Can True Love be Found from Online Dating?

LV 3

Fiona_Singer

I feel like I'm torn between two parts of the book. For the first 5 chapters I genuinely love it and have no problem giving it all-5-stars, but then the whole book progressed into a quite strange direction and it feels like wearing a ill-fitting suit, and like I said in my review swap thread, I'm very much a picky readers who are accustomed to high-quality, classic literature, not web-novel stuff, thus the current rating, unfortunately :( I guess the problem is that the writing style of the author is too distinctively light, cheerful and bouncing, and very fast-paced, so it is a perfect match for the first five chapters, where the story appears to be a classic modern romance comedy. In this part, the thoughts and emotions about marriage and relationship of a 30-year-old Filipino single woman are vividly portraited, and it greatly resonates with the readers, especially for asian girls like me :D. Whereas for women in western countries it might be harder to understand the huge pressure of late marriage, the nervousness and doubts before dating online should still be able to be felt by everyone. The characters, especially MC, are adorable in these five chapters, and everything is funny but also realistic, too. I actually had the exact same experience like MC (though I'm just a college student right now), probably except for the part of sexyness (I'm more of a hard-to-get cold beauty on the surface, according to the friend who started my Tinder account without my consent), so I couldn't help laughing while reading this. But then the author chose to continue it in a tough, dramatic style, steering it towards tragedies/accidents/hardships, and trying to let MC become a strong, tough female lead. It's not a bad turn, if you turn your writing style into the same direction, too, but the author didn't, or failed at trying, and all the merits of her writing style I mentioned in the last paragraph became setbacks. For a tragic or difficult experience to be touching in a novel, you have to spend lots of words portraiting characters and narrating details, so that readers could fully resonate with the plots and feel what the characters feel. Instead, the author pushed the story forward in the same fashion as before, thus lacking lots of proper detail writing, progressing the story too quickly, and leaving the characters very empty--almost to a ridiculous degree, like Kevin. Though I understand in the whole outline of the story Kevin is objectively pretty much just a tool to get MC into Belgium legally and give her the house and money, but YOU CAN'T SERIOUSLY JUST DEPICT HIM THAT WAY IN THE TEXTS. To me, he just appeared so conveniently and died so conveniently, without enough flesh-out of his character and explanations of his motives. It's pretty cold-blooded, tbh. So my suggestions are two: the first one, also the most recommended one, is to go back to the original romance comedy style, e.g.write about all types of people MC met in online dates and the funny stuff happened in the process, because I think this is the kind of story that fits the author's writing style best; the second, if the author is determined to write a conventional romance drama, then you have to practice and improve your writing. Don't get frustrated (since you post it in my thread so I presume you are ready to stand critics) about this, it cannot be more common to make these mistakes if you are a beginner (I think so since it's your 1st novel here), especially when you are not writing in your mother language. Just read more and practice, and you will do better XD.

LV 4

AnimalLover

I love this story!! This is such an amazing story, I so totality recommend this book to those out there! The characters are short but there also quite detailed to the point where they seem long. The cliffhanger's want you to read more every time, over all making the book so awesome. I have only good things to say about this book its so good. I hope more people will read it!!!

LV 4

ElleJaye

Ahhh... the joy of online dating. This filled my heart with warmth and joy. I love how adorable the FL is. Plot is solid and characters are well written. Keep it author! :D (review trade)

LV 13

JenzalexSnail

The novel was written with maturity pounded in it. It depicted the desire of lonely souls in search of true love through online dating; a platform that people all around the world will visit either openly or secretly. The character of a strong-willed woman and faithful to her love through thick and thin, sacrifices she made for her loved one, is really an amazing one. Its story also features what most household would face after having children; desire for money which blinded one from rationality. I would say the story was written backwards where readers are reading the ending of the story rather than the beginning which I think is a rare kind of writing. Daring and bold to express the challenge of retelling the truth behind the ending, which most readers love too. Well, everyone is reading to know the answer to the reason the story existed in such a way and it has been pounded in this one novel. Thought it has the title as online dating, there is actually a blend of Sci-Fi and spirituality in them. Refreshing and well depicted and the imagination is pure and artistic in its own way. There are lots of moral in the story, hidden beneath each sentence that will make us realise that there is actually another person who is having the same problem as we did and I urge readers out there to give it a try. Just a peek would do if you're feeling reluctant cuz the story continues about her daughter's now.

