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This is the first time I am genuinely given a book a five star review after reading the first five chapters, no wonder this book won in the WPC JUL2023 Keep up the good work
Review made at chapter 194 Welcome to my personal and honest review of my novel, as well as a place where you can ask all your questions. There are some things I want to point out to new readers of this work, and I hope after reading this, you will be able to enjoy the novel as much as I enjoy writing it. Okay, let's go. Firstly, I want to admit that when I started writing this novel, I never really did a lot of research on ants, regrettably so. The time my protagonist spent as an ant was rather short, which upset many of my readers, causing them to drop the novel. I was more into fantasy novels where the monster protagonist ended up taking on an amazing human form, which greatly influenced me while writing this novel. I wanted my protagonist to be something similar in the hopes I could achieve the greatness I loved and idolized. Maybe if I could turn back time, I would have done better to meet all of your expectations. Partly, this was also my first successful attempt at writing a web novel. Secondly, the dialogues. Being as experienced as I am now, I fully understand and realize that dialogues are the major lifeblood of a novel. They entirely determine the direction of most of the novel, so it's not something you just write down without properly analyzing the right words to use in that moment. Regrettably, I didn't do such analysis, so the dialogues of the first couple of chapters may come off as cringy, but please bear with me. As I mentioned earlier, this was my first successful attempt at writing a web novel, so I was majorly inexperienced and unable to write something truly praiseworthy. However, it gets much better down the line, so try to bear with it. Thirdly, the storyline. Regrettably, the early chapters of this novel were penned down from sudden bursts of imagination and inspiration, so it seemed like the novel didn't have a clear direction. I fixed this around chapter 20 when I started to realize I couldn't come up with random chapters from my head and actually needed to plan everything. So hang in there until that chapter. Finally, something I'm proud of. I kind of love how I was able to not only improve all of the above but also the complexity. The novel comes off as a nice balance of evolution with a touch of Isekai fantasy, featuring battle, bloodshed, conquest. I love the way I've been able to somewhat give this world of mine a unique and intriguing history with a slight touch of mystery, tiny doses of revenge, retribution, and an excellent showcase of power. I love the way I've been able to slowly but surely craft out a personality for all of my characters—how my protagonist relates to them and the overall world-building. Although I can't go into the details because that would be giving spoilers, I can guarantee that if you try not to let the beginning stages of the novel bother you, you are in for a fairly good read.
Good read and well paced also good character variety but is it dropped?
I’m really loving the book so far now I’m only on chapter 36 at the moment but I decided to leave a review because two questions comes to mind it might come in, in the later chapters and I might just be getting ahead of myself but how many ants are in this anthill of his I know it’s in a different world and all and they are much larger but I just gotta know how many ants are there normally in anthills cuz on planet earth there ranges 20,000- 100,000 ants just per anthill not in a area just one singular anthill and here we are talking about only 100 ants in this anthill want to be evolved? Or did I miss something along the lines how many ants are total in this anthill assuming they are much larger than normal ants then are they like 1,000 to per anthill I’m just tryna understand
Hm I like the premise. I like this kind of OP evolution transformations system. I like to shut off my brain and just enjoy but sometimes ita difficult. Too many inconsistencies in the power system and characters behavior but maybe I'm rambling since I only read the free chapters. I hope the author have been improving along the writing.
there are few good books nowadays but this is the best I've read so far. 5 🌟 stars from me
this is based off of the 9 chapters I have read, it's an interesting premise but it's just not for me, he immediately becomes a human, ithe system just isn't well written at this point and it's hard for me to want to read so it's just not for me
what happened to the rewrite? it has not been updated in quite a while, can't even access the info on it and it's not listed in your info anymore. even with where the rewrite stopped, there is a disconnect between it and where the story of main book starts again. and looking at the main book chapters, there seems to a whole lot missing , it feels like to many time skips are happening in these first chapters.
I’ve read both the rewrite and this is one to see if it would improve the story and while I did enjoy the rewrite more the two stories don’t connect at all. You can read the rewrite like you suggested and then jump back into the story. With that being said why do you suggest people to read the rewrite?
world design is great and the story is pretty cool. Somewhere along the line the main character went from.. "Bullied weakling who is gaining power and building up those around him for a better life, and maybe some revenge on his past bullies" to becoming the bully that bullied him. That guy who sees himself as above everyone else, that only his opinion matters and everyone else should grovel at his feet and mercy. the power trip here is real. It's just getting depressing at this point.
