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I have read 5 chapters and it’s just too painful to read. Paragraphs are too long and too many random thoughts that I can’t keep up with…...
nice novel. worth reading. Sad no new novels. ..............................................................................................................
Be able to write a novel like this, great work author! I’d love to see more. Do you have a discord for readers to join or any other social media I can follow?
A good novel, at least a monster behaves like a monster, although the author is inexperienced with descriptions and narrations, but with time I hope he improves
I completely love it and I've definitely gotten some more inspiration from it definitely would reread it if I ever found myself needing a good story to read
Overall an amazing novel that while filled with death and war still doesn't take itself too seriously. the ending is a bit anti-climatic but is still good for a laugh
Feels unnecessarily stretched in places. The author could also use an editor.. or even just a proof reader. Overall I found the read an enjoyable one and was vaguely addicted to the premise. However... that ending... after all of that build up has me choking a bit on rage. Am genuinely interested in seeing what else he's come up with.
still editing inprogress? can't wait to read it. ignore the letters bellow i just type it so that i can post my comment oeosudnwiwisushai8dhdhehei9dhdnenwos9dudbeneiosudhdbenwiso8duhdnwwow972h2b2jsosihe ebejdinsisosubebwn
Just going to say that this story should get a manga with some changes for copyright reasons. And then an anime. If any of you future people who reads this review has the ability to make it happend please do. And please change the ending. 10/10
For a free story, the best I have read so far. If I compare with the paid ones it is still one of the best, it doesn't make the mc to overpowered to early and doesn't force a romantic interest making it leaps and bounds ahead of a lot of other system novels where the author keeps changing things and making them nice and innocent compared to what they described them in the beginning. So read and enjoy it already.
Great story, I hope u make another but slow the pace a little. exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp
The story was well laid out, although the story suddenly felt rushed in the end. The characters' personalities and how they were written was very good, loved it. I wasn't there when it was written, so I can't say anything about the upload schedule. The world itself, although explained, wasn't explored; however, seeing as it wasn't that relevant to the plot, it makes sense. Last, the writing quality: had a lot of typos, occasionally used a word incorrectly, and the way the reader sees the world (through the thoughts of the mc) was sometimes confusing and not satisfying to read. It needed clear separation between his thoughts and observations of the world. For my feelings on if the story is worth it to read, if you don't mind a quick read and aren't looking for a masterpiece, it's a good read. The biggest problem with the story is the sudden change in the progression, which abandoned everything the MC was doing and forcefully hastened the ending. This ruined the ending and made it feel not real. All the buildup was removed and made it seem like just another unimportant battle. Aaaand~ that's my review.
$115,500 for the Best Adventure Novels +Get Hardcover Publish Hey Writers! Come to check out this adventure novel writing competition, both new and published stories can participate! This competition is mainly looking for four genres: Fantasy, Urban, Game, and Sci-fi. You can either submit your published works, rewrite some previous ideas, or create a new story if any given examples or tips inspired you! Web-fiction or Light Novel writing experience is desired, so you might be the winner! For more information, you may visit: https://bit.ly/2ObQnRy or contact Email lise.work2021@gmail.com
It may sound kinda impudent, but I would like to know if you wrote this story in your first language and used Google Translator afterwards. Honestly the grammar and syntax is tiring to read and I've already lost interest as of chapter 8. It heard this will improve, but I'm sceptical this may really get better and the beginning is bad enough I'm not interested in finding out. Until now this wasn't constructive critique, so my recommendation: You should really rework the beginning, it is the most important in catching the readers interest. No matter how much the grammar and syntax will improve and no matter how interesting this story will be, with a beginning this bad many readers will be repulsed. Should I be starved enough for new stories to begin a new one which I didn't read before because of my standards, then I would only consider your novel after reading raw novels with Google Translate, as there are plenty novels with better grammar using it.
the writing quality was bad (but not as bad as some fanfiction I've read) storylines were picked up and dropped randomly but...I was entertained. I really was despite all the problems I kept wanting to continue. I can't say I would recommend it to my friends but I can say I enjoyed it like junk food and was kinda sad when it ended and I had nothing left even though I thought it had dragged on way to long and the author stopped caring in the past arc.
