Spider-Man WEB OF Multivesal Heroes:Persona Nexus

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DragonChaos_2000

I wouldn't be shameless and Say My FanFic is best as I still lack some work on My writing also But it Still And will hold Its own. The story I am writing is quite good I will try to not mess up please give me suggestions through out this journey

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Najicablitz626

I love the story and its direction. I like how it tackles what happens when Peter stops being Spider-Man and seeing the different reactions of the people around him. The gripe I have though is the incorrect grammar. I recommend using Grammarly to help clean up the text a bit. The text spacing could also be adjusted for readability and there are unnecessary indents. I also hope the different personalities in Peter could be more distinguishable in their words. I feel they all almost sound the same. This could be seen when Goku, and Natsu questioned who were the others who accepted the system. It felt copied pasted dialogue. The fight scenes could be more engaging and detailed instead of summarizing the result in a single paragraph or sentence. I hope to see more of the story and for the author to improve more in his writing.

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Hell_Bou

it's good 💯 it will better if u could upload more chapter

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ReaderCat

it's quite nice that he utilizes the powers and experiences of characters from other fictional universes. the only problem for me is that the author tries to give everyone in a scene a voice. at some point there are repetitive sentences and situations. (I'm not talking about a literal repetition, but rather a semantic repetition.) Anyway, I enjoyed reading it and I look forward to the continuation of the novel. good work, good luck author. [since my English grammar is not very good, I write with google translate. don't mind if I wrote something meaningless or illogical].

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Lordmoonlight

Yea I’m sorry first couple chapters are hard to read so I can’t follow the story no matter how hard I tried it feels basically like a translation with a over the top system

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ErenUmbra

I love the novel, but I can’t say about the update schedule because I just binged it after I found it. I like how this is going. I can’t wait for it to progress. Hopefully, you continue the story.