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As others have said, it is kind of a discount Sword Art Online. I only got to chapter 9 by this point, but I am going to drop it. The part I dislike the most, is that the game mechanics are hardly touched in the beginning. That is a big reason I like video game novels, there is a power standard and quantifiable growth, but these stats seem arbitrary. Movement speed is the biggest flag: he has 7 movement speed and run. (Successfully) from a monster with 20 movement speed. There is no indication that the monster has to make a detour around trees or something, but he out-runs it just fine.
Don't let the reviews fool you... The story starts really nicely but just keeps you waiting to fully grasp the concept and never really gets there. It has no plot or direction.. You never really understand what you're reading.. The mc is non-existent for about 75% of the story. I hope the author gets better in his next story because this one is disappointingly bland.
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Good start. Started reading, hoping for a nice journey forward. Good luck Author on your journey to make a nice great world. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .
This novel are truly mess innocent girl being raped where else mc enjoying his sleep and its not enough here author give a tragic past to sweetsugar guild leader men if you have to write thing like this at least give a warning Truly man, don't know what. Are thing thinking writing all this mess🤬
Really get book the creator of the story really listens to his readers which is awesome. Because of this the character development is always on point and he does a great job keeping the readers happy.
Thanks for the novel 😀😊😀😊😅😄😅😄😯😆😇😯😇😐😇😆😂😆😂😀😁😀😊😁😀😊😄😅😅😉😆😉😆😯😇😯😇😆😂😆😂😁😂😀😀😁😁😊😁😉😅😆😉😆😯😯😇😇😆😂😆😀😁
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Author you should be careful when choosing cover because sometimes readers come and read it because of the cover, it also sometimes resembles the character. And the mc, he should be mature than others like jin woo ur cover since he suffered early from both his parents. I know the mc got trauma but why make mc like super naive (yeah exaggerated) in the begging? It will be better if he was clever and smart. Ps: dont take this seriously as i am only expressing my thoughts about the story. Continue your gud work author!
This one of the first webnovels I've read. Good choice. I do not recommend for those who are innocent or have not had THAT talk. Also I think the author should focus on the MC more and maybe his love interests.
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So far so good, its amazing, I've been looking for it, didn't notice it was moved, supporting u author! kepp the good work! I'm loving the story
Can you add Tuyul to replace Goblin or Jenglot to Voodoo doll? If you can it will be amazing, but if only you want to that is. One more thing, give Kuro a rare item for killing Sumantox, like Hp absorbing sword or something like that.
The story is still developing but I think it is on the path to being a great story.....................l......................l. ............
From what I’ve read, the concept of the story itself isn’t bad. The story on the other hand is a mess. The chapters introduce a new character almost every chapter and doesn’t bother to develop them. By chapter 25, I’ve been introduced to more than 15 characters who have no connection to the Mc. Most of them only appear for once chapter before the next chapter switches back to the Mc. I have nothing against knowing a lot of characters or some background information, but throwing a bunch of irrelevant characters into the story every other chapter just makes the reader confused and lose focus. With how much POVs you keep switching too, at this point I doubt if the Mc is even the Mc.
Nice i love it. It brings a lot of Indonesian monster type of Undead. Keep going your good work author. I will always support you. Love from kudus
Writing Quality : 6/10 But i love the monsters, characters and curious how this might be goin. I think its almost same with overlord, sao, log horizon.
Alur cerita menarik. Karakter dan monster juga banyak. Kualitas tulisan saja yang perlu diperbaiki. Tapi saya sangat mendukung karya anak bangsa. Ayo Indonesia!!
Story seems interested, but the Synopsis is just a mess. Its confusing and does not accurately represent exactly whats going on. All I picked up was that he gets trapped in game, becomes emperor, somehow takes game army to real world and fights world government (who again somehow did something called a "soul harvest") and then somehow wins. Is that the whole plot of the book explained or is that everything before the book even starts?