Copy combination of rimuru and shiraori start eith shira from spidet while combine with timutu ftom slime but its good rn
Mild spoilers till ch 19: The biggest turn off was the character introductions and development. The MC felt very flat his motivation to grow stronger made sense but I didn't feel any weight in it. His companions development felt very rushed and his interaction with the orc tribe was also flat. The trouble he get into in the Orc Tribe was absolutely unnecessary and the MC acknowledges this. It's normal for MCs to make mistakes as it is normal but this one just didn't have enough drive behind it to make it a mistake based off feelings it was just stupid. Till Ch. 19 there is very little world background. The writing quality is alright slight spelling mistakes but not too noticeable. All in all not my type of novel I was hoping for more depth. Hopefully my review comes as helpful for the author.
Supposed to be about an ant, then turns into a human wanted, a non-human story, especially with the name of the novel
I didn't like it. Mostly because of the writing style. I found it cringy. You will find that the first couple chapters are insanely hard to get through mostly because of this one factor. Also, the story is very fast paced with almost no world building. The system also just gives the narrator explanations for free. I dropped it pretty early on and I probably won't come back if the narration doesn't get any better. Good idea just rushed and poorly executed.
When I reached Chapter 25, the translator is not translating..........؟.......................................................................
Take this with a grain of salt since this book probably isn't for me but the wrighting style felt very.. goofy, like if you enjoy the circus maybe you'll love this. Also "super gamer shop" like cmon now bro. It feels like it doesn't take itself seriously, so why should I take it seriously?
Hey I want you to know I’m about start reading your novel, but the main thing I want to say is don’t let other people tell you how to write YOUR story ok. Keep up the good work champ I wish I could write a story nice job man.
I will give this novel a solid 3 stars, I like the premise but I feel that this novel isn't for me, but I will also say what I believe would make it more for me. 1st to much slang, as far as I understood it so is the MC's age in the 15-18 age bracket. BUT the slang makes me think of him as in either of one of two groups, less than 10 and over 35. Less than 10 because it reminds me of kids who just tries to use every slang they know to try and sound older. Over 35 because it reminds me of older adults learning slang to try and be more "hip" than they actually are. It feels rather weird in how he talks to himself/us when he uses excessive amounts of slang. 2nd, is he a coward; brave one; or a loser. Which is his real him? Was his reserved nature something forced by society (bullying), and his brave persona is his real nature, OR is this a coping mechanism? 3rd, too little time is spent in his ant-form before he evolves into a human. And I personally believe that even if his human-form is because of his human soul so should it still be too early if he doesn't have any major differences (external skeleton/scales, antenna, etc.) in the human realm, since MONSTERS should be human LIKE not human. 4th, too little time is spent on the system and it's abilities, some skills/abilities would have been fun to see in the shop, how is the cost of skill bestowal decided, is it purely by strength of the parties or is it more complex than that. 5th, when writing about others which isn't in the immediate story/arc, please do that either in a separate chapter or make it easier to differentiate from the rest of the chapter with ****** or -------
i am so much excited to read this .i just read the synopsis there is everything I want now I am going to start it reading right now but I have some questions for the author is there any intimate scenes or harem and also does his classmates is gonna know that he doesn't go back to his orginal world but is the one overpowered king plz tell me
The story and MC have great potential, but the writing quality isn't detailed enough. The fight scenes are generalized, I can't picture character movement in the fights. It sounds like, they're just standing in place throwing attacks at each other. Besides that, there isn't a detail about Akun's interaction with the System, so it seems like he doesn't use it much. It doesn't show how many evolution pts he has nor how he spends them. We don't know any details about the gamer shop, what it looks like, what's in it, its limits nor how much the items are. I'd like to see more details on these things to feel more immersed in Akun's development. The glossed-over details make the writing feel rushed and inexperienced.
Aside the fact the author is Nigerian.the book is also dope 😌, been on it since yesternight.and after the first few chapters I began flowing with how it progressed.
nada tiene sentido, las cosas cambian de repente el MC no tiene consistencia y cada error en la maldita trama el author dice "magia" hay miles de historias con magia y fantasía pero tienen SENTIDO
Good book.... really good book.How did a newbie do it? nobody knows.I support the author as I found out that he's Nigerian also.