Not the greatest story, but overall I really enjoyed it. Another great read to add to the list of finished storied I've read. I enjoy the dark themed novels, if you do as well I recommend giving this a try, or atleast the first few chapters.
the cover is some serious nightmare fuel ..................................................................................................................................
It's an amazing book. I think the world background is nicely made and I like the similarity to Warhammer. The only think I can really criticize is the ending, because it is way to gripping and makes it a little gruel without a next part. Thanks for the great work
ı wan't to say that this novel was an exciting adventure, and that ı can't wait for more! .......................................................................................................................................................................
Amazing book I highly recommend it to anyone who wants to read it. There is adventure and magic in this wonder full novel. I also really enjoy the inhuman aspect of it. Great work author!
Although it's rough around the edges it will most likely be very popular try using Grammarly it's free to use also good storyline it's quite entertaining.
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We can all agree for those who have read the whole book that the author just started tripping when the god the MC had was killed off. But, the other part was actually gold! If the author would review and start from there, I think he would have a very interesting book.
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i mean honesty i really liked it but the ending was kinda shi** like i actully like the beggining and middle but the way it ended it just wasnt worth the coins like spoiler but he goes back in time where he went into the duel thing and yea after he was eaten by the huge monster shark thingy like it ended there idk its idk the ending made it not worth it.
Revelar Spoiler
great novel, too short, but a great read, selfish MC only doing things that benefit him, great world building, great ending hoping for a sequel or another one like this
pretty good, reminds me of that one where girl becomes spider but this one feels better ....................................................
Hey Mr Auther could you put some warhammer skaven DOOM engineers and PLAGUE Doctors, please.. .. .. ... ...... .. .. .. .. .. .. .. ...... .
Many writers tend to use a system that involves a protagonist with low intelligence and gods that can be easily manipulated. As a result, a lot of low-quality content ends up being published on web novel platforms. Readers are often faced with clichéd hero/villain or harem stories where conflicts are resolved solely through the power of friendship.
I have read 5 chapters and it’s just too painful to read. Paragraphs are too long and too many random thoughts that I can’t keep up with…...
nice novel. worth reading. Sad no new novels. ..............................................................................................................
Be able to write a novel like this, great work author! I’d love to see more. Do you have a discord for readers to join or any other social media I can follow?
A good novel, at least a monster behaves like a monster, although the author is inexperienced with descriptions and narrations, but with time I hope he improves
I completely love it and I've definitely gotten some more inspiration from it definitely would reread it if I ever found myself needing a good story to read
Overall an amazing novel that while filled with death and war still doesn't take itself too seriously. the ending is a bit anti-climatic but is still good for a laugh
Feels unnecessarily stretched in places. The author could also use an editor.. or even just a proof reader. Overall I found the read an enjoyable one and was vaguely addicted to the premise. However... that ending... after all of that build up has me choking a bit on rage. Am genuinely interested in seeing what else he's come up with.
still editing inprogress? can't wait to read it. ignore the letters bellow i just type it so that i can post my comment oeosudnwiwisushai8dhdhehei9dhdnenwos9dudbeneiosudhdbenwiso8duhdnwwow972h2b2jsosihe ebejdinsisosubebwn
Just going to say that this story should get a manga with some changes for copyright reasons. And then an anime. If any of you future people who reads this review has the ability to make it happend please do. And please change the ending. 10/10
For a free story, the best I have read so far. If I compare with the paid ones it is still one of the best, it doesn't make the mc to overpowered to early and doesn't force a romantic interest making it leaps and bounds ahead of a lot of other system novels where the author keeps changing things and making them nice and innocent compared to what they described them in the beginning. So read and enjoy it already.