LV 4

Laurasiscoyote

A story of a woman who finds her love online? Interesting, I like how the story unfolds and I will surely continue reading it to see how it develops. 10/10

LV 4

OJROMANCE

"This is romance," this is what I said when I first saw this book. I added it to my reading list and so far am still in love with it. I love a lot of things about this book, the narration, the way characters are developed.

LV 10

Gold_Paper_Crane

A very beautiful mix blood FL with a very charming ML. What more could you ask for? I'm always excited for online love, give this a chance and you won't regret it. Setting was real nice, characters were described really well too. It's an enjoyable read so far. I will keep reading it!

LV 3

MAKKAPATI

This book is very interesting and very intriguing as well, as it is the trending nowadays, the online dating. As we continue to read their love story, I highly recommend this book to all the readers whose preference to read is Romance Genre. Who knows, you might get inputs from the author herself on finding your own true love, as well? Since, some of the sceneries of this novel were the actual real-life experiences of the author herself and the people she knew of. Kee it up author!

LV 2

KrazyWriter

I wanted to find my real one in some app... I only read because of the reason above, I am a dreamer and defender of love, and his story introduced well the idea of a virtual love, I liked it.

LV 4

NEidarous

A good romance book, the development of the plot is kinda fast for me but not in a bad way. The romance between characters is lovely and in a good pace. The writing quality needs a little work but not a big issue. Highly recommend for romance lovers. Good work author.

LV 14

May1st

The concept is nice and interesting, some grammar errors here and there and some misspelled words, but didn't take away the pleasure of the reading. Its nice reading about online relationship, try and fix what should be fixed and your story is gonna do great. Also change the 'coz' to 'course', its okay if you're writing about her text messages, but not in a normal sentence. (Note: don't mind me if others are okay with it,) its just my personal POV, i don't think it fits. Overall is good, i wish you good luck in your writing.

LV 13

PaperbackWriter

Hi sis, nice story. I guess we authors do share similar mind. LOL...! Reminds me on my 3rd series of my novel on Quantum Leap-Multiverse Transmigration. Its a mix of romance, thriller and suspense. Great writes...!

LV 11

Ayona_midnight

Hey everyone... I read this story this morning and just had to tell you at first sight I fell in love with the book.... The writing style of the author is great and really pulls you in. But after about five to six chapters the story takes a weird change and is getting a little difficult to follow... I would request the author to remember edit the story to keep up with the former and the latter chapters.... otherwise... It's an amazing story and has great potential. 😀😀😀

LV 5

dumdum007

The story has got me hooked. I just read thirty chapters in on go. Just looveeee it. I like how the plot build ups. You won't find much grammatical errors in it and willl definitely love the sotyy.

LV 14

Overlord_Venus

Hmm, the title itself is a debatable topic. The story execution is interesting with the style of writing feels as if they were a written form of my own thoughts. Your writing skills are good but I took away a star for your grammar. Just get an editor and the quality of your story would improve further. Good luck with your future writing.

LV 11

_Rain

I loved the whole concept of online dating.. and to be honest, this story was too good to be real😂😂. It makes one wonder how good it would be if this kind of story happens in reality , to find such a good guy/ girl who sacrifices so much for each other. I binge read this and have loved it so far. I did think it was fast paced and needs more faceslapping moments but it gives a good feeling while reading it. Curious to know the end of this story so will read it till the end❤❤❤

LV 10

FrozenSynapses

I enjoy the story! I'm not much for romantic novels, but I can tell that is one has a great story to it and has potential as it grows on. Check out Grammarly (I use it so much...) if you want to get better with sentence structure, typos, etc. It highlights all of that information and makes it clear when you do accidentally mess up. I look forward to the progression of the story.