Classmancers - A MOBA Esport Story

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DarkClaymore

I see it's a tradition for authors to post a review on their novels, so why not. This is my third web novel series. Some of you may have comes across "How Do You QA Test a Tsundere Android?!" or "God Vessel Online", most likely on RoyalRoads. Can't say any of my fics ever achieved much popularity, though. This is a very experimental story, since nobody else seem to be interested in writing proper Esport stories. That's why I went "I'll do it myself then!" It's pretty challenging to pull this off without any reference to go by, but I'm doing what I can. Any critique, both positive and negative, is more than welcome. I need as much feedback as possible to figure out how to best write this unusual novel. No way I'll be able to figure everything out on my own. RELEASE SCHEDULE: A 3k~5k words chapter a week. GAME WIKI: https://classmancers.wikia.com/ HOMEPAGE: https://darkclaymore.wordpress.com/classmancers/

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Get_rekt

Its interesting, for some moba player will think this novel refreshing, and for non moba player they will know why moba is very interesting. Just try 5 chp or more before judge it

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smilingdepression

I legit just like this book lol amazing story and something new compared to the usual system bs.therefore this story is something new and refreshing for me .

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xWinter

As a Master's (Top 500) League of Legends player in Season 8, I would think I have an edge over other readers in this certain type of genre, so here are my two cents on the novel. The novel itself is great, I thoroughly enjoyed each of the chapters. Good writing along with good pacing makes the story an interesting read. It has decent enough characters and game backstory to make it enjoyable. The story does seem unrealistic to a certain sense. I think a good MOBA story boils down to how much the author itself understands the genre of MOBA's. Although he does explain the basic nitty-gritty of game mechanics, he fails to mention any important or groundbreaking that players with more skill would notice, and that will have an effect on how far the novel can progress linearly. It's fine since these guys are middle schoolers and are still learning about the game, but if he wants to bring this novel from a lighthearted read to an actual quality MOBA novel, it's going to take a lot of work. Overall, still a good read. There's no other MOBA novel to compare this to, so I guess it is a staple. There are things that could be improved, but the things the author does writes, he does correctly.

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rg1400

its a brilliant story may take a few more chapters to attract many more readers but will surely be popular before long. MOBA esports are still new to many people. So, its acceptable that this story takes its time to succeed. its rich in content, excitement and overall totally worth its penny.

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AoGuang

Truly a great story with a lot of untapped potential. The story, so far, has shown that the main character, Yuel, is strong and not invincible, which is a redeeming quality as it allows alot of different and unique situations. The characters are all different in there own rights. Overall its a great story and has many ways that author can take it

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Doohie

First off this is really well written. Writing about MOBA's can get tricky because you risk a massive info dump, but I think the author has done a great job of it while keeping it interesting. I like the character types, but I feel they are too rigid in their archetype, I would have liked a little more gray and less black/white. Still that is fine and the archetype for the mc is particularly interesting. My real problem with the characters is their age vs how they behave/talk, they definitely behave/talk above their age. I hope the author continues doing such a good job and we get to see a really good coming of age story.

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Daoist_Rei

I never review novel before, so i dont know what should i say as well, all i can say is, this novel got a really nice story, nice development, nice character, and many relateable thing if you play some sort of MOBA, author itself have a very consistent update schedule, the quality of story itself keep improving instead of becoming worse like most of series, i cant really think about any cons of this series except for i cant read new chapter everyday haha, Quality > Quantity though.

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daoist_om

The novel has an almost professional feel, even though it is not my type of novel, I will definitely check it out for future updates, the characters have a motivation and more importantly, they feel real. The mc might come off as a bit of douche in the initial chapters but that's ok, and world building is very good. and I feel like there is a conspiracy behind the pushing of this game to the mainstream schools if you like gaming novels then this is a must for you to check it out.

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BoredPanda

WRITING QUALITY 5 STARS: I just can't spot some errors in your work, IT'S PERFECT!!!!! STABILITY UPDATES 3 STARS: Released Ch1 on the month of July and the latest 19 hours ago. The release is not steady. STORY DEVELOPMENT 5 STARS: In the first Chapters, there's already going on, since the plot is unique, the development in this story is refreshing... I just crave for more. CHARACTER DESIGN 4 STARS: As the story goes on, you will gradually be able to get to know the Characters personality. WORLD BACKGROUND 5 STARS: A normal world, no magic or something, just technology. Gave it 5 stars since WE can relate to it. When I read the First Charpter, I added it immediately on my Library.. It is simply promising

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M_A_Ilmi

Author I gotta give you a thumbs up. I'm not a fan of the video game genre but once I read your first chap you had me hooked. --------------------------

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Madpianista

This story has developed to be one of my favorite must-read in this website. One of the major points on its favor, is its originality. I've never ever read or even heard of something like this, and for that i congratulate you.

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BlueBlazingFire

A MUST READ ORIGINAL IMHO The story is good. A classic turn on a MOBA story. Even with less real world things the character developments are one of the best. The level of detail inside the game is very good. The characters are also well made up. Instead of just focusing on a main character the story is about a group of friends which is a welcome change. Please review and pour some power stones for the recognition of this story.

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GodsHolyWisdom

Really enjoyed the first chapter I can't wait to read more of it in the future. I've been looking for a good novel like this that has sports but not one that has a system. This is something new and I'm willing to sit back and read this story as the days go by.

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M8Asura

nice idea and nice reading but com on you wrot 500 chapter but its like i only read 50 your puting a way to more detailling on the matchs

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quicksilv

This book is a lot of fun. Its amazing how much you can write about each game. I often forget our lovely players are still so young. Nothing has made me want to play a MOBA game more then this book

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LuckyGuy

Do you like e-sports?Do you like MOBA?Do you like videogames? If your answer is yes to any of those an questions then give this novel a try i believe you will like the story.

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Get_rekt

Da best story i have read yo! Lol, i love this series too much, i think this novel should get to published wkwkwk, i really. The character grow slowly and steady, yet its not boring af. The mc is not so op, it have the strong side and bad side. Honestly if u are a moba player, this novel should be on your MUST READ library

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Luontopolku

Wonderful and very deep character background, development and interaction in a normal way. This sets the standard very high and makes a big difference to many novels which only follow the viewpoint of the main character. The game that is being played in the novel is based on DotA and LoL, which makes it easier to follow the story. The world background gives a small minus as it isn't brought up that much, but I guess it isn't possible either as it would be similar, if not identical to Earth. Simply a wonderful read if you have the patience to wait for updates, as the chapters are also quite long!