Okay, so I was sorta expecting something like Chrysalis but nothing makes sense in this novel it has potential but the author is sorta fumbling with the ideas like for example naming parts of the power system after species, its bound to be confusing though personally I understood it, the author doesnt seem to know what or how ants behave so this novel makes no sense now some ppl will be like this is fiction its not supposed to make sense but how are you supposed to enjoy the novel when ever so often you have to pause your read and smack your forehead on why stuff happens. Maybe I'm too particular or judgmental, also I have a problem with the fact mc gains a human form by just eating another ant. That's just rubbish. It has potential but if I were to compare this to something like Chrysalis it would a score over 100 ratio of 1:70 that's just how bad the first 10 or so chapters. i didn't read further but if i find the strength to read more and I start to like it, then I'll change the review. until the its 2.4 stars for me
This is the first time I am genuinely given a book a five star review after reading the first five chapters, no wonder this book won in the WPC JUL2023 Keep up the good work
Review made at chapter 194 Welcome to my personal and honest review of my novel, as well as a place where you can ask all your questions. There are some things I want to point out to new readers of this work, and I hope after reading this, you will be able to enjoy the novel as much as I enjoy writing it. Okay, let's go. Firstly, I want to admit that when I started writing this novel, I never really did a lot of research on ants, regrettably so. The time my protagonist spent as an ant was rather short, which upset many of my readers, causing them to drop the novel. I was more into fantasy novels where the monster protagonist ended up taking on an amazing human form, which greatly influenced me while writing this novel. I wanted my protagonist to be something similar in the hopes I could achieve the greatness I loved and idolized. Maybe if I could turn back time, I would have done better to meet all of your expectations. Partly, this was also my first successful attempt at writing a web novel. Secondly, the dialogues. Being as experienced as I am now, I fully understand and realize that dialogues are the major lifeblood of a novel. They entirely determine the direction of most of the novel, so it's not something you just write down without properly analyzing the right words to use in that moment. Regrettably, I didn't do such analysis, so the dialogues of the first couple of chapters may come off as cringy, but please bear with me. As I mentioned earlier, this was my first successful attempt at writing a web novel, so I was majorly inexperienced and unable to write something truly praiseworthy. However, it gets much better down the line, so try to bear with it. Thirdly, the storyline. Regrettably, the early chapters of this novel were penned down from sudden bursts of imagination and inspiration, so it seemed like the novel didn't have a clear direction. I fixed this around chapter 20 when I started to realize I couldn't come up with random chapters from my head and actually needed to plan everything. So hang in there until that chapter. Finally, something I'm proud of. I kind of love how I was able to not only improve all of the above but also the complexity. The novel comes off as a nice balance of evolution with a touch of Isekai fantasy, featuring battle, bloodshed, conquest. I love the way I've been able to somewhat give this world of mine a unique and intriguing history with a slight touch of mystery, tiny doses of revenge, retribution, and an excellent showcase of power. I love the way I've been able to slowly but surely craft out a personality for all of my characters—how my protagonist relates to them and the overall world-building. Although I can't go into the details because that would be giving spoilers, I can guarantee that if you try not to let the beginning stages of the novel bother you, you are in for a fairly good read.
Good read and well paced also good character variety but is it dropped?
I’m really loving the book so far now I’m only on chapter 36 at the moment but I decided to leave a review because two questions comes to mind it might come in, in the later chapters and I might just be getting ahead of myself but how many ants are in this anthill of his I know it’s in a different world and all and they are much larger but I just gotta know how many ants are there normally in anthills cuz on planet earth there ranges 20,000- 100,000 ants just per anthill not in a area just one singular anthill and here we are talking about only 100 ants in this anthill want to be evolved? Or did I miss something along the lines how many ants are total in this anthill assuming they are much larger than normal ants then are they like 1,000 to per anthill I’m just tryna understand
Hm I like the premise. I like this kind of OP evolution transformations system. I like to shut off my brain and just enjoy but sometimes ita difficult. Too many inconsistencies in the power system and characters behavior but maybe I'm rambling since I only read the free chapters. I hope the author have been improving along the writing.
there are few good books nowadays but this is the best I've read so far. 5 🌟 stars from me
this is based off of the 9 chapters I have read, it's an interesting premise but it's just not for me, he immediately becomes a human, ithe system just isn't well written at this point and it's hard for me to want to read so it's just not for me
what happened to the rewrite? it has not been updated in quite a while, can't even access the info on it and it's not listed in your info anymore. even with where the rewrite stopped, there is a disconnect between it and where the story of main book starts again. and looking at the main book chapters, there seems to a whole lot missing , it feels like to many time skips are happening in these first chapters.
I’ve read both the rewrite and this is one to see if it would improve the story and while I did enjoy the rewrite more the two stories don’t connect at all. You can read the rewrite like you suggested and then jump back into the story. With that being said why do you suggest people to read the rewrite?
world design is great and the story is pretty cool. Somewhere along the line the main character went from.. "Bullied weakling who is gaining power and building up those around him for a better life, and maybe some revenge on his past bullies" to becoming the bully that bullied him. That guy who sees himself as above everyone else, that only his opinion matters and everyone else should grovel at his feet and mercy. the power trip here is real. It's just getting depressing at this point.
