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He reached out in a desperate attempt to snatch it from the precipice. With a heart-stopping silence, the gold coin slipped from his grasp and plummeted into the darkness below. Reynolds scooted back in shock, now on his ass, letting out an "AH!" His startled yell reverberated through the cave.

Terrarian: Sons of Babel

Terrarian: Sons of Babel

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Usurper23
8 months ago
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Descriptive chance

"Captain, It's a skeleton! No, Skeletons!" yelled Reynolds.

Terrarian: Sons of Babel

Terrarian: Sons of Babel

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8 months ago
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Imma come back to correct this

Human voices appeared in the darkness, telling Nick that everyone was trying to kill him and that nobody cared whether he lived or died.

Kill the Sun

Kill the Sun

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Usurper23
8 months ago
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I think I can add more content here

Now trying to break free from the nightmarish ordeal!

Terrarian: Sons of Babel

Terrarian: Sons of Babel

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Usurper23
8 months ago
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Can be detailed better

Four men plummeted to the ground, darts protruding from their bodies. One struggled with a dart through his neck, gasping for small breaths as it embedded in his shoulders.

Terrarian: Sons of Babel

Terrarian: Sons of Babel

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Usurper23
8 months ago
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Certain Sceintific inspiration huh 💀

Wyntor nodded. "Three of the level nine Specters are unmissable. I can guarantee you that almost everyone has seen the three of them in their life before. Do you know the other two?"

Kill the Sun

Kill the Sun

Fantasy · Warmaisach

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Usurper23
8 months ago
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Avoid senses like hearing and ears, 3rd person doesn’t not know what the first person characters hear or feel only show

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Terrarian: Sons of Babel

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Usurper23
8 months ago
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Add ambience

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Terrarian: Sons of Babel

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Usurper23
8 months ago
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Move into dialogue

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Terrarian: Sons of Babel

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Switch with paragraph underneath

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Terrarian: Sons of Babel

Terrarian: Sons of Babel

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    Terrarian: Sons of Babel

    Action SYSTEM COMEDY MAGIC WEAKTOSTRONG DARK SURVIVAL

    After the fall of Babel, The prophet Daniel warned the fleeing people of great pains and beasts over the earth. The people fell into groups developing tribes associated with their languages, each gifted with their resources and abilities. In the event, two brother nations gifted with Ferocious resources, grow into a heated war. Ages of conflict lead to mercenaries carrying out their attacks in hopes of securing wealth and immunity, however, they discover the growing treachery of Daniel's warning, finding beasts, both men, and monsters.

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