Nalzaar

Nalzaar

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I'm a high schooler trying to write a story and make a game out of it one day. I'm busy with school so the story will take me a while to write and upload.

2024-02-17 Joined United States
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Nalzaar
Nalzaar
5 months ago
Commented

Welp, they're all cooked. Edward done been having a warehouse for a while now. [img=proud]

Nalzaar
Nalzaar
5 months ago
Replied to Karnhell

That one dude is going to be fuming with jealousy. [img=proud]

[Reward Four: Your name and your glorious achievements will shine in the island's chat channels, inspiring other professionals to forge ahead.]

Lord of the Winged Beauties

Lord of the Winged Beauties

Fantasy · BlazeMaddox

Nalzaar
Nalzaar
6 months ago
Commented

Bro wasn't about to go name 36 angels [img=recommend]

Nalzaar
Nalzaar
6 months ago
Replied to SSJRED

He 's a different breed 😂

And before Rhys could finish his words, he slightly covered his ears as he caught a whiff of something — and it wasn't the other humans who were being captive there.

Rise of the Eromancer

Rise of the Eromancer

Urban · Romeru

Nalzaar
Nalzaar
6 months ago
Commented

Let's go, we're already starting off with an army.

Nalzaar
Nalzaar
8 months ago
Commented

I'll probably write more chapters in the perspectives of other characters. BTW, 3 of the love interests have already been mentioned.

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Nalzaar
Nalzaar
8 months ago
Replied to Midn1ght2

Oh, I haven't watched that in a while. I should probably start watching that new season.

"I am a herald of equality between men and women. And as an assassin, I really don't care if you possess a vagina or penis."

Assassin's Dark Revenge

Assassin's Dark Revenge

Action · Midn1ght2

Nalzaar
Nalzaar
8 months ago
Commented

Nah, that's actually crazy and funny. [img=recommend]

"I am a herald of equality between men and women. And as an assassin, I really don't care if you possess a vagina or penis."

Assassin's Dark Revenge

Assassin's Dark Revenge

Action · Midn1ght2

Nalzaar
Nalzaar
8 months ago
Posted

It's an alright story for me. I like the world background and how we have eliras, which give extraordinary powers to those that have them. I do have some problems though. First (although I'm not too hung up on this), there's a few spelling and grammar errors here and there. And also, the main character tries to seem like some pro assassin who's cold hearted and stuff like that, but he tends to get so emotional and likes cracking jokes (which sound cringe imo), but that is only my personal opinion. So overall it's pretty alright and I wouldn't say it's anywhere close to being bad. It just depends on the reader.

Nalzaar
Nalzaar
8 months ago
Posted

I was honestly planning on shamelessly giving myself a five star review but I decided to give myself an honest review of my own story. It took me over a month to start posting again, but I did start posting daily, so 4 stars for that. I can't really say about character design so 3 stars. This is my first work, so I suck at writing quality and story development, but I wouldn't say it's hopeless, so 4 stars.

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