mi chosen for the protagonist is very impractical, because the greater the number of arms the slower the MC is, there is also the fact that the arms that come out from the back have a range smaller than the main arms, since the created limbs do not extend, unless opponents attack from behind for the rest of the things there are few advantages, it would have been better not to have given MC an Akuma no Mi if it were so, nor has the excuse of running out of time, since the protagonist has eaten Akuma no Mi for years, in all these years has he never seen another skill besides growing more hands? I don't think it's possible. Anyway this fanfic is not to my liking, but I will give 4 stars to motivate the author, because it is not easy to write a story. Sorry for any grammatical errors, I am writing this through the Google translator.
ONE OF THE BEST ONE PIECE FANFIC EVER!!! KEEP IT GOING BROO!!! .....................................................................................
Only up to chapter 9 but I have already have two major problems with this story.... The mc was stated to not have any friends so he was a very isolated individual. He was like Shikamaru in the fact he was a genius and read/watched clouds every day. This was like the first impression we get of the mc. Then suddenly out of nowhere, it all went out the window. It's like the author made him a completely new character. A very upbeat individual who shouts a lot and is a little stupid. Trying to make the mc like roger I guess? I don't have a problem with this type of character however, the fact that the first impression of him was just so vastly different just rly destroys the story. Like what happens if the author decides he doesn't like this type of personality in the future and does a 180 again... We will always be asking questions cause it has already happened once so it will prob happen again. The other thing that annoys me is the author's liberal use of capital letters. It is just way too jarring to read. If you want us to know that he is speaking loudly, shouting or whatever you use ! I mean that is the whole fcking point of them... Oh yeah, not rly a problem per se but why tf does he need two swords and guns? I mean that's just way too much no? It should be one gun and one sword or two swords in each hand or two guns instead. There is literally no upsides to having two of each weapon. If he had more hands then yeah but he only has two... Sry but this just doesn't make sense to me... It's like... say he is fighting someone and has both swords in his hands. He wants to use his gun but fck how can he? He would need to sheath one of his swords and reach for his gun. Same if it was the other way around. But if he does this he would just be asking to get destroyed by the opponent... One second in a fight can mean everything. They only feasible way he could fight with them all is if he threw them to the ground when he needs to change. This thou has massive downsides of say what happens if he needs to use it again? He can't because he threw it to the ground... and then is he going to just throw his weapons to the ground every time? No matter how you put it, it just makes absolutely no sense...
the novel is one long talk no jutsu , the interaction is incredibly dull and unbelievable . the stories concept is cool and I cant hate on one piece so ill give it a decent rating. good luck on the rest of the novel author
HAREM?... HAREM?...HAREM?... HAREM?...HAREM?... HAREM?...HAREM?... HAREM?... HAREM?...HAREM?... HAREM?... HAREM?...HAREM?... HAREM?... HAREM?...HAREM?... HAREM?... HAREM?...HAREM?... HAREM?... HAREM?...HAREM?... HAREM?... HAREM?...HAREM?...
Only complaint is the amount of chapters. Keep up the good work 👍 Pls make more chapters
Don't drop please i ses lot of author drop their novel ! i like to read fanfict it is funnier then the original since in original it is always the same Thing with MC being predictible in his act
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The story has a fantastic writing style. I hope we can see more stories like these that have a great story plot. I hope the author continues to write great stories like this <3
This FanFic is very good. I just started reading the first 4 chapters, and I can already tell it's exciting. The plot is very cool and I would like to see more of its development. Keep it up my g !! Looking for more content to come !!
it's pretty good..... . and this fanfic has its own story line/original plot... which makes it more interesting... . overall its light hearted fic
I see the writing quality improving after every chapter. It really gets good, especially after Alex waving Luffy goodbye which kind of “inspired” luffy to be pirate king as well. It parallels with the interaction of Robert and Alex when Alex was younger. I look forward to more chapters ! (maybe a filler one on how Makino and Franco got along well but thats just me)
เปิดเผยสปอยเลอร์ Okay my review so far, i like your novel its very interesting and have a lot of potential so keep it up 👍🏻. Now i would suggest that you make the chapter a bit more detailed to make it a bit longer so it would be more filling, other than that like i said its a good novel and im looking forward for more amazing chapters 😁😁
Nice story and a wonderful start. Please update it daily for more reading............ ..... ................................................
Pretty bland fanfic. Mc is following luffy's path to a tea and even meeting Luffy's yet to be crew. It doesn't make sense. 10 years before luffy and everything remains the same as on One piece. What's the point then? Mc eats a devil fruit, but doesn't use it and we don't really know if that devil fruit is even usefull in any way... Not to mention mc is too strong for blue seas and paradise people. It's just a 1 dimensional mess of a story.