Great story, I hope u make another but slow the pace a little. exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp
The story was well laid out, although the story suddenly felt rushed in the end. The characters' personalities and how they were written was very good, loved it. I wasn't there when it was written, so I can't say anything about the upload schedule. The world itself, although explained, wasn't explored; however, seeing as it wasn't that relevant to the plot, it makes sense. Last, the writing quality: had a lot of typos, occasionally used a word incorrectly, and the way the reader sees the world (through the thoughts of the mc) was sometimes confusing and not satisfying to read. It needed clear separation between his thoughts and observations of the world. For my feelings on if the story is worth it to read, if you don't mind a quick read and aren't looking for a masterpiece, it's a good read. The biggest problem with the story is the sudden change in the progression, which abandoned everything the MC was doing and forcefully hastened the ending. This ruined the ending and made it feel not real. All the buildup was removed and made it seem like just another unimportant battle. Aaaand~ that's my review.
$115,500 for the Best Adventure Novels +Get Hardcover Publish Hey Writers! Come to check out this adventure novel writing competition, both new and published stories can participate! This competition is mainly looking for four genres: Fantasy, Urban, Game, and Sci-fi. You can either submit your published works, rewrite some previous ideas, or create a new story if any given examples or tips inspired you! Web-fiction or Light Novel writing experience is desired, so you might be the winner! For more information, you may visit: https://bit.ly/2ObQnRy or contact Email lise.work2021@gmail.com
It may sound kinda impudent, but I would like to know if you wrote this story in your first language and used Google Translator afterwards. Honestly the grammar and syntax is tiring to read and I've already lost interest as of chapter 8. It heard this will improve, but I'm sceptical this may really get better and the beginning is bad enough I'm not interested in finding out. Until now this wasn't constructive critique, so my recommendation: You should really rework the beginning, it is the most important in catching the readers interest. No matter how much the grammar and syntax will improve and no matter how interesting this story will be, with a beginning this bad many readers will be repulsed. Should I be starved enough for new stories to begin a new one which I didn't read before because of my standards, then I would only consider your novel after reading raw novels with Google Translate, as there are plenty novels with better grammar using it.
the writing quality was bad (but not as bad as some fanfiction I've read) storylines were picked up and dropped randomly but...I was entertained. I really was despite all the problems I kept wanting to continue. I can't say I would recommend it to my friends but I can say I enjoyed it like junk food and was kinda sad when it ended and I had nothing left even though I thought it had dragged on way to long and the author stopped caring in the past arc.
Not the greatest story, but overall I really enjoyed it. Another great read to add to the list of finished storied I've read. I enjoy the dark themed novels, if you do as well I recommend giving this a try, or atleast the first few chapters.
the cover is some serious nightmare fuel ..................................................................................................................................
It's an amazing book. I think the world background is nicely made and I like the similarity to Warhammer. The only think I can really criticize is the ending, because it is way to gripping and makes it a little gruel without a next part. Thanks for the great work
ı wan't to say that this novel was an exciting adventure, and that ı can't wait for more! .......................................................................................................................................................................
Amazing book I highly recommend it to anyone who wants to read it. There is adventure and magic in this wonder full novel. I also really enjoy the inhuman aspect of it. Great work author!
Although it's rough around the edges it will most likely be very popular try using Grammarly it's free to use also good storyline it's quite entertaining.
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We can all agree for those who have read the whole book that the author just started tripping when the god the MC had was killed off. But, the other part was actually gold! If the author would review and start from there, I think he would have a very interesting book.
Revelar Spoiler i mean honesty i really liked it but the ending was kinda shi** like i actully like the beggining and middle but the way it ended it just wasnt worth the coins like spoiler but he goes back in time where he went into the duel thing and yea after he was eaten by the huge monster shark thingy like it ended there idk its idk the ending made it not worth it.
Revelar Spoiler great novel, too short, but a great read, selfish MC only doing things that benefit him, great world building, great ending hoping for a sequel or another one like this
pretty good, reminds me of that one where girl becomes spider but this one feels better ....................................................
Hey Mr Auther could you put some warhammer skaven DOOM engineers and PLAGUE Doctors, please.. .. .. ... ...... .. .. .. .. .. .. .. ...... .
Many writers tend to use a system that involves a protagonist with low intelligence and gods that can be easily manipulated. As a result, a lot of low-quality content ends up being published on web novel platforms. Readers are often faced with clichéd hero/villain or harem stories where conflicts are resolved solely through the power of friendship.