Shameless 5 stars review from me, I only read the first chapter and it feels too rush. Take it slow, explain the world building first and watch out for diction (ex: height 175 cm, not tall 175 cm) also the grammar or the structure of your sentence, maybe you need an editor. . Tetap semangat dan keep improving yourself to be a better writer. Podho wong Indo-ne tak dukung tok pokok👊
Honest Review Found this one has potential, feels a lot like Sword Art Online. (A very hard to read version of it.) The Good: Character classes are unique and it is nice to see an MC that isn't 100% righteous for once. The Bad: Hard to follow... it jumps around a lot with little to no indication. I found the world setting kind of convoluted and some of the situations to be pointless. It feels like a lot of this is filler content so far because I really only care about Shiro and people he interacts with. The Neutral: Objectively describing someone as "sexy" leaves it open to interpretation, that's not a bad thing by itself, but who thinks it is sexy? (i.e. the observers, the characters, the readers, NPCs?) Maybe I missed it, but why are they stuck in the world? Maybe add a note that senshi = warrior and the significance of it so people don't think "WTF are senshis? Sounds like sushi!" or something like that. (Assuming that is what you meant it to be) Feel free to review back and I'll add you on Line if you would like editing help.
Very interesting and the parents are huge A**holes he I wish he could have chosen another race it would have been more fun and check it out if u like fanatsy and gaming
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Hey there! Good day for writing! If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to contact geekyteddyyo@gmail.com. A brief introduction, some sample chapters or links will be appreciated when reaching out.
Hi there! Do you know there is a LitRPG writing contest? You might be a competitive participant and take the chance to win up to $3,000! Please Google LUTAW_writing_contest or Supreme Me Fiction Writing Contest to find out more! This contest is free entry and open to any writer at any country. If you had any query, please feel free to contact litrpgwritingcontest_review@hotmail.com Good luck for writing!
As others have said, it is kind of a discount Sword Art Online. I only got to chapter 9 by this point, but I am going to drop it. The part I dislike the most, is that the game mechanics are hardly touched in the beginning. That is a big reason I like video game novels, there is a power standard and quantifiable growth, but these stats seem arbitrary. Movement speed is the biggest flag: he has 7 movement speed and run. (Successfully) from a monster with 20 movement speed. There is no indication that the monster has to make a detour around trees or something, but he out-runs it just fine.
Don't let the reviews fool you... The story starts really nicely but just keeps you waiting to fully grasp the concept and never really gets there. It has no plot or direction.. You never really understand what you're reading.. The mc is non-existent for about 75% of the story. I hope the author gets better in his next story because this one is disappointingly bland.
Thanks for the novel 😄😀🙃🙂🤩😗😛😗😜🤪🤪😝😗😚😇😉😁😅😁😅😄😆😃🙃🤩😗😛😜😝🤪🤑☺😙☺😙🤣😊😆🤣😄😆🙃😉😉🤩🤪😛😗🤩😗😇🤪🤑☺😙😊🥰😉😇🤩😉
Good start. Started reading, hoping for a nice journey forward. Good luck Author on your journey to make a nice great world. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .
This novel are truly mess innocent girl being raped where else mc enjoying his sleep and its not enough here author give a tragic past to sweetsugar guild leader men if you have to write thing like this at least give a warning Truly man, don't know what. Are thing thinking writing all this mess🤬
Really get book the creator of the story really listens to his readers which is awesome. Because of this the character development is always on point and he does a great job keeping the readers happy.
Thanks for the novel 😀😊😀😊😅😄😅😄😯😆😇😯😇😐😇😆😂😆😂😀😁😀😊😁😀😊😄😅😅😉😆😉😆😯😇😯😇😆😂😆😂😁😂😀😀😁😁😊😁😉😅😆😉😆😯😯😇😇😆😂😆😀😁
How do you know the story will be good!? You can be sure as author starts from his PayPal, if you are not convicted just read the 3 x 5* reviews from author himself or the other 24 LoL.