Copy combination of rimuru and shiraori start eith shira from spidet while combine with timutu ftom slime but its good rn
Mild spoilers till ch 19: The biggest turn off was the character introductions and development. The MC felt very flat his motivation to grow stronger made sense but I didn't feel any weight in it. His companions development felt very rushed and his interaction with the orc tribe was also flat. The trouble he get into in the Orc Tribe was absolutely unnecessary and the MC acknowledges this. It's normal for MCs to make mistakes as it is normal but this one just didn't have enough drive behind it to make it a mistake based off feelings it was just stupid. Till Ch. 19 there is very little world background. The writing quality is alright slight spelling mistakes but not too noticeable. All in all not my type of novel I was hoping for more depth. Hopefully my review comes as helpful for the author.
Supposed to be about an ant, then turns into a human wanted, a non-human story, especially with the name of the novel
I didn't like it. Mostly because of the writing style. I found it cringy. You will find that the first couple chapters are insanely hard to get through mostly because of this one factor. Also, the story is very fast paced with almost no world building. The system also just gives the narrator explanations for free. I dropped it pretty early on and I probably won't come back if the narration doesn't get any better. Good idea just rushed and poorly executed.
When I reached Chapter 25, the translator is not translating..........؟.......................................................................
Take this with a grain of salt since this book probably isn't for me but the wrighting style felt very.. goofy, like if you enjoy the circus maybe you'll love this. Also "super gamer shop" like cmon now bro. It feels like it doesn't take itself seriously, so why should I take it seriously?
Hey I want you to know I’m about start reading your novel, but the main thing I want to say is don’t let other people tell you how to write YOUR story ok. Keep up the good work champ I wish I could write a story nice job man.
I will give this novel a solid 3 stars, I like the premise but I feel that this novel isn't for me, but I will also say what I believe would make it more for me. 1st to much slang, as far as I understood it so is the MC's age in the 15-18 age bracket. BUT the slang makes me think of him as in either of one of two groups, less than 10 and over 35. Less than 10 because it reminds me of kids who just tries to use every slang they know to try and sound older. Over 35 because it reminds me of older adults learning slang to try and be more "hip" than they actually are. It feels rather weird in how he talks to himself/us when he uses excessive amounts of slang. 2nd, is he a coward; brave one; or a loser. Which is his real him? Was his reserved nature something forced by society (bullying), and his brave persona is his real nature, OR is this a coping mechanism? 3rd, too little time is spent in his ant-form before he evolves into a human. And I personally believe that even if his human-form is because of his human soul so should it still be too early if he doesn't have any major differences (external skeleton/scales, antenna, etc.) in the human realm, since MONSTERS should be human LIKE not human. 4th, too little time is spent on the system and it's abilities, some skills/abilities would have been fun to see in the shop, how is the cost of skill bestowal decided, is it purely by strength of the parties or is it more complex than that. 5th, when writing about others which isn't in the immediate story/arc, please do that either in a separate chapter or make it easier to differentiate from the rest of the chapter with ****** or -------
i am so much excited to read this .i just read the synopsis there is everything I want now I am going to start it reading right now but I have some questions for the author is there any intimate scenes or harem and also does his classmates is gonna know that he doesn't go back to his orginal world but is the one overpowered king plz tell me
The story and MC have great potential, but the writing quality isn't detailed enough. The fight scenes are generalized, I can't picture character movement in the fights. It sounds like, they're just standing in place throwing attacks at each other. Besides that, there isn't a detail about Akun's interaction with the System, so it seems like he doesn't use it much. It doesn't show how many evolution pts he has nor how he spends them. We don't know any details about the gamer shop, what it looks like, what's in it, its limits nor how much the items are. I'd like to see more details on these things to feel more immersed in Akun's development. The glossed-over details make the writing feel rushed and inexperienced.
Aside the fact the author is Nigerian.the book is also dope 😌, been on it since yesternight.and after the first few chapters I began flowing with how it progressed.
nada tiene sentido, las cosas cambian de repente el MC no tiene consistencia y cada error en la maldita trama el author dice "magia" hay miles de historias con magia y fantasía pero tienen SENTIDO
Good book.... really good book.How did a newbie do it? nobody knows.I support the author as I found out that he's Nigerian also.
Okay, so I was sorta expecting something like Chrysalis but nothing makes sense in this novel it has potential but the author is sorta fumbling with the ideas like for example naming parts of the power system after species, its bound to be confusing though personally I understood it, the author doesnt seem to know what or how ants behave so this novel makes no sense now some ppl will be like this is fiction its not supposed to make sense but how are you supposed to enjoy the novel when ever so often you have to pause your read and smack your forehead on why stuff happens. Maybe I'm too particular or judgmental, also I have a problem with the fact mc gains a human form by just eating another ant. That's just rubbish. It has potential but if I were to compare this to something like Chrysalis it would a score over 100 ratio of 1:70 that's just how bad the first 10 or so chapters. i didn't read further but if i find the strength to read more and I start to like it, then I'll change the review. until the its 2.4 stars for me
one of the best novels I've read yet, keep up the good work.