Welkom bij het Gboard-klembord. Gekopieerde tekst wordt hier opgeslagen.Welkom bij het Gboard-klembord. Gekopieerde tekst wordt hier opgeslagen.Welkom bij het Gboard-klembord. Gekopieerde tekst wordt hier opgeslagen.Welkom bij het Gboard-klembord. Gekopieerde tekst wordt hier opgeslagen.
Author you should be careful when choosing cover because sometimes readers come and read it because of the cover, it also sometimes resembles the character. And the mc, he should be mature than others like jin woo ur cover since he suffered early from both his parents. I know the mc got trauma but why make mc like super naive (yeah exaggerated) in the begging? It will be better if he was clever and smart. Ps: dont take this seriously as i am only expressing my thoughts about the story. Continue your gud work author!
This one of the first webnovels I've read. Good choice. I do not recommend for those who are innocent or have not had THAT talk. Also I think the author should focus on the MC more and maybe his love interests.
เปิดเผยสปอยเลอร์ So far so good, its amazing, I've been looking for it, didn't notice it was moved, supporting u author! kepp the good work! I'm loving the story
Can you add Tuyul to replace Goblin or Jenglot to Voodoo doll? If you can it will be amazing, but if only you want to that is. One more thing, give Kuro a rare item for killing Sumantox, like Hp absorbing sword or something like that.
The story is still developing but I think it is on the path to being a great story.....................l......................l. ............
From what I’ve read, the concept of the story itself isn’t bad. The story on the other hand is a mess. The chapters introduce a new character almost every chapter and doesn’t bother to develop them. By chapter 25, I’ve been introduced to more than 15 characters who have no connection to the Mc. Most of them only appear for once chapter before the next chapter switches back to the Mc. I have nothing against knowing a lot of characters or some background information, but throwing a bunch of irrelevant characters into the story every other chapter just makes the reader confused and lose focus. With how much POVs you keep switching too, at this point I doubt if the Mc is even the Mc.
Nice i love it. It brings a lot of Indonesian monster type of Undead. Keep going your good work author. I will always support you. Love from kudus
Writing Quality : 6/10 But i love the monsters, characters and curious how this might be goin. I think its almost same with overlord, sao, log horizon.
Alur cerita menarik. Karakter dan monster juga banyak. Kualitas tulisan saja yang perlu diperbaiki. Tapi saya sangat mendukung karya anak bangsa. Ayo Indonesia!!
Story seems interested, but the Synopsis is just a mess. Its confusing and does not accurately represent exactly whats going on. All I picked up was that he gets trapped in game, becomes emperor, somehow takes game army to real world and fights world government (who again somehow did something called a "soul harvest") and then somehow wins. Is that the whole plot of the book explained or is that everything before the book even starts?
Shameless 5 stars review from me, I only read the first chapter and it feels too rush. Take it slow, explain the world building first and watch out for diction (ex: height 175 cm, not tall 175 cm) also the grammar or the structure of your sentence, maybe you need an editor. . Tetap semangat dan keep improving yourself to be a better writer. Podho wong Indo-ne tak dukung tok pokok👊
Honest Review Found this one has potential, feels a lot like Sword Art Online. (A very hard to read version of it.) The Good: Character classes are unique and it is nice to see an MC that isn't 100% righteous for once. The Bad: Hard to follow... it jumps around a lot with little to no indication. I found the world setting kind of convoluted and some of the situations to be pointless. It feels like a lot of this is filler content so far because I really only care about Shiro and people he interacts with. The Neutral: Objectively describing someone as "sexy" leaves it open to interpretation, that's not a bad thing by itself, but who thinks it is sexy? (i.e. the observers, the characters, the readers, NPCs?) Maybe I missed it, but why are they stuck in the world? Maybe add a note that senshi = warrior and the significance of it so people don't think "WTF are senshis? Sounds like sushi!" or something like that. (Assuming that is what you meant it to be) Feel free to review back and I'll add you on Line if you would like editing help.
Very interesting and the parents are huge A**holes he I wish he could have chosen another race it would have been more fun and check it out if u like fanatsy and gaming